for Betrayal11/26/2012 c7 anonymous
are they planning to drop a rock from a cliff? to be honest, i dont like how ember turned bad so quickly. please update!
are they planning to drop a rock from a cliff? to be honest, i dont like how ember turned bad so quickly. please update!
8/12/2012 c7 
25Hammsters
Whoa, **, I didn't realize you'd updated this. Okay, so I know I'm a little late, but could you update soon? Please? I wanna know what happens next!
25HammstersWhoa, **, I didn't realize you'd updated this. Okay, so I know I'm a little late, but could you update soon? Please? I wanna know what happens next!
6/24/2012 c7 2FadedSunset
This is really good! I really wanna see Ralph's reaction when he realizes its all a trick.
Update soon!
2FadedSunsetThis is really good! I really wanna see Ralph's reaction when he realizes its all a trick.
Update soon!
5/26/2012 c6 Bella
When is the next chapter
When is the next chapter
3/3/2012 c6 25Hammsters
Ooooooooh, this is getting juuuuuuuuuuiiiiiicy! And yay, it's been a while since you updated, so I was excited to see this! Update soon!
25HammstersOoooooooh, this is getting juuuuuuuuuuiiiiiicy! And yay, it's been a while since you updated, so I was excited to see this! Update soon!
1/22/2012 c2 DawnScarlet19610
You changed way too much... Everything is so Mary-Sue. It's so bad now. It's like 50 years ahead of time.
You changed way too much... Everything is so Mary-Sue. It's so bad now. It's like 50 years ahead of time.
1/22/2012 c1 DawnScarlet19610
I don't really undersant what kind of clothes Ember is wearing. You do realise that women didn't dress that way in the time of the book, right? Also, the plane ride is evacuation for the war. Not a choir trip...
I don't really undersant what kind of clothes Ember is wearing. You do realise that women didn't dress that way in the time of the book, right? Also, the plane ride is evacuation for the war. Not a choir trip...
1/18/2012 c5 Hammsters
Hahahahaha! Loved that scene at the end and the friendship with Roger is adorable! Plus, I liked when the littlun said "it'll enter her too!" Teehee, that sounds dirty. I'm so mature aren't I? Haha, update soon!
Hahahahaha! Loved that scene at the end and the friendship with Roger is adorable! Plus, I liked when the littlun said "it'll enter her too!" Teehee, that sounds dirty. I'm so mature aren't I? Haha, update soon!
1/18/2012 c5 Random reviwer-Roger lover 3
Well hello there awesome author (: Loving this story with all my heart! You are doing a great job so please continue to update!
As for suggestion, I was thinking...
1. Maybe Ralph would tell Ember he didn't kill Simon, and Ember would fall in love with him?
2. Maybe Roger would begin to have feelings for Ember, and want her to be his girlfriend?
3. Maybe Jack would make Ember second-in-command, Roger gets jealous, and tries to sabotage her?
4. Maybe Piggy and Ember would fall in love, swim to a different island, and live happily ever after?
Okay I lied with #4 hahaha...but seriously see what you think of my suggestions! And I'll review the next chapter as well (:
-Random reviwer (Roger lover 3)
Well hello there awesome author (: Loving this story with all my heart! You are doing a great job so please continue to update!
As for suggestion, I was thinking...
1. Maybe Ralph would tell Ember he didn't kill Simon, and Ember would fall in love with him?
2. Maybe Roger would begin to have feelings for Ember, and want her to be his girlfriend?
3. Maybe Jack would make Ember second-in-command, Roger gets jealous, and tries to sabotage her?
4. Maybe Piggy and Ember would fall in love, swim to a different island, and live happily ever after?
Okay I lied with #4 hahaha...but seriously see what you think of my suggestions! And I'll review the next chapter as well (:
-Random reviwer (Roger lover 3)
1/5/2012 c4 Random reviewer
Heyyyy it's me again (: omg I freakin love this story! I really can't blame Ember for wanting to kill Ralph. She is going through such a tough time, and she believed my sadistic Roger even though I think he's lying! This other side of Ember is...dare I say it...kinda cool in a badass way haha
I like how at the end you said more Roger and violence...yes they do seem to go hand in hand haha. I hate violence, but somehow I love Roger! Good girls love bad guys...
Please update, and I'll see you next chapter!
-Random reviewer (also Roger lover 3)
Heyyyy it's me again (: omg I freakin love this story! I really can't blame Ember for wanting to kill Ralph. She is going through such a tough time, and she believed my sadistic Roger even though I think he's lying! This other side of Ember is...dare I say it...kinda cool in a badass way haha
I like how at the end you said more Roger and violence...yes they do seem to go hand in hand haha. I hate violence, but somehow I love Roger! Good girls love bad guys...
Please update, and I'll see you next chapter!
-Random reviewer (also Roger lover 3)
1/2/2012 c4 Hammsters
Whoa. That's intense. These people are absolutely bonkers!...I love it! Haha. This story is so great, I was so excited when I saw you updated. PLease update again soon!
Whoa. That's intense. These people are absolutely bonkers!...I love it! Haha. This story is so great, I was so excited when I saw you updated. PLease update again soon!
12/28/2011 c3 Hammsters
Whoooooooooaaa Nellie! This seems to be moving a little fast don't you think? Either I'm really far behind, or they're on their first two days on the island and they're already almost doing it! No offense, I still love your writing and everything, the pacing's just throwing me off a bit. And Simon! Oh, how's she gonna take the news about Simon? This is awful!
Whoooooooooaaa Nellie! This seems to be moving a little fast don't you think? Either I'm really far behind, or they're on their first two days on the island and they're already almost doing it! No offense, I still love your writing and everything, the pacing's just throwing me off a bit. And Simon! Oh, how's she gonna take the news about Simon? This is awful!
12/28/2011 c3 Random reviewer
Continuing my review (;
Awwwwwh Simon I will miss you :,( I wonder how ember will react! Will she leave Jack's tribe? Eeeeeeep the drama!
So anywho, Please update! Thanksamillion 4 my Roger ;)
Continuing my review (;
Awwwwwh Simon I will miss you :,( I wonder how ember will react! Will she leave Jack's tribe? Eeeeeeep the drama!
So anywho, Please update! Thanksamillion 4 my Roger ;)
12/28/2011 c3 Random reviewer
Omg this story is getting heated! Hot! Jack/Ember FTW! And thank you so very much for putting in more Roger! Made me so happy 3 I am so glad Ember and Jack coupled up! I'm not a huge Ralph fan haha...
Awwwwh Simon :,( I will miss y
Omg this story is getting heated! Hot! Jack/Ember FTW! And thank you so very much for putting in more Roger! Made me so happy 3 I am so glad Ember and Jack coupled up! I'm not a huge Ralph fan haha...
Awwwwh Simon :,( I will miss y