for Parents think they know whats best2/28/2012 c12 trerob28
Ok. I like the concept and storyline very much. That being said there are a couple of major things I need to point out.
1. The description of Penny's Parents' house at the beginning of Chapter 5 should have been Part of Chapter 4. Also you repeated the phone conversation between Mrs. Cooper and Penny's Mom in Chapter 5 when it was already in Chapter 4.
The beginning of Chapter 8 with It starting with Lenoard kissing a girl in front of penny's eyesight left me confused as a reader,forcing me to go back to the previous chapter in the thought that I missed something in the story. It's a big gap between Lenoard and Penny's Dad talking at the end of Chapter 7 and Lenoard all of a sudden kissing a girl who is a character the reader hasn't even met in the story yet,to start Chapter 8.
It's a nice start though.
Ok. I like the concept and storyline very much. That being said there are a couple of major things I need to point out.
1. The description of Penny's Parents' house at the beginning of Chapter 5 should have been Part of Chapter 4. Also you repeated the phone conversation between Mrs. Cooper and Penny's Mom in Chapter 5 when it was already in Chapter 4.
The beginning of Chapter 8 with It starting with Lenoard kissing a girl in front of penny's eyesight left me confused as a reader,forcing me to go back to the previous chapter in the thought that I missed something in the story. It's a big gap between Lenoard and Penny's Dad talking at the end of Chapter 7 and Lenoard all of a sudden kissing a girl who is a character the reader hasn't even met in the story yet,to start Chapter 8.
It's a nice start though.
2/20/2012 c10 
6qwerty
An interesting turn of events, I think I'm going to like we're they lead to. nice one.
6qwertyAn interesting turn of events, I think I'm going to like we're they lead to. nice one.
2/7/2012 c7 qwerty
I carn't belive you're not getting more reviews, this is a great story, what is wrong with people. anywho I like this chapter, wyatt has an idea on where to start now is great. please keep up the writing.
I carn't belive you're not getting more reviews, this is a great story, what is wrong with people. anywho I like this chapter, wyatt has an idea on where to start now is great. please keep up the writing.
1/29/2012 c6 qwerty
I just want to say I am loving this story, your doing amazing work please keep it up.
I just want to say I am loving this story, your doing amazing work please keep it up.