for Sleeping Beauty4/27 c5 Guest
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww how sweet i want to be maka so bad now plz dont judge me for what i said i just think shes epic
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww how sweet i want to be maka so bad now plz dont judge me for what i said i just think shes epic
4/27 c4 Guest
the part at the dance evil that me but i might just steal her costume for the school dance next year
the part at the dance evil that me but i might just steal her costume for the school dance next year
7/24/2012 c6 
19Sincerely The Sign Painter
Ok, You know that you can change a chapter after you write it.
Sincerely The Sign Painter
19Sincerely The Sign PainterOk, You know that you can change a chapter after you write it.
Sincerely The Sign Painter
7/22/2012 c5 Sincerely The Sign Painter
Very good!
Yes please write a sequel!
Sincerely The Sign Painter
Very good!
Yes please write a sequel!
Sincerely The Sign Painter
7/22/2012 c5 12Black-winged Angel 100
Ooops I'm so so sorry guys. It was supposed to be
"After all I couldn't live WITHOUT my meister.."
12Black-winged Angel 100Ooops I'm so so sorry guys. It was supposed to be
"After all I couldn't live WITHOUT my meister.."
7/21/2012 c5 alice
seqal now call it tenshe (it's japanese for angel. p.s. it should be centered on maka who is an angel and make soul confess to maka in it.)
seqal now call it tenshe (it's japanese for angel. p.s. it should be centered on maka who is an angel and make soul confess to maka in it.)
5/18/2012 c3 Guest
First of all, anything and everything that I say is pure suggestions and critique, so don't take anything personally.
To start, you need to update more often. Like, MUCH more. If you want reviews, updating frequently is the way to get a good bunch. Before you say that you have no motivation or blah and blah, honestly there should be no excuse. Your chapters are immensely short (no offense I can't write long ones either), so I'm confused as to why you take about six months to update a 500 worded story.
ONE more thing that concerns me a bit - even though there is three chapters and this is the first time I've read this story I'm kind of flip flopping, I'm very confused. There seems to be no plot development to this story in the least, in fact it goes from Chapter 2: JUST meeting and becoming roommates (which happens), Chapter 3: Already partners and going on a mission.
They couldn't have possibly already been partners, it's just not possible. So basically you're story is progressing WAAAAAAYYYY too fast and you need to add more details. A lot of details.
Whew, I assume that's enough. Sorry
First of all, anything and everything that I say is pure suggestions and critique, so don't take anything personally.
To start, you need to update more often. Like, MUCH more. If you want reviews, updating frequently is the way to get a good bunch. Before you say that you have no motivation or blah and blah, honestly there should be no excuse. Your chapters are immensely short (no offense I can't write long ones either), so I'm confused as to why you take about six months to update a 500 worded story.
ONE more thing that concerns me a bit - even though there is three chapters and this is the first time I've read this story I'm kind of flip flopping, I'm very confused. There seems to be no plot development to this story in the least, in fact it goes from Chapter 2: JUST meeting and becoming roommates (which happens), Chapter 3: Already partners and going on a mission.
They couldn't have possibly already been partners, it's just not possible. So basically you're story is progressing WAAAAAAYYYY too fast and you need to add more details. A lot of details.
Whew, I assume that's enough. Sorry
12/25/2011 c2 2DevilAngelScytheMiester
LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT hope you cont. i look forward to reading it again like i said LOVE IT
2DevilAngelScytheMiesterLOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT hope you cont. i look forward to reading it again like i said LOVE IT
12/25/2011 c2 3DanniWasHere
Well, I am certainly intrigued. :) I hope to see more of this fanfic. Your style seems solid without being heavy (a hard balance, as I'm sure you have seen with the occasional fanfic). The plot hasn't moved far enough for me to judge how I think it will go, but from what you have so far, I am curious as to where you're going to take it! I can't wait for an update! :D
3DanniWasHereWell, I am certainly intrigued. :) I hope to see more of this fanfic. Your style seems solid without being heavy (a hard balance, as I'm sure you have seen with the occasional fanfic). The plot hasn't moved far enough for me to judge how I think it will go, but from what you have so far, I am curious as to where you're going to take it! I can't wait for an update! :D
12/25/2011 c2 5RockerRabbit
try to make the chapters longer people love to know more but so far so good
5RockerRabbittry to make the chapters longer people love to know more but so far so good