for 66661/30/2012 c1 
8admljmc8492
Ok, im going to be honest with you, this story is ok, but it has a lot of potential. There are numerous grammar and spelling mistakes like violent, demons, bilited (?), and some others.
I would be more than happy to do some beta reading for you and help you improve your story. Accept my offer or not, the choice is yours.
8admljmc8492Ok, im going to be honest with you, this story is ok, but it has a lot of potential. There are numerous grammar and spelling mistakes like violent, demons, bilited (?), and some others.
I would be more than happy to do some beta reading for you and help you improve your story. Accept my offer or not, the choice is yours.
1/7/2012 c2 Colonel H. Stinkmeaner
I GIVE THIS SHIT A -10 out of 10 NIGGUH! This story is so bad, it makes me want to go to hell and rip one of the devils testicles off!
I GIVE THIS SHIT A -10 out of 10 NIGGUH! This story is so bad, it makes me want to go to hell and rip one of the devils testicles off!
1/7/2012 c1 Thugnificent
this story suks ass nigga.
this story suks ass nigga.