for The Little Hawk: Secrets and Changes Arc7/30/2012 c125 kpgirl13
Okay so expect a lot of reviews because I plan to review for every chapter following. First of all, I adore your story. Second, I'm guessing that you are from Europe because you say "handy" and not "cell" or "cell phone". Third, I have spent the last month in Germany and I now have every right to blame Oliver for my addiction to Cold Angels. I really hope that you keep writing even though until I get to the last chapter I get mad when you add a new one because it puts me behind farther.
Panther
Okay so expect a lot of reviews because I plan to review for every chapter following. First of all, I adore your story. Second, I'm guessing that you are from Europe because you say "handy" and not "cell" or "cell phone". Third, I have spent the last month in Germany and I now have every right to blame Oliver for my addiction to Cold Angels. I really hope that you keep writing even though until I get to the last chapter I get mad when you add a new one because it puts me behind farther.
Panther
7/29/2012 c121 JocLovee83
ASDFGHJKL Oh my gosh! Don't die on me people! I've actually grown quite fond of you over the past 121 chapters! Here Jade I hope this makes you better. *Hands an entire crate of oranges* Don't die or I'll revive you from the dead... Then kill you again! All of you! That goes for ALL OF YOU!
Ava, great story, I'm almost caught up just a few more chapters to go :)
Sincerely,
A Big Fan!
PS. Keep Writing!
ASDFGHJKL Oh my gosh! Don't die on me people! I've actually grown quite fond of you over the past 121 chapters! Here Jade I hope this makes you better. *Hands an entire crate of oranges* Don't die or I'll revive you from the dead... Then kill you again! All of you! That goes for ALL OF YOU!
Ava, great story, I'm almost caught up just a few more chapters to go :)
Sincerely,
A Big Fan!
PS. Keep Writing!
7/28/2012 c1 Pox
I would just like to say that I have read the first chapter and I quite like the first chapter. I was about to continue reading when I realised this story had 590,186 words.
Seriously, 590,186 words? I mean, wow... I want to read it, but I really don't know if I can dedicate myself to such a long fic. It'll take me AGES to read this through. So, yeah, it sounds like it could potentially be good, and the plot sounds fairly interesting, and maybe I'll TRY reading it... but it might be a good idea to keep your long stories shorter. The average novel is, like, 100 000 words or so.
I am impressed at your dedication, though! You must be a very committed writer :)
I would just like to say that I have read the first chapter and I quite like the first chapter. I was about to continue reading when I realised this story had 590,186 words.
Seriously, 590,186 words? I mean, wow... I want to read it, but I really don't know if I can dedicate myself to such a long fic. It'll take me AGES to read this through. So, yeah, it sounds like it could potentially be good, and the plot sounds fairly interesting, and maybe I'll TRY reading it... but it might be a good idea to keep your long stories shorter. The average novel is, like, 100 000 words or so.
I am impressed at your dedication, though! You must be a very committed writer :)
7/26/2012 c69 momijiinubashiri
love this story \./
love this story \./
7/26/2012 c65 momijiinubashiri
the names should be girls boys man who hit on oliver : ashido
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yuki uryu
rima senri
these are just suggestions you dont have to use them but it would be nice if you did and i appreciate you very much for writing this fanfiction story *********
Thank You
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the names should be girls boys man who hit on oliver : ashido
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yuki uryu
rima senri
these are just suggestions you dont have to use them but it would be nice if you did and i appreciate you very much for writing this fanfiction story *********
Thank You
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7/27/2012 c174 
3Sira-the-Awesome
*Telepathy Engages*
I shall not kill .
Nor shall I talk rationally to you. GOODBYE.
Tori, on the other hand is a different story. YOU ARE A BAD GIRL, YOUNG LADY AND YOU WILL LOOK AT ME AND APOLOGIZE. You may now go and relieve Jun-Jun and Chao from the Corner of Woe.
But that's all I'm saying today, because you, too, made me quite mad.
NESSA... We need to have a talk. A very serious talk...
Until Next Time... I hope you cure my speachlessness and untamable rage...
3Sira-the-Awesome*Telepathy Engages*
I shall not kill .
Nor shall I talk rationally to you. GOODBYE.
Tori, on the other hand is a different story. YOU ARE A BAD GIRL, YOUNG LADY AND YOU WILL LOOK AT ME AND APOLOGIZE. You may now go and relieve Jun-Jun and Chao from the Corner of Woe.
But that's all I'm saying today, because you, too, made me quite mad.
NESSA... We need to have a talk. A very serious talk...
Until Next Time... I hope you cure my speachlessness and untamable rage...
7/27/2012 c174 11Izaya Hewajima
Hate: Hey guys. It'll just be me and Serah today 'cuz Seri is doing homework.
Serah: She also can't fast for awhile because of *cough*period*cough.
Hate: We have done the honor of reading tho. I like Min Li. I thought the almost exactly wht she was thinking of.
Serah: That other new character is, and I quote, a f***ing b'tch. That's what Seri said. C'mon, you can have a lot of money and still be a loser. Btw Hate, didn't you go to the Devil's Nest once? *smirks*
Hate: Don't say it...
Serah: Everyone was drunk so you decided to play along.
Hate: Don't-
Serah: You and Greed got severely drunk and-
Hate: *covers Serah's mouth with liquified hand* If you make Seri continue later, I will not hesitate to bring Wrath back to life just to kill you.
Seri: *enters the scene* Hay guys! I feel twitchy like the last time Greed and Hate 'accidentaly' made out.
Hate: *release Serah and keels over* My life is ruined. I'm going to hide under Ava's bed too. Could I join you Greed?
Seri: Bye Hate! What was that all about?
Serah: Nothing
Everyone: What a cheap lie.
Seri: How the hell are we gonna get those two out?
Serah: By making them do something they hate the most. No, not make out.
Seri: Well, I need to go back to my homework. Later Goddess of Awesomeness!
11Izaya HewajimaHate: Hey guys. It'll just be me and Serah today 'cuz Seri is doing homework.
Serah: She also can't fast for awhile because of *cough*period*cough.
Hate: We have done the honor of reading tho. I like Min Li. I thought the almost exactly wht she was thinking of.
Serah: That other new character is, and I quote, a f***ing b'tch. That's what Seri said. C'mon, you can have a lot of money and still be a loser. Btw Hate, didn't you go to the Devil's Nest once? *smirks*
Hate: Don't say it...
Serah: Everyone was drunk so you decided to play along.
Hate: Don't-
Serah: You and Greed got severely drunk and-
Hate: *covers Serah's mouth with liquified hand* If you make Seri continue later, I will not hesitate to bring Wrath back to life just to kill you.
Seri: *enters the scene* Hay guys! I feel twitchy like the last time Greed and Hate 'accidentaly' made out.
Hate: *release Serah and keels over* My life is ruined. I'm going to hide under Ava's bed too. Could I join you Greed?
Seri: Bye Hate! What was that all about?
Serah: Nothing
Everyone: What a cheap lie.
Seri: How the hell are we gonna get those two out?
Serah: By making them do something they hate the most. No, not make out.
Seri: Well, I need to go back to my homework. Later Goddess of Awesomeness!
7/27/2012 c174 CallousVulpix
Do I even need to say this was an excellent chapter?:P I drink only water, too. Soda is so gross. Eh, I have way too many black and gold clothes.D: Those were my school colors... But, now I'm moving to different school, the school colors are... Orange and black! Oh my gosh, I can wear orange as much as I please! I know a Jacqueline as well. She's a snotty little rich brat. The name works well. As for that picture, I wish I had time to finish it.(And yet somehow still managed to upload two more pictures, haha. I'm shamelessly advertising obviously.) The problem is I have softball practice and I have two assignments for my Pre-AP English class already. So here I am sleeping, eating, going to softball practice, and trying to read a book and annotate it. But, I'm a procrastinator and probably will put the assignments off til a week before school starts.(Though I am already halfway through the book; I am just not sure if I annotated the right things...) Oh wow, it took you three hours to reply? I think that's around the same amount of time it took me to review, haha. I actually was on a computer at school. My mother is a teacher and does the yearbook for the school. Since she is switching schools and she makes every single yearbook.(No we don't send it in. Everything is done by her except the hardcover. But even then she has to bind the books.) She has to finish at least the amount of yearbooks pre-ordered and then some by Monday. So I am dragged along early in the morning and am in there until night when I have practice. So I get bored. Bored enough that I actually did some of my Pre-AP English assignments... Ack, I am glad it wasn't Roy or one of the kids. (Sorry Serena, when you have already died once it sort of loses it's flair.) I don't know how people read and review off their phones. It would take me forever to text a review!(Maybe it's because I ripped off half my thumb? Well... At least I got a lesson in patience...) I really need to stop rambling on and read this chapter!(I have now remembered dribbling is indeed a word... Dribbling a basketball and also it is the verb form of drool. Gross.) Anyways... Chapter 174: Miles contain Riza! I've invested too much time, er, studying *cough*worshiping*cough* her for her to go off the deep end now! Jade and Roy sound like a duo you certainly wouldn't want to mess with... Has anyone even asked who the hell these people attacking them are anyways? (Monte agents?) Good Nerissa has a chance to live. Aw, Daddy!Roy.:) Ugh, Miles why did you have to get hurt and let Riza continue on her rampage? Phil has just went up in rating.:3 Ugh, I truly hate revenge. It drives so many people past points they normally would never cross. Emotional stuff, emotional stuff, emotional stuff... :P Good thing Roy was smart enough to tell Phil to keep an eye out.:) And that's why I'm not sure if I could be a doctor. Not being able to heal everyone would eat me up. Besides, you're only 14. You shouldn't take the whole world on your shoulders. What a good metaphor. I know personally that if you fall off your horse and don't immediately get back on... You will always hold that fear of falling. Whoa, Edward and Olivier teaming up to help someone? This story never ceases to amaze me. Wait what... MOST of the guests got off with minor scratches? What about the others?D:That pinpoint hearing... Except it was only helpful to Serena this time... Tuxedos have too many layers to fight properly in them. Shed the jacket, vest, and tie and it help tremendously. And Nerissa lives. I knew you couldn't kill her off.*smirk* Anyways, looks like I finished yet another chapter. Since you are going on another vacation, I assume I won't be seeing updates. Well, until next time!:D
*CV*
Do I even need to say this was an excellent chapter?:P I drink only water, too. Soda is so gross. Eh, I have way too many black and gold clothes.D: Those were my school colors... But, now I'm moving to different school, the school colors are... Orange and black! Oh my gosh, I can wear orange as much as I please! I know a Jacqueline as well. She's a snotty little rich brat. The name works well. As for that picture, I wish I had time to finish it.(And yet somehow still managed to upload two more pictures, haha. I'm shamelessly advertising obviously.) The problem is I have softball practice and I have two assignments for my Pre-AP English class already. So here I am sleeping, eating, going to softball practice, and trying to read a book and annotate it. But, I'm a procrastinator and probably will put the assignments off til a week before school starts.(Though I am already halfway through the book; I am just not sure if I annotated the right things...) Oh wow, it took you three hours to reply? I think that's around the same amount of time it took me to review, haha. I actually was on a computer at school. My mother is a teacher and does the yearbook for the school. Since she is switching schools and she makes every single yearbook.(No we don't send it in. Everything is done by her except the hardcover. But even then she has to bind the books.) She has to finish at least the amount of yearbooks pre-ordered and then some by Monday. So I am dragged along early in the morning and am in there until night when I have practice. So I get bored. Bored enough that I actually did some of my Pre-AP English assignments... Ack, I am glad it wasn't Roy or one of the kids. (Sorry Serena, when you have already died once it sort of loses it's flair.) I don't know how people read and review off their phones. It would take me forever to text a review!(Maybe it's because I ripped off half my thumb? Well... At least I got a lesson in patience...) I really need to stop rambling on and read this chapter!(I have now remembered dribbling is indeed a word... Dribbling a basketball and also it is the verb form of drool. Gross.) Anyways... Chapter 174: Miles contain Riza! I've invested too much time, er, studying *cough*worshiping*cough* her for her to go off the deep end now! Jade and Roy sound like a duo you certainly wouldn't want to mess with... Has anyone even asked who the hell these people attacking them are anyways? (Monte agents?) Good Nerissa has a chance to live. Aw, Daddy!Roy.:) Ugh, Miles why did you have to get hurt and let Riza continue on her rampage? Phil has just went up in rating.:3 Ugh, I truly hate revenge. It drives so many people past points they normally would never cross. Emotional stuff, emotional stuff, emotional stuff... :P Good thing Roy was smart enough to tell Phil to keep an eye out.:) And that's why I'm not sure if I could be a doctor. Not being able to heal everyone would eat me up. Besides, you're only 14. You shouldn't take the whole world on your shoulders. What a good metaphor. I know personally that if you fall off your horse and don't immediately get back on... You will always hold that fear of falling. Whoa, Edward and Olivier teaming up to help someone? This story never ceases to amaze me. Wait what... MOST of the guests got off with minor scratches? What about the others?D:That pinpoint hearing... Except it was only helpful to Serena this time... Tuxedos have too many layers to fight properly in them. Shed the jacket, vest, and tie and it help tremendously. And Nerissa lives. I knew you couldn't kill her off.*smirk* Anyways, looks like I finished yet another chapter. Since you are going on another vacation, I assume I won't be seeing updates. Well, until next time!:D
*CV*
7/27/2012 c174 16mangagirl135
I would appreciate that very much, Olivier. NESSA I MISS YOU! I WANT MY CRAZY FRIEND BACK! At least I still have you, Vicky! WE STILL MEED TO RID THE WORLD OF EVERYTHING EVEN REMOTELY GIRLY. KILL IT ALL IN NESSA'S HONOR. Kay, suicide is never the answer. Mass murder is. And don't feel bad that people like Nessa better - it's a proven fact that people like crazy people. There are lots of ways to kill people, Ava. Maybe if I have the time one day I'll list all of them for you. But you'd be reading them for a while. And as for your question, it IS great that we're both insane. Life is more fun that way, y'know? And I'll have to go read this HP story you're talking about. I LOVE THOSE BOOKS. Yes, everyone insane is sane and everyone sane is insane. It makes perfect sense, yes? Of course you're a genius, Ava. I mean, you came up with this amazing story, didn't you? That PROVES that you're clearly a cognitive level above us all. And there are some pretty smart people out there. But having the kind of genius necessary to write something this good proves you surpass everyone else. On the planet.
Lyra out.
16mangagirl135I would appreciate that very much, Olivier. NESSA I MISS YOU! I WANT MY CRAZY FRIEND BACK! At least I still have you, Vicky! WE STILL MEED TO RID THE WORLD OF EVERYTHING EVEN REMOTELY GIRLY. KILL IT ALL IN NESSA'S HONOR. Kay, suicide is never the answer. Mass murder is. And don't feel bad that people like Nessa better - it's a proven fact that people like crazy people. There are lots of ways to kill people, Ava. Maybe if I have the time one day I'll list all of them for you. But you'd be reading them for a while. And as for your question, it IS great that we're both insane. Life is more fun that way, y'know? And I'll have to go read this HP story you're talking about. I LOVE THOSE BOOKS. Yes, everyone insane is sane and everyone sane is insane. It makes perfect sense, yes? Of course you're a genius, Ava. I mean, you came up with this amazing story, didn't you? That PROVES that you're clearly a cognitive level above us all. And there are some pretty smart people out there. But having the kind of genius necessary to write something this good proves you surpass everyone else. On the planet.
Lyra out.
7/27/2012 c15 5Lacey-Chan
This was such a cute chapter! I really liked it. Mustang can be so cute sometimes! Does this mean that they're back together? I sure hope so!
5Lacey-ChanThis was such a cute chapter! I really liked it. Mustang can be so cute sometimes! Does this mean that they're back together? I sure hope so!
7/27/2012 c173 CallousVulpix
Oh jeez. I guess my review was a bit too long. Long enough that you would have to choose between replying and updating. I'm glad you chose the update.:) I see action. I am happy. "Can nobody be nice to me without having an ulterior motive?" Even though that was a hypothetical question, I will answer, no. It's always good to have an outlet, usually one that involves destruction or works the body. I usually conduct in swordplay with sharpened sticks. I hit things and tire myself out. It's a win-win.:D Is it already time for Laila and Cai's birthdays, again? Or is it a spontaneous gift? Jacqueline Weisman... I remember her from their schoolyard days. Not very good memories if I remember correctly. Best parenting ever, don't stop your child that is about to beat a whore down. I hate girls that do that. Sluts. ... How can someone start to hate some one else at the age of 3?D; You're supposed to be innocent!;( When one gets used to having their nose broken... Bendix, the used to be #1 bachelor. Still harassed. Min Li is shaping up into a nice OC. In times of trouble, go tell Nerissa first. Then, she gets shot.:( Phil stay sane... Riza, too. Riza and Phil on a rampage? This is asking for trouble. Well, I finished the chapter. I was going to read it last night, but I was on a different computer and it's firewalls prevented me from reading the story. Supposedly this story is full of "Proxies and Pornography" *sweatdrops* I was concerned that I wouldn't be able to review until late tonight, but my games were cancelled. So I managed to find time to read and review. I hope that long review didn't burden you too much.D: Until next time!
*CV*
Oh jeez. I guess my review was a bit too long. Long enough that you would have to choose between replying and updating. I'm glad you chose the update.:) I see action. I am happy. "Can nobody be nice to me without having an ulterior motive?" Even though that was a hypothetical question, I will answer, no. It's always good to have an outlet, usually one that involves destruction or works the body. I usually conduct in swordplay with sharpened sticks. I hit things and tire myself out. It's a win-win.:D Is it already time for Laila and Cai's birthdays, again? Or is it a spontaneous gift? Jacqueline Weisman... I remember her from their schoolyard days. Not very good memories if I remember correctly. Best parenting ever, don't stop your child that is about to beat a whore down. I hate girls that do that. Sluts. ... How can someone start to hate some one else at the age of 3?D; You're supposed to be innocent!;( When one gets used to having their nose broken... Bendix, the used to be #1 bachelor. Still harassed. Min Li is shaping up into a nice OC. In times of trouble, go tell Nerissa first. Then, she gets shot.:( Phil stay sane... Riza, too. Riza and Phil on a rampage? This is asking for trouble. Well, I finished the chapter. I was going to read it last night, but I was on a different computer and it's firewalls prevented me from reading the story. Supposedly this story is full of "Proxies and Pornography" *sweatdrops* I was concerned that I wouldn't be able to review until late tonight, but my games were cancelled. So I managed to find time to read and review. I hope that long review didn't burden you too much.D: Until next time!
*CV*
7/26/2012 c173 16mangagirl135
AVA HOW DARE YOU KILL NESSA HOW WILL WE TAKE OVER THE WORLD IF SHE'S DEAD THIS IS EVEN WORSE THAN KAY DYING I'M GOING TO AVENGE HER MYSELF I HAVE ABOUT FIVE MILLION TONS OF EXPLOSIVE POWER WITH HER KILLER'S NAME ON IT. SCRATCH THAT - 100,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,007 TONS. (Yes, we produce explosives rapidly.) THE ASSHAT'S GOING DOWN. I WILL MURDER HIM WITH MY OWN BARE HANDS - FORGET THE EXPLOSIVES. (But HOW to kill them? Strangulation, suffocation, drowning, blunt force trauma, death by llamas, poison, gutting, whatever the word is for bleeding to death ((exsanguination, apparently)), etc., etc. Oh, the possibilities...) THEY DIE. NO MATTER WHAT. BY ME. MWAHAHA! (On another note, Nessa, how dare you die? WE STILL HAD TO TAKE OVER THE WORLD TOGETHER. Man, this throws a huge wrench into our plans.) DEATH TO NESSA'S KILLER.
Lyra out and upset.
16mangagirl135AVA HOW DARE YOU KILL NESSA HOW WILL WE TAKE OVER THE WORLD IF SHE'S DEAD THIS IS EVEN WORSE THAN KAY DYING I'M GOING TO AVENGE HER MYSELF I HAVE ABOUT FIVE MILLION TONS OF EXPLOSIVE POWER WITH HER KILLER'S NAME ON IT. SCRATCH THAT - 100,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,007 TONS. (Yes, we produce explosives rapidly.) THE ASSHAT'S GOING DOWN. I WILL MURDER HIM WITH MY OWN BARE HANDS - FORGET THE EXPLOSIVES. (But HOW to kill them? Strangulation, suffocation, drowning, blunt force trauma, death by llamas, poison, gutting, whatever the word is for bleeding to death ((exsanguination, apparently)), etc., etc. Oh, the possibilities...) THEY DIE. NO MATTER WHAT. BY ME. MWAHAHA! (On another note, Nessa, how dare you die? WE STILL HAD TO TAKE OVER THE WORLD TOGETHER. Man, this throws a huge wrench into our plans.) DEATH TO NESSA'S KILLER.
Lyra out and upset.
7/25/2012 c49 momijiinubashiri
aaaaaaaaawwwwwwww how sweet they are either going to fall in love become best friends or both
aaaaaaaaawwwwwwww how sweet they are either going to fall in love become best friends or both
7/25/2012 c1 Duckdor
Is English your first language? You write as if you have a somewhat tenuous grasp of diction, grammar and form. It's not...bad, per say, but it kinda reads like your missing a word every four words or something. Like, a car without sparkplugs. It's nearly perfect, but missing that piece that will make it run.
You write like a robot. Nothing wrong with that, but it's a little stiff. Hard to understand. I'm liking the idea though, so we'll see where it goes.
Is English your first language? You write as if you have a somewhat tenuous grasp of diction, grammar and form. It's not...bad, per say, but it kinda reads like your missing a word every four words or something. Like, a car without sparkplugs. It's nearly perfect, but missing that piece that will make it run.
You write like a robot. Nothing wrong with that, but it's a little stiff. Hard to understand. I'm liking the idea though, so we'll see where it goes.