for Disgaea: Fate Awaits7/4/2012 c26 
1Spindash77
Okay before I begin let me get one thing strait I ENJOYED THIS FIC! I'm going to say some harsh things but really I liked this story.
Now let me just say that the story is kinda average, it's pretty much just a predictable find the micguffin quest, however the digaea series kinda has somwhat predictable storys so that is overlookable in some regards. What keeps the story entertaining is the characters and humor I really enjoyed most of the main cast they each had their own personality that shined brilantly, although at the begining everyone besides Dan felt a bit personality less until the decenders mini-arc. The next problem with the story was some of the things that felt shouldn't exist like the Gina romance that whent nowhere (Although it was probably for the best that you droped that since Nick and Yuki had better chemistry) and during the decenders mini-arc that whole thing with Jade being Yuki's sister felt unessasarily taped on.
Also the writing wasn't to good with many misplaced words in sentence,names being misspelled at times and most of all, very little description. I didn't even have a clear idea of what Yuki looked like throught the story and Very little idea what the siblings looked like, plus the descriptions for the actions and attacks felt very poor.
But again despite my grips with the story I did enjoy it for the characters and humor and am excited to see the sequal that i'm about to read.
1Spindash77Okay before I begin let me get one thing strait I ENJOYED THIS FIC! I'm going to say some harsh things but really I liked this story.
Now let me just say that the story is kinda average, it's pretty much just a predictable find the micguffin quest, however the digaea series kinda has somwhat predictable storys so that is overlookable in some regards. What keeps the story entertaining is the characters and humor I really enjoyed most of the main cast they each had their own personality that shined brilantly, although at the begining everyone besides Dan felt a bit personality less until the decenders mini-arc. The next problem with the story was some of the things that felt shouldn't exist like the Gina romance that whent nowhere (Although it was probably for the best that you droped that since Nick and Yuki had better chemistry) and during the decenders mini-arc that whole thing with Jade being Yuki's sister felt unessasarily taped on.
Also the writing wasn't to good with many misplaced words in sentence,names being misspelled at times and most of all, very little description. I didn't even have a clear idea of what Yuki looked like throught the story and Very little idea what the siblings looked like, plus the descriptions for the actions and attacks felt very poor.
But again despite my grips with the story I did enjoy it for the characters and humor and am excited to see the sequal that i'm about to read.
6/24/2012 c26 Leila Andell
So here I am! Reviewing the story! :D
Sorry to not review from the first chapter. But you see, my fingers were tired now. So... Leaving just 1 review is fine, right? ...If not, I'm sorry...
Anyway this is a great story! Keep up the good work!
So here I am! Reviewing the story! :D
Sorry to not review from the first chapter. But you see, my fingers were tired now. So... Leaving just 1 review is fine, right? ...If not, I'm sorry...
Anyway this is a great story! Keep up the good work!
6/24/2012 c26 Leila Andell
So here I am! Reviewing the story! :D
Sorry to not review from the first chapter. But you see, my fingers were tired now. So... Leaving just 1 review is fine, right? ...If not, I'm sorry...
Anyway this is a great story! Keep up the good work!
So here I am! Reviewing the story! :D
Sorry to not review from the first chapter. But you see, my fingers were tired now. So... Leaving just 1 review is fine, right? ...If not, I'm sorry...
Anyway this is a great story! Keep up the good work!
6/9/2012 c26 4Karanma Maeryl
Hi there! Hope you don't mind I review here! -
...I decided to read this story since I curious. And my curiosity changed to... WOW! :D
Even though sometimes I have a difficulity in reading your story, I managed to read it up! :3
The ending is somehow touching! I like it! :)
...And I saw the sequel already released! I'll make sure I read it up! Keep up the good work! CHEERS! :D
4Karanma MaerylHi there! Hope you don't mind I review here! -
...I decided to read this story since I curious. And my curiosity changed to... WOW! :D
Even though sometimes I have a difficulity in reading your story, I managed to read it up! :3
The ending is somehow touching! I like it! :)
...And I saw the sequel already released! I'll make sure I read it up! Keep up the good work! CHEERS! :D
2/17/2012 c5 1Farmboy-zero
Hi there! I felt your story was long due a review =D
First up I wanna say I like your setting a lot as it leaves a lot of room for adventures and characters.
Also, being netherworldien mercenaries and all is a wide scope for fun, i'd say ;P
I had a good laugh at some of your dialogue too~
I do have one point of critique though; maybe you could spread out the layout of your story a bit? It would make reading the story a lot easier if everythings not jumbled up in each other. (But it might just be me who thinks that.)
Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading the rest!
1Farmboy-zeroHi there! I felt your story was long due a review =D
First up I wanna say I like your setting a lot as it leaves a lot of room for adventures and characters.
Also, being netherworldien mercenaries and all is a wide scope for fun, i'd say ;P
I had a good laugh at some of your dialogue too~
I do have one point of critique though; maybe you could spread out the layout of your story a bit? It would make reading the story a lot easier if everythings not jumbled up in each other. (But it might just be me who thinks that.)
Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading the rest!