for Decisions, decisions11/25/2012 c1 
2Sophia Cooper
Very creepy! Bellatrix's voice definitely shone through here, and we got a terrifying peek inside her mind. I'm not certain if Bellatrix would "lower" herself to rounding up Muggle-borns for the Ministry though, or if she would want to work with the Carrows, who from my understanding didn't even have a Dark Mark, and probably weren't in Voldemorts inner circle.
I liked the little bit about Severus, and made me wonder how they came to call each other by their first names despite the fact that they hate each other.
2Sophia CooperVery creepy! Bellatrix's voice definitely shone through here, and we got a terrifying peek inside her mind. I'm not certain if Bellatrix would "lower" herself to rounding up Muggle-borns for the Ministry though, or if she would want to work with the Carrows, who from my understanding didn't even have a Dark Mark, and probably weren't in Voldemorts inner circle.
I liked the little bit about Severus, and made me wonder how they came to call each other by their first names despite the fact that they hate each other.
3/26/2012 c1 35MadameGiry25
I actually really like the way that you chose to start out the story. "Decisions, decisions." Kind of chilling, knowing that it's Bella, but it did make me want to continue.
Bella was certainly very in character. We have the spine tingling that we would expect from her but it's not too overdone.
One nitpick: "Eyes' positively glowing with excited madness, Bella selects a carving knife, using a free hand to cup the girls face." You don't need an apostrophe after 'eyes'. ( :
My only other complaint is that it was much too short. I say that because I really enjoyed it. Thanks so much for this!
35MadameGiry25I actually really like the way that you chose to start out the story. "Decisions, decisions." Kind of chilling, knowing that it's Bella, but it did make me want to continue.
Bella was certainly very in character. We have the spine tingling that we would expect from her but it's not too overdone.
One nitpick: "Eyes' positively glowing with excited madness, Bella selects a carving knife, using a free hand to cup the girls face." You don't need an apostrophe after 'eyes'. ( :
My only other complaint is that it was much too short. I say that because I really enjoyed it. Thanks so much for this!
3/15/2012 c1 81Thanatos Angelos Girl
Wow this was really chilling in such a short amount of words. Congratulations for that. However, there were a few things off like how gifted shouldn't be captalized or how you misspelled Severus. The good thing is that the errors didn't distract much from the piece and it really was excellent. :)
81Thanatos Angelos GirlWow this was really chilling in such a short amount of words. Congratulations for that. However, there were a few things off like how gifted shouldn't be captalized or how you misspelled Severus. The good thing is that the errors didn't distract much from the piece and it really was excellent. :)
1/31/2012 c1 540Gamma Orionis
Very interesting! Bellatrix's sadism and insanity were conveyed very strongly in this piece. I noticed one error - "her chin warbles" should be "Her chin wobbles" (to warble is to sing), but other than that, I thought it was quite good! I liked the ending line too.
540Gamma OrionisVery interesting! Bellatrix's sadism and insanity were conveyed very strongly in this piece. I noticed one error - "her chin warbles" should be "Her chin wobbles" (to warble is to sing), but other than that, I thought it was quite good! I liked the ending line too.