for Ralph's rant3/28 c16 Guest
LOL, Jack-
Jack: Do you like the feather? I was halfway killing a wild bird when I thought of you. :D
Ralph: Charming -.-
LOL, Jack-
Jack: Do you like the feather? I was halfway killing a wild bird when I thought of you. :D
Ralph: Charming -.-
3/28 c14 Sadistic Blonde
Gezz, we're just rushin' along today, aren't we, Roger?
Gezz, we're just rushin' along today, aren't we, Roger?
3/10 c17 
7Princess-Warrior 17
*Sigh* If only this actually happened in the book. Not only was it incredibly sweet and adorable, there was a touch of realness, too. I liked how you had both Ralph and Jack's insecurities and doubts towards getting married. That seemed real because people usually get freaked out before doing something official like that. Also, seeing Roger vulnerable was so cute. I loved how scared he got because he didn't want to be rejected by Simon. But once they were together, I was like, "Awww!" One of my favorite parts, though, was when Sam wanted the lemur. I had to laugh out loud because of how much he was pleading Ralph. Overall, another fantastic story.
Just as a little note, there were some punctuation errors. You mainly missed periods at the ends of dialogue, and commas. Commas should have been placed before directly naming someone in a sentence.
7Princess-Warrior 17*Sigh* If only this actually happened in the book. Not only was it incredibly sweet and adorable, there was a touch of realness, too. I liked how you had both Ralph and Jack's insecurities and doubts towards getting married. That seemed real because people usually get freaked out before doing something official like that. Also, seeing Roger vulnerable was so cute. I loved how scared he got because he didn't want to be rejected by Simon. But once they were together, I was like, "Awww!" One of my favorite parts, though, was when Sam wanted the lemur. I had to laugh out loud because of how much he was pleading Ralph. Overall, another fantastic story.
Just as a little note, there were some punctuation errors. You mainly missed periods at the ends of dialogue, and commas. Commas should have been placed before directly naming someone in a sentence.
2/28 c17 12sportbrat101
Hey! You make such cute and creative stories about ralph and jack. Maybe you should write about a story of jack and ralph returning to civilization and have them face trils of the heart. Like parents not aproving of thier relationship or unrequired crushes trying to split them apart etc.
12sportbrat101Hey! You make such cute and creative stories about ralph and jack. Maybe you should write about a story of jack and ralph returning to civilization and have them face trils of the heart. Like parents not aproving of thier relationship or unrequired crushes trying to split them apart etc.
6/14/2012 c17 3O.o yaoi fangirl O.o
LOL. I think you should do a mini sequel. You know, their parents' reactions, the fact that the littluns want to stay with "Mummy and Daddy"...
3O.o yaoi fangirl O.oLOL. I think you should do a mini sequel. You know, their parents' reactions, the fact that the littluns want to stay with "Mummy and Daddy"...
5/17/2012 c16 Nivell
OMG, I made a typo on the previous review! I meant to say adorable, not horrible! So please ignore that. Didn't read the review properly until I submitted it.
OMG, I made a typo on the previous review! I meant to say adorable, not horrible! So please ignore that. Didn't read the review properly until I submitted it.
5/17/2012 c17 Nivell
Awww, this is truly horrible! And I prefer to have this version of the book in my head...)
Awww, this is truly horrible! And I prefer to have this version of the book in my head...)
4/16/2012 c17 Barren Chasm
Haha I love this. It's really funny the way they all began to act like adults, especially Ralph and him being all motherly.
Haha I love this. It's really funny the way they all began to act like adults, especially Ralph and him being all motherly.
1/20/2012 c8 aggirl53
Interesting turn of events! Haha, still loving the all dialouge thing, way neat.
Interesting turn of events! Haha, still loving the all dialouge thing, way neat.
1/19/2012 c5 aggirl53
Kawaii! I loved it! That was hilarious, teehee, made my day. Oh and another name. You used my last name for Ralph! 3 Wow, I feel old now. I remember just last year when I first started fanfictioning, and now I'm technically one of the older people on this category. Ah, I'm ranting! Anyways, you are awesome at dialouge, totally fab. I love your characterization, oh and its a really nice take on the plot. Kudos and cookies!
Kawaii! I loved it! That was hilarious, teehee, made my day. Oh and another name. You used my last name for Ralph! 3 Wow, I feel old now. I remember just last year when I first started fanfictioning, and now I'm technically one of the older people on this category. Ah, I'm ranting! Anyways, you are awesome at dialouge, totally fab. I love your characterization, oh and its a really nice take on the plot. Kudos and cookies!
1/18/2012 c5 15AzmariaHarmony
Omigawrsh, I am laughing soooo hard. Although I don't like Jack/Ralph (Ralph is the seme. Rawr.) I luuurrrrv thiiisssss! Keep writing!
P.S. I like the style of writing where you're using all dialouge. It's refreshing to see somethig different. :)
15AzmariaHarmonyOmigawrsh, I am laughing soooo hard. Although I don't like Jack/Ralph (Ralph is the seme. Rawr.) I luuurrrrv thiiisssss! Keep writing!
P.S. I like the style of writing where you're using all dialouge. It's refreshing to see somethig different. :)