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3Raider-K
Really enjoyed your story. Thank you for writing it. The characterization of all your characters were well-drawn and endearing, especially that of Alunim and Legolas' growing relationship. It's hard to find a worthy Legomance these days, but yours was certainly worth the wait!
3Raider-KReally enjoyed your story. Thank you for writing it. The characterization of all your characters were well-drawn and endearing, especially that of Alunim and Legolas' growing relationship. It's hard to find a worthy Legomance these days, but yours was certainly worth the wait!
4/12 c47 Raider-K
Argh! This chapter was heart-breaking! But- I really appreciate how raw and ugly you made the battle description-just how it should be. I hope Gimli chips off Rumil's head with his ax!
Argh! This chapter was heart-breaking! But- I really appreciate how raw and ugly you made the battle description-just how it should be. I hope Gimli chips off Rumil's head with his ax!
4/12 c45 Raider-K
You really filled this chapter with plenty of angsty romance and passion- and I loved every word of it. I thought the end scene was portrayed very well with just the right amount of detail.
You really filled this chapter with plenty of angsty romance and passion- and I loved every word of it. I thought the end scene was portrayed very well with just the right amount of detail.
4/12 c42 Raider-K
Great action-packed chapter. Loved the moment of truth scene between the two siblings and the grittiness of the fight scene. Well played.
Great action-packed chapter. Loved the moment of truth scene between the two siblings and the grittiness of the fight scene. Well played.
4/12 c35 Raider-K
Woo hoo! Loved the climactic scene in this chapter! Great description of the two finally having their moment!
Woo hoo! Loved the climactic scene in this chapter! Great description of the two finally having their moment!
4/12 c24 Raider-K
I like how you're developing the chemistry between Alunim and Legolas in this chapter. The pacing feels appropriate/natural and not too rushed as they both discover their feelings for each other.
I like how you're developing the chemistry between Alunim and Legolas in this chapter. The pacing feels appropriate/natural and not too rushed as they both discover their feelings for each other.
4/12 c16 Raider-K
I figured that Rumil had betrayed his city. I'm curious to see what his reasons are for wanting to kill his sister though. Really good chapters so far, and even though the story follows the "tenth walker" plot line, you've really made it more about developing your OC and her relationships with the fellowship, so it still feels original!
I figured that Rumil had betrayed his city. I'm curious to see what his reasons are for wanting to kill his sister though. Really good chapters so far, and even though the story follows the "tenth walker" plot line, you've really made it more about developing your OC and her relationships with the fellowship, so it still feels original!
4/12 c14 Raider-K
Finally, she tells the others about her past! I've been waiting for this scene and can't wait to see the aftermath from this revelation, especially on Legolas' side. I've enjoyed the rivalry you've cooked up between the two eleven realms, concerning the rings, particularly Narya. It has made for some great conflict between Alunim and Legolas, and now that he knows the truth, perhaps they can make amends. ;)
Finally, she tells the others about her past! I've been waiting for this scene and can't wait to see the aftermath from this revelation, especially on Legolas' side. I've enjoyed the rivalry you've cooked up between the two eleven realms, concerning the rings, particularly Narya. It has made for some great conflict between Alunim and Legolas, and now that he knows the truth, perhaps they can make amends. ;)
4/12 c1 Raider-K
I really like your premise so far and your OC, Alunim. I appreciate how you've characterized her as not being overly perfect; instead she's someone that the readers can relate to.
I really like your premise so far and your OC, Alunim. I appreciate how you've characterized her as not being overly perfect; instead she's someone that the readers can relate to.
4/10 c52 Aranel Mereneth
Please leave this story as it is! Post the new version as separate :)
Please leave this story as it is! Post the new version as separate :)