for Between Fire and Ice20h ago c4 Guest
I need more...:3 chrono trigger was my first video game I ever played and it's already awesome. And u made it even better...:D I love that chrono is mute because in the actual game he rarely speaks so it would make sense... Love this story, please continue!
I need more...:3 chrono trigger was my first video game I ever played and it's already awesome. And u made it even better...:D I love that chrono is mute because in the actual game he rarely speaks so it would make sense... Love this story, please continue!
2/6 c4 
13GiantMako
Amazing work I must say.
Your take on Chrono's lack of speak is really cool and quite beleivible so kudos on that.
Everyone's personality feels right, and helps make the story that much more enjoyable, I certainly wouldn't worry about if they seem out of character because so far you've done them justice.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
13GiantMakoAmazing work I must say.
Your take on Chrono's lack of speak is really cool and quite beleivible so kudos on that.
Everyone's personality feels right, and helps make the story that much more enjoyable, I certainly wouldn't worry about if they seem out of character because so far you've done them justice.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
1/21 c4 7FrictionX42
Loved it! You are very good at evoking an emotional response and I love the plot so far. I especially enjoy the connections you've put in between the characters. I wonder though, in this fic are you including the optional side quest for the rainbow shell where it's discovered (spoiler here!) That the chancellor is a monster? Or is that the ... nevermind, boss bad guy is referenced repeatedly as being female. Guess I'm back to square one.
7FrictionX42Loved it! You are very good at evoking an emotional response and I love the plot so far. I especially enjoy the connections you've put in between the characters. I wonder though, in this fic are you including the optional side quest for the rainbow shell where it's discovered (spoiler here!) That the chancellor is a monster? Or is that the ... nevermind, boss bad guy is referenced repeatedly as being female. Guess I'm back to square one.
12/12/2012 c4 7CWolf2
You've created an interesting story, but there are some grammar issues you need to be aware of. I noticed you have trouble with words that sound alike but have different meanings: "than" and "then", "there" and "their". "Than" is used generally in comparison-like statements and "then" is used in statements that explain an order of events. You can look up these up online to get clearer explanations. But I think you have a very interesting plot, but the grammar detracts from the overall story. Keep working at it you really have something good here.
7CWolf2You've created an interesting story, but there are some grammar issues you need to be aware of. I noticed you have trouble with words that sound alike but have different meanings: "than" and "then", "there" and "their". "Than" is used generally in comparison-like statements and "then" is used in statements that explain an order of events. You can look up these up online to get clearer explanations. But I think you have a very interesting plot, but the grammar detracts from the overall story. Keep working at it you really have something good here.
12/5/2012 c4 1Wicked Sick
This story is looking up with the way you written Crono's past. Hope to see the next chapter soon.
1Wicked SickThis story is looking up with the way you written Crono's past. Hope to see the next chapter soon.
11/25/2012 c4 Dragice Ryudo
I'm so glad you're not going to stop writing this. That's the dedication it needs.
I need to be honest about this though, for some reason when I got the notification this morning for an update, I was filled with this unnatural giddiness to get to read another chapter. This story just psyches me up for seemingly no reason. Each chapter makes me want more, and if I need to wait that's perfectly fine.
Each chapter you deliver is worth it. Well written, fluent, and filled with story and intrigue. I'm looking forward to the next chapter and I only just finished this one.
Keep up he good work.
I'm so glad you're not going to stop writing this. That's the dedication it needs.
I need to be honest about this though, for some reason when I got the notification this morning for an update, I was filled with this unnatural giddiness to get to read another chapter. This story just psyches me up for seemingly no reason. Each chapter makes me want more, and if I need to wait that's perfectly fine.
Each chapter you deliver is worth it. Well written, fluent, and filled with story and intrigue. I'm looking forward to the next chapter and I only just finished this one.
Keep up he good work.
11/25/2012 c4 Tsunamiatunzen1
Yay! The story continues... as well as the plot thickening very nicely. I'm still amazed at how you accounted for Crono's silence and I applaud it.
Yay! The story continues... as well as the plot thickening very nicely. I'm still amazed at how you accounted for Crono's silence and I applaud it.
9/2/2012 c3 Tsunamiatunzen1
Nice on a take on post-Chrono Trigger!
I am a little frustrated with cliff-hangers as they leave a bad note if the story is left for too long. However, I love how you put new dangers in instead of just leaving things peacful.
Keep it up!
Nice on a take on post-Chrono Trigger!
I am a little frustrated with cliff-hangers as they leave a bad note if the story is left for too long. However, I love how you put new dangers in instead of just leaving things peacful.
Keep it up!
8/9/2012 c1 5Endlos Nacht
I like the fact that you gave a reason why the main character, Crono, never spoke. So far its a good read.
5Endlos NachtI like the fact that you gave a reason why the main character, Crono, never spoke. So far its a good read.
4/27/2012 c3 Dragice Ryudo
This is an excellent story and I'm greatly looking forward to how you proceed with it. I also agree with you that no one is too out of character. It seems more to me that with Lucca you've captured more of the little girl you only see snipits of during the games, and the way you've developed Chrono, and explained why he doesn't speak, is a wonderful change of pace. It gives him more definition than can be grasped from the silent hero.
I do admit that I'm looking forward more to the main conflict and romantic portions of the story than the plot you've set in motion. But it will also be interesting to see how you fit everything together. Conflict is the meat of any great romance story, and it's just as rare to see it well done.
I look forward to your updates, however infrequent they might be, and apologize for the quality of this review.
This is an excellent story and I'm greatly looking forward to how you proceed with it. I also agree with you that no one is too out of character. It seems more to me that with Lucca you've captured more of the little girl you only see snipits of during the games, and the way you've developed Chrono, and explained why he doesn't speak, is a wonderful change of pace. It gives him more definition than can be grasped from the silent hero.
I do admit that I'm looking forward more to the main conflict and romantic portions of the story than the plot you've set in motion. But it will also be interesting to see how you fit everything together. Conflict is the meat of any great romance story, and it's just as rare to see it well done.
I look forward to your updates, however infrequent they might be, and apologize for the quality of this review.
3/16/2012 c3 XSilval
I think your staying true to the characters still. I'm curious about what the doppleganger is up to and looking toward to more.
I think your staying true to the characters still. I'm curious about what the doppleganger is up to and looking toward to more.
3/16/2012 c2 XSilval
Another good chapter, I find myself routing for Lucca but I've always been a bit of a Lucca fan girl so it might not just be because life in the castle seems to be beating him down.
Another good chapter, I find myself routing for Lucca but I've always been a bit of a Lucca fan girl so it might not just be because life in the castle seems to be beating him down.
3/16/2012 c1 XSilval
I really liked the reason Crono does not talk, its very original. Good story so far, I think you were true to their characters, now I'm off to read the rest.
I really liked the reason Crono does not talk, its very original. Good story so far, I think you were true to their characters, now I'm off to read the rest.
2/26/2012 c3 9the-long-lost-strawberry
Whooo I finally managed to get into my signed account lol. Either way sorry gor not reviewing right away this past month has been hectic but I am really loving where your story is heading. I kind of laughed how Crono reminded me as to how Ayla speaks when he was talking to marle, but it made sense since she only gets the "primitive" aspects of sign language. Also I felt real bad for Lucca in this chapter, hopefully things will get better for her :) As for the stories you recommended I got on it right away and I do remember reading my guardian angel such a long time ago but it is a story that never gets old, and I see how you incorporated it in your story as to where Lucca was saying that Heroes have short lives and that she rather not play those games anymore. I absolutely loved that too lol man I need to stop gushing but I really encourage you to continue it is most definitely well written and interesting plot!
9the-long-lost-strawberryWhooo I finally managed to get into my signed account lol. Either way sorry gor not reviewing right away this past month has been hectic but I am really loving where your story is heading. I kind of laughed how Crono reminded me as to how Ayla speaks when he was talking to marle, but it made sense since she only gets the "primitive" aspects of sign language. Also I felt real bad for Lucca in this chapter, hopefully things will get better for her :) As for the stories you recommended I got on it right away and I do remember reading my guardian angel such a long time ago but it is a story that never gets old, and I see how you incorporated it in your story as to where Lucca was saying that Heroes have short lives and that she rather not play those games anymore. I absolutely loved that too lol man I need to stop gushing but I really encourage you to continue it is most definitely well written and interesting plot!
2/8/2012 c1 Long lost strawberry
I've been trying to find some Crono/Lucca fics (a rarity I must say)and lo and behold I found this story. I'm absolutely enthralled by it. Your writing style is great and the characters are portrayed as believable. The interaction between Crono and those around him is one of my favorite things about this story. I hope to see more soon! :)
I've been trying to find some Crono/Lucca fics (a rarity I must say)and lo and behold I found this story. I'm absolutely enthralled by it. Your writing style is great and the characters are portrayed as believable. The interaction between Crono and those around him is one of my favorite things about this story. I hope to see more soon! :)