for Maybe Not So Bad12/15/2012 c2 
29jesusfreakauthorgirl17
I love how you did this one. I never really agreed the Susan and Caspian were in love anyways. Thank you for writing this!
29jesusfreakauthorgirl17I love how you did this one. I never really agreed the Susan and Caspian were in love anyways. Thank you for writing this!
5/2/2012 c2 A Girl in Red
Cool.Cool. Cool.(Ok, I'm using that word a lot). I love Suspian, but...it's just a big flirtation. So-this is one marvellous, funny, interesting,cute, fluffy(Where did that come from?), oneshot. Love it.
Cool.Cool. Cool.(Ok, I'm using that word a lot). I love Suspian, but...it's just a big flirtation. So-this is one marvellous, funny, interesting,cute, fluffy(Where did that come from?), oneshot. Love it.
4/19/2012 c1 45narniagirl11
Ha ha! I love this line: 'Oh, Aslan help me, I'm going to have to kiss him.'
That was great! Susan/Caspian was the worst decision in Narnia. I SO hate it! The other girls at my church and I regularly get into dissagreements about Susan and Caspian. Most of them are like: 'Awwww, so cute!' and I'm more like: 'DISGUSTING!'. I have told them that I am 'anti-Caspian'! Makes my mom laugh. :)
45narniagirl11Ha ha! I love this line: 'Oh, Aslan help me, I'm going to have to kiss him.'
That was great! Susan/Caspian was the worst decision in Narnia. I SO hate it! The other girls at my church and I regularly get into dissagreements about Susan and Caspian. Most of them are like: 'Awwww, so cute!' and I'm more like: 'DISGUSTING!'. I have told them that I am 'anti-Caspian'! Makes my mom laugh. :)
3/31/2012 c2 13Saoirse7
This was so funny! I thought, until I got to the end, that your title was meant to take on a different meaning. I'm glad it didn't. I loved Susan's thoughts during this. Well-written, too! Nice job!
13Saoirse7This was so funny! I thought, until I got to the end, that your title was meant to take on a different meaning. I'm glad it didn't. I loved Susan's thoughts during this. Well-written, too! Nice job!
2/23/2012 c2 27The Hobbit's Rhapsody
Oh, purely brilliant. I laughed so hard through this. You have no idea how much I appreciate this. I think you portrayed a surprisingly complex Susan, and I like that you changed some of the stranger dialogue. Brava!
27The Hobbit's RhapsodyOh, purely brilliant. I laughed so hard through this. You have no idea how much I appreciate this. I think you portrayed a surprisingly complex Susan, and I like that you changed some of the stranger dialogue. Brava!
1/24/2012 c2 FelipeMarcusThomas
Nothing wrong with implied pairings at all. As far as how Susan comes across, she came across just fine - at least to me.
I don't know if you've thought about how and why Susan ceased to be a friend of Narnia (as Peter puts it in 'The Last Battle'), but I'd be interested in seeing your take on it.
Nothing wrong with implied pairings at all. As far as how Susan comes across, she came across just fine - at least to me.
I don't know if you've thought about how and why Susan ceased to be a friend of Narnia (as Peter puts it in 'The Last Battle'), but I'd be interested in seeing your take on it.
1/24/2012 c1 FelipeMarcusThomas
I don't know when I've seen a fanfic where I liked Susan more. You really captured the essence of Queen Susan the Gentle. Nicely done.
I don't know when I've seen a fanfic where I liked Susan more. You really captured the essence of Queen Susan the Gentle. Nicely done.
1/23/2012 c1 TheGlassSwallow
I really enjoyed that. I haven't read much Narnian fanfiction, but I get the feeling that there's a lot of cliche Susan/Caspian around.
Susan's thoughts worked especially well in this, and I very much liked the personal touch they gave the story.
I spotted one typo/tense mistake:
"It is time that they begin coming closer to their own."
Did you mean "began?"
I agree with Flossie in that Susan came off a little sharp and vindictive, but from the hints dropped in The Last Battle, I think she was certainly a bit like that later on, and it makes sense that she had the potential when she was younger.
I think what let you down in this fic was the Narnia/England journey. I don't know why, but it felt very anticlimatic when I was reading it.
Overall, very good job! Keep writing!
I really enjoyed that. I haven't read much Narnian fanfiction, but I get the feeling that there's a lot of cliche Susan/Caspian around.
Susan's thoughts worked especially well in this, and I very much liked the personal touch they gave the story.
I spotted one typo/tense mistake:
"It is time that they begin coming closer to their own."
Did you mean "began?"
I agree with Flossie in that Susan came off a little sharp and vindictive, but from the hints dropped in The Last Battle, I think she was certainly a bit like that later on, and it makes sense that she had the potential when she was younger.
I think what let you down in this fic was the Narnia/England journey. I don't know why, but it felt very anticlimatic when I was reading it.
Overall, very good job! Keep writing!
1/22/2012 c2 5Mystic Lover of the fairytale
Hurray! A non Susan Caspian story so tired of those so very very tired of them
5Mystic Lover of the fairytaleHurray! A non Susan Caspian story so tired of those so very very tired of them
1/22/2012 c2 5itz Penguins
i was intrigued by this fic and now i oicture the kiss between casian and susan differently! happy writing!
5itz Penguinsi was intrigued by this fic and now i oicture the kiss between casian and susan differently! happy writing!
1/22/2012 c2 Flossie
I appreciate you changing the lines from the movie. It doesn't make sense that Edmund and Lucy wouldn't understand, especially as they had been much older. But I'm afraid to say, Susan comes off as condescending and a nasty bit of work here. The Susan/Caspian relationship in the movie never struck me as anything more than a flirtation, but I never got the impression that Susan would be so mean and hateful about it. Really OOC for Susan, and seems more like author wish fulfillment than anything else. Too bad, it seemed like a good idea for a story, but the execution was poor.
I appreciate you changing the lines from the movie. It doesn't make sense that Edmund and Lucy wouldn't understand, especially as they had been much older. But I'm afraid to say, Susan comes off as condescending and a nasty bit of work here. The Susan/Caspian relationship in the movie never struck me as anything more than a flirtation, but I never got the impression that Susan would be so mean and hateful about it. Really OOC for Susan, and seems more like author wish fulfillment than anything else. Too bad, it seemed like a good idea for a story, but the execution was poor.