4/28 c1 13starrysummernights
Very powerful writing. The emotions were raw and angsty and very well done. I really enjoyed reading this.

I think there were a few places where the grammar was a bit messed up, but I do that all the time so I understand. Lol :P Otherwise, this was a great piece of writing. Well done you.

1/22/2012 c1 11LosGatos
Quite well done, level of detail is impressive, but work on your grammar. It's the killer factor in any story.