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Wow, what a start to what I'm sure will prove to be a powerful story. Can't wait to learn more about the Cullens, Bella's situation, and all.
Wow, what a start to what I'm sure will prove to be a powerful story. Can't wait to learn more about the Cullens, Bella's situation, and all.
1/26/2012 c3 
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GAH! So many more questions. I love it.
The only thing I can think of that would make the Cullen's turn her away would be that they thought she had an afair and was pregnant with another man's child but I'm sure I'm way off.
Can't wait for more. Planning on telling everyone I know to read this. BTW I heard about your story from the TLS girls.
4aWhiteBlankPageGAH! So many more questions. I love it.
The only thing I can think of that would make the Cullen's turn her away would be that they thought she had an afair and was pregnant with another man's child but I'm sure I'm way off.
Can't wait for more. Planning on telling everyone I know to read this. BTW I heard about your story from the TLS girls.
1/26/2012 c2 aWhiteBlankPage
I cried. And we're only on chapter two. Damn. I can't believe how invested I am in their story already. Have I told you that you're brilliant?
I cried. And we're only on chapter two. Damn. I can't believe how invested I am in their story already. Have I told you that you're brilliant?
1/26/2012 c3 1Charmie77
This was recd to me on FB...I am so glad I read...this is heartbreakingly beautiful.
1Charmie77This was recd to me on FB...I am so glad I read...this is heartbreakingly beautiful.
1/26/2012 c3 anitabonita2413
I'm trying to understand what Bella could have done for her family to turn their back on her. I just can't believe Edward would walk in and ask for a divorce. He then seem upset when she takes back her true name. The worst part is when they don't even care that she lost the baby. This family is so F up. Oh, I'm totally with Jane about that full bed pan. That would keep the whole cullen's away.
I'm trying to understand what Bella could have done for her family to turn their back on her. I just can't believe Edward would walk in and ask for a divorce. He then seem upset when she takes back her true name. The worst part is when they don't even care that she lost the baby. This family is so F up. Oh, I'm totally with Jane about that full bed pan. That would keep the whole cullen's away.
1/26/2012 c1 4aWhiteBlankPage
This is brilliant. I am completely enthralled already. I'm entirely envious of your writing.
I loved this bit:
"Courage, after all, was the better part of valor. I didn't mind taking the coward's route. Being brave was exhausting."
I can't wait to see how this all unfolds.
4aWhiteBlankPageThis is brilliant. I am completely enthralled already. I'm entirely envious of your writing.
I loved this bit:
"Courage, after all, was the better part of valor. I didn't mind taking the coward's route. Being brave was exhausting."
I can't wait to see how this all unfolds.
1/26/2012 c3 1Perry Maxwell
I have a feeling that Edward absconded with her sketchpad. I don't know if I thought that or caught that on my first read through.
Definitely intrigued by who was behind and why Bella was beaten. Looks like Alice was dating Jasper at some point. Wonder why they broke up.
And I want to know what's going to happen when Edward sees that youtube video.
Another intriguing chapter. Well done.
1Perry MaxwellI have a feeling that Edward absconded with her sketchpad. I don't know if I thought that or caught that on my first read through.
Definitely intrigued by who was behind and why Bella was beaten. Looks like Alice was dating Jasper at some point. Wonder why they broke up.
And I want to know what's going to happen when Edward sees that youtube video.
Another intriguing chapter. Well done.
1/26/2012 c2 Perry Maxwell
Even though there's still mystery surrounding why Edward divorced her and why the Cullens abandoned her, I have a weakness for commanding Edwards. Just UNF at the last line. "Isabella, you are not going back!"
Someone give me a fan...whew, that was hot. And it wasn't intended to be, which makes it all the more better.
Excellent chapter.
Even though there's still mystery surrounding why Edward divorced her and why the Cullens abandoned her, I have a weakness for commanding Edwards. Just UNF at the last line. "Isabella, you are not going back!"
Someone give me a fan...whew, that was hot. And it wasn't intended to be, which makes it all the more better.
Excellent chapter.
1/26/2012 c1 Perry Maxwell
I still want to know why Edward knew he was going to marry Bella when she was first brought to live with the Cullens. She was 11, and he was older (not sure by how much), so what did he see/feel? Very intrigued by that.
Also, the fact that he painstakingly glued his own birthday present together after Jasper destroyed Bella's drawing made me fall in love with Edward. *dreamy sigh*
Excellent chapter. I love your use of similes to paint a very vivid visual picture for us. How's that for alliteration? lol
I still want to know why Edward knew he was going to marry Bella when she was first brought to live with the Cullens. She was 11, and he was older (not sure by how much), so what did he see/feel? Very intrigued by that.
Also, the fact that he painstakingly glued his own birthday present together after Jasper destroyed Bella's drawing made me fall in love with Edward. *dreamy sigh*
Excellent chapter. I love your use of similes to paint a very vivid visual picture for us. How's that for alliteration? lol
1/26/2012 c3 SDFanFicChic
What an awesome chapter-I want you to know I don't do WIPS often- but I'm glad I'm here for the ride. There was so much to digest in this chapter-I like that Jane and Tanya aren't villians from the get go. I'm intrigued by the fact that the Cullens are the bad guys in this story. I take it that Jasper dumped Alice..and now Emmett has made an appearance. Can't wait till next week thank you!
What an awesome chapter-I want you to know I don't do WIPS often- but I'm glad I'm here for the ride. There was so much to digest in this chapter-I like that Jane and Tanya aren't villians from the get go. I'm intrigued by the fact that the Cullens are the bad guys in this story. I take it that Jasper dumped Alice..and now Emmett has made an appearance. Can't wait till next week thank you!
1/26/2012 c2 SDFanFicChic
So intrigued. How/why would the family turn their backs if she was one of them? Why did he leave? So many questions running in my mind.
So intrigued. How/why would the family turn their backs if she was one of them? Why did he leave? So many questions running in my mind.
1/26/2012 c1 SDFanFicChic
My good friend and fairy fanficmother Carmelita Gabriel rec'd this story to me. I already know I'm going to love it. You give beautiful detail and description and you write so well. Thank you the story plot seems very intresting as well.
My good friend and fairy fanficmother Carmelita Gabriel rec'd this story to me. I already know I'm going to love it. You give beautiful detail and description and you write so well. Thank you the story plot seems very intresting as well.
1/26/2012 c3 frlarsson
Love the chapter =) love the progress, her blowing off some steam by pummeling Edward with objects LOL and knowing more about her story, glad she´s got both Alice, Tanya and Jane.
Best wishes, Linda xo
Love the chapter =) love the progress, her blowing off some steam by pummeling Edward with objects LOL and knowing more about her story, glad she´s got both Alice, Tanya and Jane.
Best wishes, Linda xo
1/26/2012 c3 6VampiresHaveLaws
This is exactly my kind of story, I can't even tell you. I'm so excited by it already.
I want to be so angry at the Cullens, but I have a sneaking suspicion there is a lot more to it than them simply breaking contact because of a divorce. Or at least I hope so.
Great chapter. :]
6VampiresHaveLawsThis is exactly my kind of story, I can't even tell you. I'm so excited by it already.
I want to be so angry at the Cullens, but I have a sneaking suspicion there is a lot more to it than them simply breaking contact because of a divorce. Or at least I hope so.
Great chapter. :]
1/26/2012 c3 Lisalouise
I am glad to see Bella stand up for herself. The Cullens are really different in this story than anything else I have ever read. I like that. I can't wait for the next update. Thanks for writing.
Lisa
I am glad to see Bella stand up for herself. The Cullens are really different in this story than anything else I have ever read. I like that. I can't wait for the next update. Thanks for writing.
Lisa