for The Fall2/20/2012 c9 The Lost Violinist
Whenever there is a story of Feanor going to the Halls of Mandos, we don't really see the events that happened as it progressed, like Miriel returning to life after Finwe died. But yes, it's funny to see that Feanor and Miriel technically 'create' history beneath their respective fingertips, she as the weaving woman and he as the one who destroys and recreates.
Whenever there is a story of Feanor going to the Halls of Mandos, we don't really see the events that happened as it progressed, like Miriel returning to life after Finwe died. But yes, it's funny to see that Feanor and Miriel technically 'create' history beneath their respective fingertips, she as the weaving woman and he as the one who destroys and recreates.
2/20/2012 c8 The Lost Violinist
Well, Maedhros, I think the one strong enough to bear the sins of your people would have to Maglor, the one still alive and still walking and still singing on the shores that he wanders. But you've had your fair share of pains, haven't you?
Well, Maedhros, I think the one strong enough to bear the sins of your people would have to Maglor, the one still alive and still walking and still singing on the shores that he wanders. But you've had your fair share of pains, haven't you?
2/20/2012 c7 The Lost Violinist
Now I am not sure which of the twins you chose to portray as the Fated. Would it be the surviving one who was the Fated because he was forced to live in insanity? Or is it the Fated who was fated to die in the burning of the ships?
He cannot live his life without his brother, without the other half of his soul. Interesting notion.
Now I am not sure which of the twins you chose to portray as the Fated. Would it be the surviving one who was the Fated because he was forced to live in insanity? Or is it the Fated who was fated to die in the burning of the ships?
He cannot live his life without his brother, without the other half of his soul. Interesting notion.
2/20/2012 c6 The Lost Violinist
Not much is disclosed about Caranthir, except for the fact that he was one of the harsher sons, the Dark, they call him. It's sad that he died in the Sack of Doriath. You put him in more of an almost protective light, or perhaps that is just me imagining things, but if you were to anger him (perhaps, bring harm to his brothers or his people?) he would not forgive you, ever.
Not much is disclosed about Caranthir, except for the fact that he was one of the harsher sons, the Dark, they call him. It's sad that he died in the Sack of Doriath. You put him in more of an almost protective light, or perhaps that is just me imagining things, but if you were to anger him (perhaps, bring harm to his brothers or his people?) he would not forgive you, ever.
2/20/2012 c5 The Lost Violinist
Something spurs on the last few lines of the first stanza. It seems as if Curufin is being worn down, but his madness, the fire within him, keeps him going to the end.
Something spurs on the last few lines of the first stanza. It seems as if Curufin is being worn down, but his madness, the fire within him, keeps him going to the end.
2/20/2012 c4 The Lost Violinist
'In that moment / I was my father's son / In that moment /our fates became undone' is an especially strong statement, as if Maglor would associate violence and untamed war with his father, and he who committed it would finally be linked to him through not just blood but personality. It's nice to see that you have Maglor forced to stay alive instead of drowning along with Beleriand.
'In that moment / I was my father's son / In that moment /our fates became undone' is an especially strong statement, as if Maglor would associate violence and untamed war with his father, and he who committed it would finally be linked to him through not just blood but personality. It's nice to see that you have Maglor forced to stay alive instead of drowning along with Beleriand.
2/20/2012 c3 The Lost Violinist
Celegorm's madness is reflected through this poem. You brought in the notion of his being a companion of Orome, a hunter, through 'keen eyes upon prey / flint sharpened that is grey / you cannot escape my gaze / when I am trained to follow you...' which is interesting. But you didn't mention Huan, which I am a bit surprised to find. Is it because Celegorm would no longer like associate himself with his great hound who betrayed his wrongdoings?
Celegorm's madness is reflected through this poem. You brought in the notion of his being a companion of Orome, a hunter, through 'keen eyes upon prey / flint sharpened that is grey / you cannot escape my gaze / when I am trained to follow you...' which is interesting. But you didn't mention Huan, which I am a bit surprised to find. Is it because Celegorm would no longer like associate himself with his great hound who betrayed his wrongdoings?
2/20/2012 c2 The Lost Violinist
'I was locked / within a wall / of blood and flame / but it was only ever / the beginning of our fall.' I'm curious to know which twin you meant this to be, as Tolkien's drafts leave us with curiosity. The theme of fire was brought in nicely with the death of this certain son, and to say that he is the last king makes sense, as 'Finwe' is actually associated with king. Perhaps, by that, you mean that Telufinwe is this character?
'I was locked / within a wall / of blood and flame / but it was only ever / the beginning of our fall.' I'm curious to know which twin you meant this to be, as Tolkien's drafts leave us with curiosity. The theme of fire was brought in nicely with the death of this certain son, and to say that he is the last king makes sense, as 'Finwe' is actually associated with king. Perhaps, by that, you mean that Telufinwe is this character?
2/20/2012 c1 The Lost Violinist
This is an interesting take on Celebrimbor, admittedly. The second 'paragraph' was more of an emotional outbreak, as if he was actually admitting his wrong and then covering it up with a taunt at Sauron with torture. You have an interesting way of conveying lines of a poem, as if it was wild and rapid with untamed rhymes that just seem to fit the House of Feanor perfectly.
This is an interesting take on Celebrimbor, admittedly. The second 'paragraph' was more of an emotional outbreak, as if he was actually admitting his wrong and then covering it up with a taunt at Sauron with torture. You have an interesting way of conveying lines of a poem, as if it was wild and rapid with untamed rhymes that just seem to fit the House of Feanor perfectly.
2/19/2012 c9 
5Sadie Sil - English stories
I read all of them in a row... I just couldn't stop!. Love them all. How did you get such inspiration?
Great job. As always.
love
Sadie
5Sadie Sil - English storiesI read all of them in a row... I just couldn't stop!. Love them all. How did you get such inspiration?
Great job. As always.
love
Sadie
2/2/2012 c9 26CrackinAndProudOfIt
These were absolutely amazing! Your language was so powerful and beautiful; you captured the essence of each Feanorian so well. I also noticed the motif of the colour red throughout many of them, which fits them perfectly. I think I liked the Curufin one best, even though all of them were astounding!
-Crackers :)
26CrackinAndProudOfItThese were absolutely amazing! Your language was so powerful and beautiful; you captured the essence of each Feanorian so well. I also noticed the motif of the colour red throughout many of them, which fits them perfectly. I think I liked the Curufin one best, even though all of them were astounding!
-Crackers :)
1/30/2012 c5 Galad Estel
My favorite lines:
and ignore your cries
and silence the scream
before it reaches your teeth?
My favorite lines:
and ignore your cries
and silence the scream
before it reaches your teeth?