for Don't Hate the Game, Hate the Player4/19/2012 c1 
2Kuro-Puppy Suwa
You started to lose me after a while, there were so many inconsistancies. For instance, when did they get their suits? Were they walking around in them all day? Also, it started to get really confusing with the criminal, to many he's and hims with no real indication of who was doing what.
2Kuro-Puppy SuwaYou started to lose me after a while, there were so many inconsistancies. For instance, when did they get their suits? Were they walking around in them all day? Also, it started to get really confusing with the criminal, to many he's and hims with no real indication of who was doing what.
3/15/2012 c1 13Princess Twila
NO NO NO THAT IS NOT A SATISFYING ENDING!
sorry, that was a tad bit rude of me; i'll try giving it a more polite twist: would you mind ending it differently so that they end up as a couple? pretty please? with a cherry on top? (ha ha...cherries)
13Princess TwilaNO NO NO THAT IS NOT A SATISFYING ENDING!
sorry, that was a tad bit rude of me; i'll try giving it a more polite twist: would you mind ending it differently so that they end up as a couple? pretty please? with a cherry on top? (ha ha...cherries)