for Pure Happenstance9/16/2012 c1 
12Siren of the Sand
Awwwwwwwwwww! I love it! I've never even entertained the idea of fem!ash, but this is adorable!
12Siren of the SandAwwwwwwwwwww! I love it! I've never even entertained the idea of fem!ash, but this is adorable!
3/13/2012 c1 25crazy YinYang writer7
I love how you writtenthis story. I never would never would of thought of this kind of plot for them.
Espcailly love how the story flows in as the reader reads this, how Gary list his edvidence is one of my favorite parts,
25crazy YinYang writer7I love how you writtenthis story. I never would never would of thought of this kind of plot for them.
Espcailly love how the story flows in as the reader reads this, how Gary list his edvidence is one of my favorite parts,
2/4/2012 c1 5Aside
This story is a nice read that doesn't cross into uncomfortable territory as much as I thought it would.
The writing is good and the plot itself well set up. There is an unnecessary section where Gary lists evidence in a hilariously awkward fashion ("So I discarded all those thoughts and decided to go straight to the source, yes, I hacked into your birth records.")
but for the most part the dialogue was handled well.
The plot moved very quickly, which is something I liked; however, the arrangement of the plot was odd. The flashback could have been chronologically placed in the story without making it a flashback.
That's all I have to say. I wish you well in future endeavors.
5AsideThis story is a nice read that doesn't cross into uncomfortable territory as much as I thought it would.
The writing is good and the plot itself well set up. There is an unnecessary section where Gary lists evidence in a hilariously awkward fashion ("So I discarded all those thoughts and decided to go straight to the source, yes, I hacked into your birth records.")
but for the most part the dialogue was handled well.
The plot moved very quickly, which is something I liked; however, the arrangement of the plot was odd. The flashback could have been chronologically placed in the story without making it a flashback.
That's all I have to say. I wish you well in future endeavors.