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2Shojo-Chan
1) 72 words is not a story. It is not even a drabble.
2) Jennifer is the name of the actress in the two-parter. Sophia is the character that she plays.
3) You have to capitalize and punctuate your sentences. A friend or beta reader can help you proofread, or you can get a program like spell-check.
I suggest that you edit and add to this, then repost. Since Pandora and Linchpin already aired, (and were pretty damn awesome) I'm curious to see how your story will be different than them. You may even want to just think of a different plot line, since many people won't want to read a different version of something that already happened.
2Shojo-Chan1) 72 words is not a story. It is not even a drabble.
2) Jennifer is the name of the actress in the two-parter. Sophia is the character that she plays.
3) You have to capitalize and punctuate your sentences. A friend or beta reader can help you proofread, or you can get a program like spell-check.
I suggest that you edit and add to this, then repost. Since Pandora and Linchpin already aired, (and were pretty damn awesome) I'm curious to see how your story will be different than them. You may even want to just think of a different plot line, since many people won't want to read a different version of something that already happened.