for The Bright Sun6/5/2012 c21 Confetti108
Oh yes! Im so bald that your back. :) It may not seem like it to you but this is a cliff hanger, you can't do that your leaving it at a good part I want to know what will happen. Please update soon.
Oh yes! Im so bald that your back. :) It may not seem like it to you but this is a cliff hanger, you can't do that your leaving it at a good part I want to know what will happen. Please update soon.
4/29/2012 c20 AnimeGirl433
Huh... That was fast... :/
Anyways, love the title for the chapter. 'Mine'
I saw where that was going... XD
You and your OCs. You're killing me here.
They are so perfect! :D
A little bit of spelling errors. But that's it. A bit.
The dialogue is very well done too!
I think you do better as a Third Person writer... You add more vocabulary and more detail.
And to ask.. Is Soul your favorite character? You seem to like him a lot. :P
That's it but I can't wait till next chapter! :D
Huh... That was fast... :/
Anyways, love the title for the chapter. 'Mine'
I saw where that was going... XD
You and your OCs. You're killing me here.
They are so perfect! :D
A little bit of spelling errors. But that's it. A bit.
The dialogue is very well done too!
I think you do better as a Third Person writer... You add more vocabulary and more detail.
And to ask.. Is Soul your favorite character? You seem to like him a lot. :P
That's it but I can't wait till next chapter! :D
4/28/2012 c19 AnimeGirl433
I just realized... That... You... Wrote the... Story with Cloud and your OC... Wow... I love that story...
ANYWAYS, I love this story too! Seeing that this is your first fanfic... I love it... I remember faving it and never reading it after a while... Terrible mistake.. You keep on improving a lot! I love your use of vocabulary and plot! I think chapter 16 was my favorite though with the songs... Love KH and FF7
Also I agree with Confetti108 because Soul just becomes more sweet by chapter! Especially the fever one... Soul is such a clutz. XD
Anyways I look forward to your update and can't wait for ch 20! :D
I just realized... That... You... Wrote the... Story with Cloud and your OC... Wow... I love that story...
ANYWAYS, I love this story too! Seeing that this is your first fanfic... I love it... I remember faving it and never reading it after a while... Terrible mistake.. You keep on improving a lot! I love your use of vocabulary and plot! I think chapter 16 was my favorite though with the songs... Love KH and FF7
Also I agree with Confetti108 because Soul just becomes more sweet by chapter! Especially the fever one... Soul is such a clutz. XD
Anyways I look forward to your update and can't wait for ch 20! :D
3/22/2012 c19 Confetti108
hahahaha just imagning soul making that face is making me laugh and its so sweet that he starting to become more and more sweeter by chapter! I just love it. :)
hahahaha just imagning soul making that face is making me laugh and its so sweet that he starting to become more and more sweeter by chapter! I just love it. :)
3/20/2012 c5 
3echoing song
The characters are good. The plot is good. But the writing could use some work. It would make it easier to read if you formatted the dialogue more conventionally. But overal nice story.
3echoing songThe characters are good. The plot is good. But the writing could use some work. It would make it easier to read if you formatted the dialogue more conventionally. But overal nice story.
3/17/2012 c18 1Confetti108
That was an amazingly put together chapter and now im afarid if Hinata is going to hurt me because i did laugh! 0.0 im worried!
1Confetti108That was an amazingly put together chapter and now im afarid if Hinata is going to hurt me because i did laugh! 0.0 im worried!
3/15/2012 c17 Confetti108
Good job for Hinata for actually being able to fight Black*Star! And you did a really good job of keeping Black*Star in character, and i also enjoined this long chapter all and all cant wait for the next one guess i have to be patient!
Good job for Hinata for actually being able to fight Black*Star! And you did a really good job of keeping Black*Star in character, and i also enjoined this long chapter all and all cant wait for the next one guess i have to be patient!
3/10/2012 c4 35Kiteria
This is good, some sentence placement errors, but good. Though I personally like kid and maka stories this ones okay
35KiteriaThis is good, some sentence placement errors, but good. Though I personally like kid and maka stories this ones okay
3/9/2012 c16 wolf of the wind 26
I absolutely love this fanfic. Soul and hinata make a good couple. Best written fanfic of soul eater iv read so far. I look forward to more of your fanfics
I absolutely love this fanfic. Soul and hinata make a good couple. Best written fanfic of soul eater iv read so far. I look forward to more of your fanfics
3/7/2012 c16 1Confetti108
Very very cute chapter! And thanks for gving me credit, those songs do fit them just so perfectly. i think this is my favorite chapter.
1Confetti108Very very cute chapter! And thanks for gving me credit, those songs do fit them just so perfectly. i think this is my favorite chapter.