for My fiancee1/20 c1 
5DarkLilyAndRose
The concept of the story was good. Maybe go back and edit some? I notice some grammer problems-
-Leah :)
5DarkLilyAndRoseThe concept of the story was good. Maybe go back and edit some? I notice some grammer problems-
-Leah :)
4/4/2012 c1 1Il.mio.nome.e.Chrome.Dokuro
Hi! I just saw this and I've gotta say I always loved Kazuki and Ryuutaro better but there are so few Inuyasha crossovers with La Corda that I just HAD to read this. I just wanted to drop by and tell you what a great job you've done although I wish you could have dropped the flashback right around the beginning while the drama is still unfolding. Over all, thanks for the good job; it's nice to see people writing things that are out of the ordinary; canon can be boring sometimes.
~Il.mio.nome.e.Chrome.Dokuro
1Il.mio.nome.e.Chrome.DokuroHi! I just saw this and I've gotta say I always loved Kazuki and Ryuutaro better but there are so few Inuyasha crossovers with La Corda that I just HAD to read this. I just wanted to drop by and tell you what a great job you've done although I wish you could have dropped the flashback right around the beginning while the drama is still unfolding. Over all, thanks for the good job; it's nice to see people writing things that are out of the ordinary; canon can be boring sometimes.
~Il.mio.nome.e.Chrome.Dokuro
4/4/2012 c1 2Kotei-Heika
Hi! I told you I was gonna read this, right?
I have to say thanks for telling me to read this, it was quite nice. You've paid so much detail to Yunoki's character and even his movements! If I were Kagome I'd probably be insecure being his fiancee too. The guy's just too PERFECT! This is the reason why I like Ryuutaro better lol
(MAJOR BLUSH OVERLOAD)
I can never get used to lemons, Lord help me; HOW DO YOU DO THIS? You're good at it so I am not complaining.
The ending was so mushy and the premise was good but I wish you would put flashbacks in or around the beginning and not the end. It would have been better to put it where the drama was still developing and not when it was already finished; just saying I hope I didn't offend.
Thank you so much for writing this and sharing this with me.
-Kotei-Heika ^_^v
2Kotei-HeikaHi! I told you I was gonna read this, right?
I have to say thanks for telling me to read this, it was quite nice. You've paid so much detail to Yunoki's character and even his movements! If I were Kagome I'd probably be insecure being his fiancee too. The guy's just too PERFECT! This is the reason why I like Ryuutaro better lol
(MAJOR BLUSH OVERLOAD)
I can never get used to lemons, Lord help me; HOW DO YOU DO THIS? You're good at it so I am not complaining.
The ending was so mushy and the premise was good but I wish you would put flashbacks in or around the beginning and not the end. It would have been better to put it where the drama was still developing and not when it was already finished; just saying I hope I didn't offend.
Thank you so much for writing this and sharing this with me.
-Kotei-Heika ^_^v
3/5/2012 c1 Jessica
OMG This is truly lovely, and aww inspiring, not to mention cute too. X)
OMG This is truly lovely, and aww inspiring, not to mention cute too. X)
3/4/2012 c1 4AnimeFreakAmanda
Not bad. I like the lemon ^^
You're missing a bit punctuation and capitalizations here and there. But that's it.
Nice job!
4AnimeFreakAmandaNot bad. I like the lemon ^^
You're missing a bit punctuation and capitalizations here and there. But that's it.
Nice job!