for The Distance10/23/2012 c1 yay
This is really nicely done, and I like the reference to running a mile.
This is really nicely done, and I like the reference to running a mile.
8/30/2012 c1 Guest
This is lovely. Your imagery is wonderful and so fitting. I kind of wish that the series ended like this, with a slightly bittersweet but open-ended. I think your perspective of Alek's thoughts and emotions rings very true.
One of my favorite lines:
"No longer full of secrets to separate them, but of truths. Between them there was nothing left to be said."
This is lovely. Your imagery is wonderful and so fitting. I kind of wish that the series ended like this, with a slightly bittersweet but open-ended. I think your perspective of Alek's thoughts and emotions rings very true.
One of my favorite lines:
"No longer full of secrets to separate them, but of truths. Between them there was nothing left to be said."
3/10/2012 c1 
4EllieStone
Ughhhh. What are my emotions doing over here?
I love seeing things from Alek's perspective, because I feel like I just don't understand him as well as Deryn. But YOU seem to know exactly what's going on in his head!
4EllieStoneUghhhh. What are my emotions doing over here?
I love seeing things from Alek's perspective, because I feel like I just don't understand him as well as Deryn. But YOU seem to know exactly what's going on in his head!
3/9/2012 c1 3Middy Miles
Alright. I liked it! I think you captured Alek's emotions very well, and some of your words and phrasing is beautiful. Your only real problem is keeping it all in the same tense. You have to choose one, and I noticed you hopping between past and present almost at every other sentence. "Is" vs. "Was" and so on. You get the picture.
This was good, though. Keep it up!
3Middy MilesAlright. I liked it! I think you captured Alek's emotions very well, and some of your words and phrasing is beautiful. Your only real problem is keeping it all in the same tense. You have to choose one, and I noticed you hopping between past and present almost at every other sentence. "Is" vs. "Was" and so on. You get the picture.
This was good, though. Keep it up!
3/8/2012 c1 jibblitmuffins3675
AAAWWWW! That ending was so cute! Thios was a really REALLY good story! ! loved it!
AAAWWWW! That ending was so cute! Thios was a really REALLY good story! ! loved it!
3/7/2012 c1 1stopthattimerave
D'aw; poor Alek~ We don't see his side of this, and this is quite interesting. Keep it up, love~
-Rave
1stopthattimeraveD'aw; poor Alek~ We don't see his side of this, and this is quite interesting. Keep it up, love~
-Rave
3/7/2012 c1 1Barking Spiders
Beautiful. I love how you made Alek jealous. You know you're a very talented writer, keep it up.
Also I'm new here and I would love such a good writer like you to review my story. Thanks! :)
1Barking SpidersBeautiful. I love how you made Alek jealous. You know you're a very talented writer, keep it up.
Also I'm new here and I would love such a good writer like you to review my story. Thanks! :)