for OtherLand4/27 c17 Michelle
Yay new chapter!
My first reaction while reading the first few lines was this:
"Wait what? There was a character named Michelle and what is wrong with the guy? Goes back to rereading the previous chapters. I don't see her, so she must be a new character! Goes to finish reading this chapter"
Yeah, sorry I don't have an account. But if I had an account I would have to change my name and you may not remember me
This chapter was interesting! I am excited on what happens next!
Oh, good luck with the army! Don't overwork yourself!
Well till next time
*smiles*
Yay new chapter!
My first reaction while reading the first few lines was this:
"Wait what? There was a character named Michelle and what is wrong with the guy? Goes back to rereading the previous chapters. I don't see her, so she must be a new character! Goes to finish reading this chapter"
Yeah, sorry I don't have an account. But if I had an account I would have to change my name and you may not remember me
This chapter was interesting! I am excited on what happens next!
Oh, good luck with the army! Don't overwork yourself!
Well till next time
*smiles*
4/2 c16 Guest
PrinceXGui please! Also more Jia and Prince interaction! Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good!
PrinceXGui please! Also more Jia and Prince interaction! Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good!
3/15 c16 Michelle
Yay new chapter!
I was laughing when she dragged that woman and threw her
Oh dear! I do hope your ankle and leg get better soon.
Just be more careful from now on, don't want you to end up in a coma or the hospital.
And get some sleep too!
Well I will be waiting for the next chapter!
*smiles*
Yay new chapter!
I was laughing when she dragged that woman and threw her
Oh dear! I do hope your ankle and leg get better soon.
Just be more careful from now on, don't want you to end up in a coma or the hospital.
And get some sleep too!
Well I will be waiting for the next chapter!
*smiles*
2/2 c15 Michelle
Congrats!
Yay your dream is coming true! *cheers*
I hate it when the computer does that...
Wow, what a fight
Can't wait for the next chapter
*smiles*
Congrats!
Yay your dream is coming true! *cheers*
I hate it when the computer does that...
Wow, what a fight
Can't wait for the next chapter
*smiles*
1/26 c14 
3bleeb90
Yay for your update! Awesome you make time for us readers if you have so little to spare!
I love Kenshin-Jia interaction, I'd like to read more about that. Fighting scenes are nice and necessary because you write about a mmorpg - but please do remember you strength lies with the human drama. I love Lin Qingxuan - sounds like a delicious demanding character.
Kind of sad you can boast about rifle skills though. I sincerely hope you won't encounter a situation where you are ordered to shoot sharp.
btw;
I came across some spelling/grammar errors:
Cut in Lu, - Cut lu in
QUASTIONS! - QUESTIONS!
like a bloke of ice. - like a bloke made of ice.
NO TIME to breath. - breathe
3bleeb90Yay for your update! Awesome you make time for us readers if you have so little to spare!
I love Kenshin-Jia interaction, I'd like to read more about that. Fighting scenes are nice and necessary because you write about a mmorpg - but please do remember you strength lies with the human drama. I love Lin Qingxuan - sounds like a delicious demanding character.
Kind of sad you can boast about rifle skills though. I sincerely hope you won't encounter a situation where you are ordered to shoot sharp.
btw;
I came across some spelling/grammar errors:
Cut in Lu, - Cut lu in
QUASTIONS! - QUESTIONS!
like a bloke of ice. - like a bloke made of ice.
NO TIME to breath. - breathe
1/21 c3 Guest
The chapter is good. But, you still referred to Hawk as Falcon once.
The chapter is good. But, you still referred to Hawk as Falcon once.
1/20 c14 Michelle
Yay a new chapter!
Wow... You learned to shoot a rifle and have been through a lot of hard work!
Good Job! You are doing well as a soldier!
Heres a brownie for all your hard work!
Ahh...
You wouldn't get me to leave so easily.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
*smiles*
Yay a new chapter!
Wow... You learned to shoot a rifle and have been through a lot of hard work!
Good Job! You are doing well as a soldier!
Heres a brownie for all your hard work!
Ahh...
You wouldn't get me to leave so easily.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
*smiles*
1/20 c14 Michelle
Yay, you made a new chapter!
Wow...
You learned to shoot a rifle and been through a lot of hard work.
Good Job! You are a good soldier
Heres a brownie for all your hard work!
Yay, you made a new chapter!
Wow...
You learned to shoot a rifle and been through a lot of hard work.
Good Job! You are a good soldier
Heres a brownie for all your hard work!
1/19 c14 1dartya
Hello, I'm still here
Well, I'll probably be here till forever- comes with being a teen who kinda doesn't really have a life and is obsessed with any kind of reading.
I'm glad that you're doing fine.
Shame on you, I found a mistake! Just joking, its nothing thaat bad- you spelled quite instead of quiet when Lan thinks about where to go. It's not a big mistake, but it is one of those that seriously annoy me.
Once I read a fic where passion was used instead of position. Annoying as heck.
Hope you're doing fine
1dartyaHello, I'm still here
Well, I'll probably be here till forever- comes with being a teen who kinda doesn't really have a life and is obsessed with any kind of reading.
I'm glad that you're doing fine.
Shame on you, I found a mistake! Just joking, its nothing thaat bad- you spelled quite instead of quiet when Lan thinks about where to go. It's not a big mistake, but it is one of those that seriously annoy me.
Once I read a fic where passion was used instead of position. Annoying as heck.
Hope you're doing fine
11/18/2012 c13 dartya
Ooh, you put in the idea of Wicked and Gui eloping :)
I don't really have anything to say- just the usual OMG you're like so perfect and your writing feels so real and cool and you understand Feng Lan's feelings like soo well.
Ahem.
I won't go pretending that I understand what is happening in your life and country. I know rather well that despite my rather large knowledge on random stuff, I am somewhat naive and I tend to lack common sense and courtesy.
So, only thing I can say- good luck with whatever you're doing. I'll keep on reading this and I hope you will keep on writing this.
Ooh, you put in the idea of Wicked and Gui eloping :)
I don't really have anything to say- just the usual OMG you're like so perfect and your writing feels so real and cool and you understand Feng Lan's feelings like soo well.
Ahem.
I won't go pretending that I understand what is happening in your life and country. I know rather well that despite my rather large knowledge on random stuff, I am somewhat naive and I tend to lack common sense and courtesy.
So, only thing I can say- good luck with whatever you're doing. I'll keep on reading this and I hope you will keep on writing this.
11/18/2012 c13 Michelle
Yay!
Chapter 12 is out! *cheers*
Thanks, and good luck out there *saluts*
Yay!
Chapter 12 is out! *cheers*
Thanks, and good luck out there *saluts*
11/16/2012 c12 2FreezinWinter
Wow
A law to join the army?!
Uhhhhhhh
I guess it's an honor
Ummmm I think you should finish the chapters then update
2FreezinWinterWow
A law to join the army?!
Uhhhhhhh
I guess it's an honor
Ummmm I think you should finish the chapters then update
11/14/2012 c12 Michelle
Congrtulations!
Whatever you decide is best and easier for you, on the uploading of ch 12.
Being in the military is a lot of work, so good luck!
Congrtulations!
Whatever you decide is best and easier for you, on the uploading of ch 12.
Being in the military is a lot of work, so good luck!
11/14/2012 c12 3bleeb90
Hi there! Although I fail to understand why anyone would be happy with obligatory military service, as long as you are happy with it, I'm happy for you!
On the note of being happy: I am really happy that you decided not to abandon this fanfic - it's a piece of art and should be treated as such.
As for chapter 12: post it as a whole. If you post the first half, you can't make last minute changes. Personally I'd be miffed if I couldn't do so because the first half would already be posted...
3bleeb90Hi there! Although I fail to understand why anyone would be happy with obligatory military service, as long as you are happy with it, I'm happy for you!
On the note of being happy: I am really happy that you decided not to abandon this fanfic - it's a piece of art and should be treated as such.
As for chapter 12: post it as a whole. If you post the first half, you can't make last minute changes. Personally I'd be miffed if I couldn't do so because the first half would already be posted...