for The Best Times Of Our Lives4/12/2012 c17 tbird1965
Awwww. Teenage Severus is always sooo cute. Great chapter, very focused. I liked it.
Awwww. Teenage Severus is always sooo cute. Great chapter, very focused. I liked it.
4/8/2012 c16 DepressionInTheFlesh
Good chapter. A lot of stuff to take in. I suggest showing the scenes instead doing so many overviews though. It's basically a summery now, try writing it like a movie like you're watching it and not just relating it to someone. Great job though!
Good chapter. A lot of stuff to take in. I suggest showing the scenes instead doing so many overviews though. It's basically a summery now, try writing it like a movie like you're watching it and not just relating it to someone. Great job though!
4/1/2012 c14 DepressionInTheFlesh
Good chapter. I enjoyed the reveal of the names. U give too much info in ans tho...
Good chapter. I enjoyed the reveal of the names. U give too much info in ans tho...
3/31/2012 c13 DepressionInTheFlesh
Thank you. This made me feel tons better. I really enjoyed it. I think Draco and ginny are best friends.
Thank you. This made me feel tons better. I really enjoyed it. I think Draco and ginny are best friends.
3/30/2012 c13 tbird1965
Alerts aren't working...so I didn't know you'd updated. Interesting chapter, you have a LOT going on. Be careful that it doesn't get confusing. I'm excited to see what happens now that they are back in time.
Alerts aren't working...so I didn't know you'd updated. Interesting chapter, you have a LOT going on. Be careful that it doesn't get confusing. I'm excited to see what happens now that they are back in time.
3/24/2012 c10 DepressionInTheFlesh
This was really good! I'm glad you thought to put in all their purchases.
This was really good! I'm glad you thought to put in all their purchases.
3/23/2012 c8 DepressionInTheFlesh
It's Draco that's adopted. Thank you for this... I loved it. A few grammar mistakes and misspellings but other than that it was awesome. So the readers finally got her name. About time. Did you get the inspiration for Ginny's clothes from the new Gallagher Girls book? Cuz that exact outfit is on the cover of Out of Sight, Out of Time.
It's Draco that's adopted. Thank you for this... I loved it. A few grammar mistakes and misspellings but other than that it was awesome. So the readers finally got her name. About time. Did you get the inspiration for Ginny's clothes from the new Gallagher Girls book? Cuz that exact outfit is on the cover of Out of Sight, Out of Time.
3/23/2012 c8 tbird1965
So Moira is she? I wonder why she has such an uneducated accent.."ain't" and such...
Be careful of your paragraphs, when a new person speaks it should be a new paragraph. It gets too confusing trying to figure out who's speaking when you don't.
Will a young Lucius play a part in your story?
Oh and Jack is Whiskey, not Brandy. I should know, I drink me a lot of Jack.
So Moira is she? I wonder why she has such an uneducated accent.."ain't" and such...
Be careful of your paragraphs, when a new person speaks it should be a new paragraph. It gets too confusing trying to figure out who's speaking when you don't.
Will a young Lucius play a part in your story?
Oh and Jack is Whiskey, not Brandy. I should know, I drink me a lot of Jack.