for The MoonShine Chronicles2/13 c25 Zoeeeeeeeeeeeeee
o-o Oh holy bejesus. **'s goin' down. Damn that one vampire to hell.
o-o Oh holy bejesus. **'s goin' down. Damn that one vampire to hell.
12/3/2012 c25 Guest
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
12/3/2012 c1 
1littlelillium
Enjoyed the first chapter so far, love how you have jumped straight into the action. Its brilliant how you have described it all, easy to imagine and feel already involved. Well done, I look forward to reading some more soon.
1littlelilliumEnjoyed the first chapter so far, love how you have jumped straight into the action. Its brilliant how you have described it all, easy to imagine and feel already involved. Well done, I look forward to reading some more soon.
11/27/2012 c24 Guest
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
10/18/2012 c10 4RippahGoneWolf
Okay, I will be honest. I like the story. I do. But, you have to improve on the writing part. There's so many run on sentences. I'm only trying to help you on that. There's a couple of small Mary-Sue moments here and there, but nothing bad.
4RippahGoneWolfOkay, I will be honest. I like the story. I do. But, you have to improve on the writing part. There's so many run on sentences. I'm only trying to help you on that. There's a couple of small Mary-Sue moments here and there, but nothing bad.
9/12/2012 c27 1texican2436
Yay an update, I'm a little confused on how much times has passed in between everything, has it been years since they've been to the castle? Also just a note: your writting is very good, vivid but don't fall into the habit of too many run-on sentences. There was a few that could have been broken up into a few sentences to make a very nice paragraph. Otherwise this was great especially that last paragraph, the ghost of Sonja stands between them- that gave me a chill. I look forward to the next update
1texican2436Yay an update, I'm a little confused on how much times has passed in between everything, has it been years since they've been to the castle? Also just a note: your writting is very good, vivid but don't fall into the habit of too many run-on sentences. There was a few that could have been broken up into a few sentences to make a very nice paragraph. Otherwise this was great especially that last paragraph, the ghost of Sonja stands between them- that gave me a chill. I look forward to the next update
8/15/2012 c26 1texican2436
I love your imagery, very detailed. I hope u update soon love seeing how lucian and erzbet get closer
1texican2436I love your imagery, very detailed. I hope u update soon love seeing how lucian and erzbet get closer
7/27/2012 c25 17RogueMetamorph
This is a fantastically written story and I'm sorry that I didn't review every single chapter. There are very few errors and I can see most of this happening with Lucian and everyone.
However, it's a little Mary-Sue that these things keep happening. DON'T GET ME WRONG! I love the way this story is going and how many twists and turns occur, but be careful or it might be a bit much. Also, could you put a bit more interraction between Lucian, Erzsebet and the rest of the Lycans like Koro. It sort of feels like you're leaving them out. :(
Anyway, I love this story so much please don't be mad for my earlier editorial comments! This story is fantastic and well written. Great job!
You're fan,
RogueMetamorph
17RogueMetamorphThis is a fantastically written story and I'm sorry that I didn't review every single chapter. There are very few errors and I can see most of this happening with Lucian and everyone.
However, it's a little Mary-Sue that these things keep happening. DON'T GET ME WRONG! I love the way this story is going and how many twists and turns occur, but be careful or it might be a bit much. Also, could you put a bit more interraction between Lucian, Erzsebet and the rest of the Lycans like Koro. It sort of feels like you're leaving them out. :(
Anyway, I love this story so much please don't be mad for my earlier editorial comments! This story is fantastic and well written. Great job!
You're fan,
RogueMetamorph
7/20/2012 c25 1texican2436
The first few paragraphs were a little confusing but I was really happy once lucian found them. Love it
1texican2436The first few paragraphs were a little confusing but I was really happy once lucian found them. Love it