for Fate5/1 c33 742-X93
A much-excellent piece of work. I would give it a 10 out of 10. Maybe 1 grammar error per chapter but it's really little. I tend to hope that there are more chapters. A few to close up of course.
A much-excellent piece of work. I would give it a 10 out of 10. Maybe 1 grammar error per chapter but it's really little. I tend to hope that there are more chapters. A few to close up of course.
4/22 c12 Guest
I remember a few years ago I took my Kawasaki ninja out so i could pick up my girlfriends birthday cake and it started pouring on the way back. I then proceeded to slide out and roll it into a ditch, bike was fine, a little scuffed but fine, miracuosly the cake survived unscathed. I just thought it was ironic how similar the situations were.
I remember a few years ago I took my Kawasaki ninja out so i could pick up my girlfriends birthday cake and it started pouring on the way back. I then proceeded to slide out and roll it into a ditch, bike was fine, a little scuffed but fine, miracuosly the cake survived unscathed. I just thought it was ironic how similar the situations were.
3/12 c33 
3rene10
This is a great story, I've been addicted ever since I found it! I can't wait to see how it all ends and read more of your amazing stories!
3rene10This is a great story, I've been addicted ever since I found it! I can't wait to see how it all ends and read more of your amazing stories!
3/5 c33 snakedabomb
lol ive read all 33 chapters in 4 days. if you cant tell I rather enjoyed it so far. Keep up the hard work!
lol ive read all 33 chapters in 4 days. if you cant tell I rather enjoyed it so far. Keep up the hard work!
2/23 c3 Guest
So far I'm loving the story. I am not a big fan of fanfics that tend to lean into the non-canon side of the game, but the whole plot and your 'what if theory' is really eye catching. As long as you keep the characters in character I'm happy and you're doing a great job at it. :)
So far I'm loving the story. I am not a big fan of fanfics that tend to lean into the non-canon side of the game, but the whole plot and your 'what if theory' is really eye catching. As long as you keep the characters in character I'm happy and you're doing a great job at it. :)
2/18 c10 1Order and Chaos - Qui Iudicant
Really awesome chapter. That puts in some sexual tension for later. I'll keep reading to find out what comes next.
1Order and Chaos - Qui IudicantReally awesome chapter. That puts in some sexual tension for later. I'll keep reading to find out what comes next.
2/12 c3 Order and Chaos - Qui Iudicant
This was awesome. I LOLed when I reached the part of Krystal being discribed as 'as harmless as a fly' or 'as dangerous as Andross.'! LOL
This was awesome. I LOLed when I reached the part of Krystal being discribed as 'as harmless as a fly' or 'as dangerous as Andross.'! LOL
2/11 c1 Order and Chaos - Qui Iudicant
Hmm, this tells me it is going to be quite interesting. Looking foward to reading the rest of it when I get the time. :D I normally don't review a story until I finish it, but this is one of those which I make exceptions.
Oh, and Wolfsalvo recommended me to this story!
Hmm, this tells me it is going to be quite interesting. Looking foward to reading the rest of it when I get the time. :D I normally don't review a story until I finish it, but this is one of those which I make exceptions.
Oh, and Wolfsalvo recommended me to this story!
1/16 c33 Guest
Another flawless chapter. You find it boring because you know whats going to happen and its everyday stuff, yet we get exited because we dont know what is going to happen. Good job Cpt. Im anticipating the next chapter.
Another flawless chapter. You find it boring because you know whats going to happen and its everyday stuff, yet we get exited because we dont know what is going to happen. Good job Cpt. Im anticipating the next chapter.
1/14 c33 Xstar7
It may seem kinda plain at first in the chapter, but no matter what the fic is flawless! Bit the whole ship thing, that better not mean this ends soon. I can't compare this to much other Fics. Congrats on the best fic Ive read.
Sincerely, Xstar7
It may seem kinda plain at first in the chapter, but no matter what the fic is flawless! Bit the whole ship thing, that better not mean this ends soon. I can't compare this to much other Fics. Congrats on the best fic Ive read.
Sincerely, Xstar7
1/11 c33 17Wolfsalvo
So, he flew a huge ass space ship over the city, parked it in the water, and left it there, and Krystal still has no idea about the darn thing? DAWUM! lol. i would like to thank you for another great chapter, even if you yourself thought this one was boring, it was still good to read. real life stuff isnt always as boring as it may seem.
I am glad that you found a small amount of time to write again, and i would also like to thank you for giving me that big boost on Cerinia's Visitor, since then, i have been writing more in the starfox archive than i thought i would be. when i had started, i thought i would only write one story myself, but so far i have three currently on my profile. Anyways, good day to you, and even for a 'boring' chapter, it was still good.
17WolfsalvoSo, he flew a huge ass space ship over the city, parked it in the water, and left it there, and Krystal still has no idea about the darn thing? DAWUM! lol. i would like to thank you for another great chapter, even if you yourself thought this one was boring, it was still good to read. real life stuff isnt always as boring as it may seem.
I am glad that you found a small amount of time to write again, and i would also like to thank you for giving me that big boost on Cerinia's Visitor, since then, i have been writing more in the starfox archive than i thought i would be. when i had started, i thought i would only write one story myself, but so far i have three currently on my profile. Anyways, good day to you, and even for a 'boring' chapter, it was still good.