3/21/2012 c1 1BluuGirl
Hey, cool story!

This is an interesting plot. I really like the movement it has going on. I'm hoping that you'll get around to adding *this* chapter to the other ones in the original story, but that is besides the point.

I can't express ENOUGH how much I love the way you made Pavi's character. When he and Zella were dancing in the streets *great idea, btw, to distinguish that there are two different sides of Sanitarium*, I was scared that we had a Mary Sue on our hands. Ya know, converting evil characters from their bad habits left and right, being all perfect, and whatnot... but that was pretty cool when their at her apartment and the scalpel fell out of his sleeve! I was sitting there like "Whoa! What just happened?"

And of course we can't forget that in the very first chapter we have some ** gripping action. And not just with anyone, but with GRAVEROBBER. Now, I'm more of a Bill Moseley kind of person *Awesome that you got to go see the Devil's Carnival, btw*, but Terrance Zdunich is a TOTAL hunk. As someone once put it ever so tactfully "this man is sex on legs".

But all joking aside, I find this series something really entertaining and hope that you continue writing.

~Lysi