for All About Us9/23/2012 c14 insert name here
spelling is awful.
character is a mary sue.
's bad enough to steal but to steal from your family that is just sad.
4.I feel as if I lost intelligence from reading this.
My Rating: -10 out of 10
spelling is awful.
character is a mary sue.
's bad enough to steal but to steal from your family that is just sad.
4.I feel as if I lost intelligence from reading this.
My Rating: -10 out of 10
9/2/2012 c13 
3Si1verwing
Ughh, these words are vinegar in my throat, but...I am looking forward to the sequel.
-Agent Silverwing A.K.A. Sib/:-( Zoah, Rogue Elite Invader O:)-
3Si1verwingUghh, these words are vinegar in my throat, but...I am looking forward to the sequel.
-Agent Silverwing A.K.A. Sib/:-( Zoah, Rogue Elite Invader O:)-
7/26/2012 c14 The Bees' Knees
xD Okay, okay, if you say so. Just so you know, though, the main reason I think this is a troll fic (besides the fact that the Mary-Sueness is so blatantly obvious) is because the grammar and the plotline seem to get worse and worse as the story continues. Usually writing gets BETTER as it progresses, unless of course you're a troll, which I'm still convinced you are :)
Oh, and please stop stealing ideas from your sister. That's just wrong.
xD Okay, okay, if you say so. Just so you know, though, the main reason I think this is a troll fic (besides the fact that the Mary-Sueness is so blatantly obvious) is because the grammar and the plotline seem to get worse and worse as the story continues. Usually writing gets BETTER as it progresses, unless of course you're a troll, which I'm still convinced you are :)
Oh, and please stop stealing ideas from your sister. That's just wrong.
7/17/2012 c13 The Bees' Knees
Please let this be a troll fic. PLEASE let this be a troll fic. If it's not, I don't want to live on this planet anymore. The sheer stupidity is starting to get to me.
Please let this be a troll fic. PLEASE let this be a troll fic. If it's not, I don't want to live on this planet anymore. The sheer stupidity is starting to get to me.
7/7/2012 c10 2Raeline.S.Claud
And to anyone who needs proof that she's stealing from me:
All About Us{Published Draft}, written between 03/21/12 - 07/03/12:
“So how did you get too Earth?” Red asked opening another bag of chips.
“Well, I hated my life here on Irk so I ran away but after a few months on Eartth I realized my mistake and wanted to come back but I had already self-destructed my voot so I was stuck there.
Recall{First Draft}, document last edited in 2010:
“How did you get stranded on Earth,” Red asked as Purple ran his spindly fingers through my hair.
“Well I was running away and I wanted to get as far away as possible so I had heard of this small planet called Earth and well the rest is history,” I repeated the lie Zim had told me earlier, “I realized I had been wrong about a month later but I had already had my ship self-destruct so I was trapped.”
She even had the same damn character ask the question. And she dares to say I stole these ideas from her.
2Raeline.S.ClaudAnd to anyone who needs proof that she's stealing from me:
All About Us{Published Draft}, written between 03/21/12 - 07/03/12:
“So how did you get too Earth?” Red asked opening another bag of chips.
“Well, I hated my life here on Irk so I ran away but after a few months on Eartth I realized my mistake and wanted to come back but I had already self-destructed my voot so I was stuck there.
Recall{First Draft}, document last edited in 2010:
“How did you get stranded on Earth,” Red asked as Purple ran his spindly fingers through my hair.
“Well I was running away and I wanted to get as far away as possible so I had heard of this small planet called Earth and well the rest is history,” I repeated the lie Zim had told me earlier, “I realized I had been wrong about a month later but I had already had my ship self-destruct so I was trapped.”
She even had the same damn character ask the question. And she dares to say I stole these ideas from her.
7/6/2012 c11 21LoneTaku
I think part of the reason that you are having trouble with not so nice reviewers would be spelling mistakes as a reason. Try checking over your spelling and grammar before updating, or getting a beta reader. :)
21LoneTakuI think part of the reason that you are having trouble with not so nice reviewers would be spelling mistakes as a reason. Try checking over your spelling and grammar before updating, or getting a beta reader. :)
7/5/2012 c10 1Prettydog200
Okay, you're going WAY TOO FAR with this.
I'm MSTing your fic because it really is bad and the plot is rushed and is overall just INSANE. To be honest, I'm not jealous of your writing at all and I'm not a bitch. You're just a really bad writer with a massive ego. I know you're upset about this and a lot has been happening to you lately, but please take my word and leave me and TheFriendlyNeighborhoodNerd alone. We never meant to do you any real harm to you (or at least I don't. I can't say the same for FNN since we've only met recently after you bombed our blogs). We were just cracking a couple of jokes at the fic. But sometimes your writing can be so bad that we just have to blow our own steam off on it.
I don't want to see you get kicked off by this "Nate" guy so soon so please stop stealing ideas, be original, and GROW. UP.
P.S. NEVER make an author's note a chapter. That's unprofessional and it makes you look like an even worse writer. Also, you cannot control which reviews you want. That choice belongs to the reviewer.
1Prettydog200Okay, you're going WAY TOO FAR with this.
I'm MSTing your fic because it really is bad and the plot is rushed and is overall just INSANE. To be honest, I'm not jealous of your writing at all and I'm not a bitch. You're just a really bad writer with a massive ego. I know you're upset about this and a lot has been happening to you lately, but please take my word and leave me and TheFriendlyNeighborhoodNerd alone. We never meant to do you any real harm to you (or at least I don't. I can't say the same for FNN since we've only met recently after you bombed our blogs). We were just cracking a couple of jokes at the fic. But sometimes your writing can be so bad that we just have to blow our own steam off on it.
I don't want to see you get kicked off by this "Nate" guy so soon so please stop stealing ideas, be original, and GROW. UP.
P.S. NEVER make an author's note a chapter. That's unprofessional and it makes you look like an even worse writer. Also, you cannot control which reviews you want. That choice belongs to the reviewer.
7/5/2012 c11 2Raeline.S.Claud
Dear sister,
You know, I know that I gave up on a couple of these ideas but that still doesn't give you the right to searching through my personal computer and steal them. They're still my ideas and for you to go snooping around just because you're ideas are the same as everyone else's not only makes you a bad author but a sad, sad, morally corrupt excuse for a human. And to post on the story from which you stole these ideas with that lie of me stealing from you is just degrading. I swear to the Gods if you thieve from me one more time, I'm going to have Nate lock you out of your account. He gave it to you and he told you he'd take it away if you got into trouble. I think this would qualify as trouble. This is your final warning.
Sincerely,
Raeline
2Raeline.S.ClaudDear sister,
You know, I know that I gave up on a couple of these ideas but that still doesn't give you the right to searching through my personal computer and steal them. They're still my ideas and for you to go snooping around just because you're ideas are the same as everyone else's not only makes you a bad author but a sad, sad, morally corrupt excuse for a human. And to post on the story from which you stole these ideas with that lie of me stealing from you is just degrading. I swear to the Gods if you thieve from me one more time, I'm going to have Nate lock you out of your account. He gave it to you and he told you he'd take it away if you got into trouble. I think this would qualify as trouble. This is your final warning.
Sincerely,
Raeline
7/4/2012 c11 Mrfluffehz
You need to work on typing REAL words inste d of writng liek thios. And this seems to be... EVERYWHERE. And you stole ideas? Can't you come up with ORIGINAL ones? And I agree with that other person. Landia is a princess. Nothing is wrong with her. Another Mary Sue story. And you can't make some revies NOT ALLOWED. Really, we just want to help you.
P.S
Check your writing before you make another chapter. And plan the story out. Dont just go with the flow. MAKE UP YOUR OWN IDEAS.
You need to work on typing REAL words inste d of writng liek thios. And this seems to be... EVERYWHERE. And you stole ideas? Can't you come up with ORIGINAL ones? And I agree with that other person. Landia is a princess. Nothing is wrong with her. Another Mary Sue story. And you can't make some revies NOT ALLOWED. Really, we just want to help you.
P.S
Check your writing before you make another chapter. And plan the story out. Dont just go with the flow. MAKE UP YOUR OWN IDEAS.
7/2/2012 c9 Guest
You eep mentioning mean people. I don't see why they would be so mean. The story isn't all that bad.
You eep mentioning mean people. I don't see why they would be so mean. The story isn't all that bad.
6/30/2012 c9 1Prettydog200
Oh sweet god! Your writing has went from tolerable to just plain TERRIBLE! Also, stop plagerizing from your sister! If you keep this up, you're going to end up in a whole new world of trouble in the future.
Murder and rape is no laughing manner. I know a girl who got raped and she's horribly traumatized by it. If you just let Zim rape Landia and kill Dib for fun, then you sir, are a SICK PERSON.
That's not how rape works in a story. Rape and murder are not supposed to be done from shits and giggles. Why would Zim want to rape Landia OR ANYONE FOR THAT MATTER in a cage anyway?
Something tells me that either you're actually a troll or you've just given up on writing decently and are just making up shit as the story goes.
Overall, this chapter was terrible.
1Prettydog200Oh sweet god! Your writing has went from tolerable to just plain TERRIBLE! Also, stop plagerizing from your sister! If you keep this up, you're going to end up in a whole new world of trouble in the future.
Murder and rape is no laughing manner. I know a girl who got raped and she's horribly traumatized by it. If you just let Zim rape Landia and kill Dib for fun, then you sir, are a SICK PERSON.
That's not how rape works in a story. Rape and murder are not supposed to be done from shits and giggles. Why would Zim want to rape Landia OR ANYONE FOR THAT MATTER in a cage anyway?
Something tells me that either you're actually a troll or you've just given up on writing decently and are just making up shit as the story goes.
Overall, this chapter was terrible.
6/29/2012 c9 2Raeline.S.Claud
Dear sister,
WHY IN THE BLOODY HELL CAN YOU NOT COME UP WITH YOUR OWN GODDAMN IDEAS? Seriously, why do you keep stealing mine? Are you that creatively bankrupt? And you dare to call yourself unique! You're about as individual as a common trout. Grow up and stop thieving.
Sincerely,
Raeline
2Raeline.S.ClaudDear sister,
WHY IN THE BLOODY HELL CAN YOU NOT COME UP WITH YOUR OWN GODDAMN IDEAS? Seriously, why do you keep stealing mine? Are you that creatively bankrupt? And you dare to call yourself unique! You're about as individual as a common trout. Grow up and stop thieving.
Sincerely,
Raeline