for another war5/11 c10 Wolfy46
Yes, updates! I was beginning to think that you had given up on this story.
I always knew Canada was a badass. I love your explanation of how everyone Arthur loves hurts him, it's very sad.
Yes, updates! I was beginning to think that you had given up on this story.
I always knew Canada was a badass. I love your explanation of how everyone Arthur loves hurts him, it's very sad.
3/5 c8 Wolfy46
Woooo! go England! I'm glad everyone's uniting. Are you going to continue this at some point?
Woooo! go England! I'm glad everyone's uniting. Are you going to continue this at some point?
12/23/2012 c8 
3Mimimikan
...This was the best world war 3 fanfiction I read so far *aplause* •u• Can't wait for more. Update soon!
P.S. Your grammar is awesome ôwô !
3Mimimikan...This was the best world war 3 fanfiction I read so far *aplause* •u• Can't wait for more. Update soon!
P.S. Your grammar is awesome ôwô !
9/21/2012 c2 16Ephemeral Blossoms
Pros: The plot has interesting developments
Some parts of the text (mostly the ending) allow the reader feel how France feels, and it is easy to picture your descriptions
Cons: You should make a new paragraph each time someone different speaks
I feel that some parts of the text (mostly the introduction) aren't as intimate as it could be
Some grammatical errors (mostly capitalization and misplaced commas)
It's a good start!
16Ephemeral BlossomsPros: The plot has interesting developments
Some parts of the text (mostly the ending) allow the reader feel how France feels, and it is easy to picture your descriptions
Cons: You should make a new paragraph each time someone different speaks
I feel that some parts of the text (mostly the introduction) aren't as intimate as it could be
Some grammatical errors (mostly capitalization and misplaced commas)
It's a good start!
9/15/2012 c1 Ephemeral Blossoms
The characterization is really good, and I really like the use of indirect free style writing. I think the grammar could use a tiny bit of work (you have a couple of capitalization and sentence fragment issues), and the chapters could be a little longer, but you're off to a good start!
The characterization is really good, and I really like the use of indirect free style writing. I think the grammar could use a tiny bit of work (you have a couple of capitalization and sentence fragment issues), and the chapters could be a little longer, but you're off to a good start!
4/13/2012 c5 Star
Most amazing plot I've ever read in a Hetalia fanfiction... Really, the idea is amazing and I love the inner conflicts of the characters.
This needs to keep going. Keep up the good work!
Most amazing plot I've ever read in a Hetalia fanfiction... Really, the idea is amazing and I love the inner conflicts of the characters.
This needs to keep going. Keep up the good work!
3/31/2012 c2 2Consenirmollo
Before I go any further with this story, let me tell you that this has to be the most amazing non-romance plot I have seen in ages! Really, this story is fantastic so far and you're still in character. However, you should really form your dialogue in separate paragraphs. Actually, it'd be nice if you used more paragraphs in general!
Puncuation could use some more work as well but that's about it.
2ConsenirmolloBefore I go any further with this story, let me tell you that this has to be the most amazing non-romance plot I have seen in ages! Really, this story is fantastic so far and you're still in character. However, you should really form your dialogue in separate paragraphs. Actually, it'd be nice if you used more paragraphs in general!
Puncuation could use some more work as well but that's about it.
3/30/2012 c4 Silverheart97
Excellent so far, but you forgot to mention Switzerland. It would be interesting to have him involved, but it's up to you. The chapters are a bit short, but great overall! please continue this!
Excellent so far, but you forgot to mention Switzerland. It would be interesting to have him involved, but it's up to you. The chapters are a bit short, but great overall! please continue this!
3/30/2012 c4 23Stardust98
This is really good! Very well-written! I only have one thing to say.
Whenever someone is speaking you should put it into a paragraph like this:
((Arthur grinned, "Ahh, but Gilbert is there. I always thought he'd make a splendid King. He is the nation after all." "Very devious little brother."
"Don't patronize me, Ireland."
"Stop arguing, Arthur, Shea." Called Wales, "I want to make lunch; you will all be eating, correct?" the three others gulped nervously; ** Wales off when he wanted to cook was a bad idea.
"Yes Brother, we'll all be eating," answered Arthur.))
And if you want people to read your story, I recommend putting the CAPS needed in the summary.
That's all! I look foward to an update!
***Stardust98***
23Stardust98This is really good! Very well-written! I only have one thing to say.
Whenever someone is speaking you should put it into a paragraph like this:
((Arthur grinned, "Ahh, but Gilbert is there. I always thought he'd make a splendid King. He is the nation after all." "Very devious little brother."
"Don't patronize me, Ireland."
"Stop arguing, Arthur, Shea." Called Wales, "I want to make lunch; you will all be eating, correct?" the three others gulped nervously; ** Wales off when he wanted to cook was a bad idea.
"Yes Brother, we'll all be eating," answered Arthur.))
And if you want people to read your story, I recommend putting the CAPS needed in the summary.
That's all! I look foward to an update!
***Stardust98***