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7MJLupin27
Awww this is lovely! You know, I've always had this doubt, is the Clone Wars series considered canon? those chaps are lovely (most of them) though I don't like it when they play with Maul, wanting for him to return from death.. He's dead to me.. well, see you around ;)
7MJLupin27Awww this is lovely! You know, I've always had this doubt, is the Clone Wars series considered canon? those chaps are lovely (most of them) though I don't like it when they play with Maul, wanting for him to return from death.. He's dead to me.. well, see you around ;)
4/29 c9 Eruhin
You sure know how to make me emotional. That ending was beautiful! I really like the clones and I feel bad for them quite often. I enjoyed Cody's POV a lot, especially his list of General Kenobi's unusual abilities (except I think Obi-Wan deserves more than "passable singing voice").
And are the Twi'lek phrases in this fic your invention or is there a dictionary somewhere?
You sure know how to make me emotional. That ending was beautiful! I really like the clones and I feel bad for them quite often. I enjoyed Cody's POV a lot, especially his list of General Kenobi's unusual abilities (except I think Obi-Wan deserves more than "passable singing voice").
And are the Twi'lek phrases in this fic your invention or is there a dictionary somewhere?
4/28 c3 MJLupin27
Hey, probably I'm too sleepy to understand what I just read, I just wanted to say that Obi-Wan, since Qui-Gon's death, began to study Soresu (Form III) and became The Master of Soresu. I mean, THE Master. So far as I know, he used some moves from Ataru (Form IV) and some of Niman (Form VI) but he never abandoned Soresu. He choose Soresu because it expressed his character, a defensive yet lethal Form... Anyway, good night..
Hey, probably I'm too sleepy to understand what I just read, I just wanted to say that Obi-Wan, since Qui-Gon's death, began to study Soresu (Form III) and became The Master of Soresu. I mean, THE Master. So far as I know, he used some moves from Ataru (Form IV) and some of Niman (Form VI) but he never abandoned Soresu. He choose Soresu because it expressed his character, a defensive yet lethal Form... Anyway, good night..
1/2 c1 Toaofwriting
Just a couple of typos I thought you might want to address: "A natural leader with a long time on th"e" Jedi Council," and Vaapad is Form VII, not VI. Otherwise great.
Just a couple of typos I thought you might want to address: "A natural leader with a long time on th"e" Jedi Council," and Vaapad is Form VII, not VI. Otherwise great.
5/21/2012 c9 12Shandrial
That was definitely delightful to read! I really enjoyed Cody and the clones perspective, much more than I thought I would. They were very interesting, how you handled them. Thank you for writing these wonderful Star Wars stories and sharing!
12ShandrialThat was definitely delightful to read! I really enjoyed Cody and the clones perspective, much more than I thought I would. They were very interesting, how you handled them. Thank you for writing these wonderful Star Wars stories and sharing!
4/12/2012 c9 Chades
I´m wiping away a few stray tears..and the list grows longer. :D
The last paragraph tugged at my heartstrings. It´s so sweet!
I´m wiping away a few stray tears..and the list grows longer. :D
The last paragraph tugged at my heartstrings. It´s so sweet!
4/12/2012 c7 Chades
That list of talents is,again,very amusing. The Piper reference made me grin..der Rattenfaenger von Hameln,huh? (I know he has a slightly different name in English..the Pied Piper,right? I´m not quite sure..)
That list of talents is,again,very amusing. The Piper reference made me grin..der Rattenfaenger von Hameln,huh? (I know he has a slightly different name in English..the Pied Piper,right? I´m not quite sure..)
4/12/2012 c5 Chades
I haven´t asked you yet to marry me,did I?
Stroke of genius,really. The code words made me laugh and I lost it during the last scene about playing dirty and "changing his style". (Outright aggression rather than deception.)
I haven´t asked you yet to marry me,did I?
Stroke of genius,really. The code words made me laugh and I lost it during the last scene about playing dirty and "changing his style". (Outright aggression rather than deception.)
4/12/2012 c3 Chades
I liked the first two chapters-they were a nice start. Especially the gunship scenes. I was reminded of a rather bumpy ride on the sub and how hard it is to really keep your balance all the time.
The 3rd chapter however made me hum in delight because this-
Obi Wan sank deep into the Force, finding his own still center in the battle. The war had changed him, too. Formerly a devoted student of Form III, a saber style embodying all the virtues of patient defense and protection, he had now found a new and more profound expression of his purpose in Form VI. Since the beginning of the conflict he had wielded his saber in a deadly, personalized version of Soresu. He made of himself the eye of the storm. Drawing in the Force, he descended through the chaos without and the surging invisible currents within until he found that silent, central fulcrum.
-was enough to make me see it without having to close my eyes first. (Oh boy,I hope you know what I mean.)
I liked the first two chapters-they were a nice start. Especially the gunship scenes. I was reminded of a rather bumpy ride on the sub and how hard it is to really keep your balance all the time.
The 3rd chapter however made me hum in delight because this-
Obi Wan sank deep into the Force, finding his own still center in the battle. The war had changed him, too. Formerly a devoted student of Form III, a saber style embodying all the virtues of patient defense and protection, he had now found a new and more profound expression of his purpose in Form VI. Since the beginning of the conflict he had wielded his saber in a deadly, personalized version of Soresu. He made of himself the eye of the storm. Drawing in the Force, he descended through the chaos without and the surging invisible currents within until he found that silent, central fulcrum.
-was enough to make me see it without having to close my eyes first. (Oh boy,I hope you know what I mean.)
4/6/2012 c9 Kara Alen
You totally got me with the singing part... I was probably more stunned than Cody... oh yes, General Kenobi and odd abilities... :D
I really like the way you re-wrote it... you did a great job... but again, I am just repeating myself :D looking forward for your next piece... tomorrow...
You totally got me with the singing part... I was probably more stunned than Cody... oh yes, General Kenobi and odd abilities... :D
I really like the way you re-wrote it... you did a great job... but again, I am just repeating myself :D looking forward for your next piece... tomorrow...
3/30/2012 c9 5QueenRexKenobi124
Ahhhh, this is really sweet to see this episode from Obi-Wan's perspective, especially the unseen conversations with Numa. And Obi sang-I adore Ewan Mcgregor's voice (sigh). He's got it all! What does that song he sung mean?
5QueenRexKenobi124Ahhhh, this is really sweet to see this episode from Obi-Wan's perspective, especially the unseen conversations with Numa. And Obi sang-I adore Ewan Mcgregor's voice (sigh). He's got it all! What does that song he sung mean?