for DC Pirates7/22/2012 c5 
8CrimsonMercenary
I figured Dinah would be part of the crew! I love how you're staying true to the Pirates story with the DC characters.
Its a small thing but I think you could find better ways of saying your intense statements. In this chapter, the statement "** THIS IS THE MOST HORRIBLE THING!" just seems...cheesy to me. Often people use curse words to try to sound intense, but it just sounds lame, in my opinion. There are so many better words out there...well, that's just my thought, I'll let you decide if it's a good one!
Following your story, am interested to see how it pans out!
8CrimsonMercenaryI figured Dinah would be part of the crew! I love how you're staying true to the Pirates story with the DC characters.
Its a small thing but I think you could find better ways of saying your intense statements. In this chapter, the statement "** THIS IS THE MOST HORRIBLE THING!" just seems...cheesy to me. Often people use curse words to try to sound intense, but it just sounds lame, in my opinion. There are so many better words out there...well, that's just my thought, I'll let you decide if it's a good one!
Following your story, am interested to see how it pans out!
7/22/2012 c4 CrimsonMercenary
Another good chapter, I don't have much to say! I love that you named the Black Pearl, the Grand Arrow...very creative. Can't wait to see who you've put on the crew!
Another good chapter, I don't have much to say! I love that you named the Black Pearl, the Grand Arrow...very creative. Can't wait to see who you've put on the crew!
7/22/2012 c3 CrimsonMercenary
A good and well written chapter! I am a fan of Young Justice all the way, and welcome any appearances from it! So I'm cool with Tim Drake.
Here's my suggestion...Be careful with all the writer's commentary. Please don't say things like "I'm really bad at explaining fights" before a fight, or please don't APOLOGIZE for creative angles you took in this story. It's YOUR story! Write it the way you want, let the readers critique if you want...It sets your book up in a bit of a negative light if you open each new thing with uncertainty or harsh comments towards yourself. That's just my thought, I'll let you decide if it's a good one!
I'm enjoying the story thus far and will be continuing! (I hope all these reviews don't become a annoyance!)
A good and well written chapter! I am a fan of Young Justice all the way, and welcome any appearances from it! So I'm cool with Tim Drake.
Here's my suggestion...Be careful with all the writer's commentary. Please don't say things like "I'm really bad at explaining fights" before a fight, or please don't APOLOGIZE for creative angles you took in this story. It's YOUR story! Write it the way you want, let the readers critique if you want...It sets your book up in a bit of a negative light if you open each new thing with uncertainty or harsh comments towards yourself. That's just my thought, I'll let you decide if it's a good one!
I'm enjoying the story thus far and will be continuing! (I hope all these reviews don't become a annoyance!)
7/22/2012 c1 CrimsonMercenary
Haha, this is so cool! A very fun idea. Also, Bart Allen/Impulse is one of my favorite DC characters. Sidenote: He's so cool in the TV show Smallville, which I have no idea if you're a fan of or not.
Anyway, great start, I'm going to continue reading and probably drop another review soon!
Haha, this is so cool! A very fun idea. Also, Bart Allen/Impulse is one of my favorite DC characters. Sidenote: He's so cool in the TV show Smallville, which I have no idea if you're a fan of or not.
Anyway, great start, I'm going to continue reading and probably drop another review soon!
5/17/2012 c5 49acosta perez jose ramiro
Great update. Cool job with all the scenes.
Keep the good writing
49acosta perez jose ramiroGreat update. Cool job with all the scenes.
Keep the good writing
4/8/2012 c1 9RivalsAreAllies
Good work and writing so far.
I will have to catch-up on this story at a later time, however, because, unfortunately, I'm behind on my own FanFiction. ...But, rest assured, that I will finish this great story.
There were a few grammatical and syntactical errors here and there, but it was never so much that it detracted from the flow of the story.
I enjoy your concise and clear writing style. It gets the point across, without to much overhang.
Keep up the good work
9RivalsAreAlliesGood work and writing so far.
I will have to catch-up on this story at a later time, however, because, unfortunately, I'm behind on my own FanFiction. ...But, rest assured, that I will finish this great story.
There were a few grammatical and syntactical errors here and there, but it was never so much that it detracted from the flow of the story.
I enjoy your concise and clear writing style. It gets the point across, without to much overhang.
Keep up the good work