for Cub Betroth1/13 c1 Gfrrjdhreg
Will simba be the dominant male?!cuz I love simba as the dominate one. I think this story is going well. Post more soon please.
Will simba be the dominant male?!cuz I love simba as the dominate one. I think this story is going well. Post more soon please.
12/2/2012 c1 SarabiFanNO8
English must be your second language. I found some parts rather confusing.
English must be your second language. I found some parts rather confusing.
6/21/2012 c1 
2ObviouslyAMonkey
I'm not trying to be rude or anything but this story moves to fast. Your grammar is alright. A few minor mistakes. But it's not something I would read again. Also it doesn't agave a spark. No point of interest. It's just, well, boring.
2ObviouslyAMonkeyI'm not trying to be rude or anything but this story moves to fast. Your grammar is alright. A few minor mistakes. But it's not something I would read again. Also it doesn't agave a spark. No point of interest. It's just, well, boring.
5/8/2012 c1 6The Ravenclaw-ish Slytherin
You could have made it a little longer. Have Simba refuse to accept Kovu's love straight off the bat and have his refuse to allow Kovu touch him like that. It would have made it more interesting.
6The Ravenclaw-ish SlytherinYou could have made it a little longer. Have Simba refuse to accept Kovu's love straight off the bat and have his refuse to allow Kovu touch him like that. It would have made it more interesting.
4/22/2012 c1 2Anitoon3
Hi there!
This is sad but cute!
Aw! Poor Sarabi! Poor Simba!
Yay! I like that Simba and Kovu kiss and end up together!
Thanks for making this!
~ Anitoon3
2Anitoon3Hi there!
This is sad but cute!
Aw! Poor Sarabi! Poor Simba!
Yay! I like that Simba and Kovu kiss and end up together!
Thanks for making this!
~ Anitoon3
4/16/2012 c1 2blaurgh
woah...! wtf did i just read? let me get this straight... mufasa is having gay incest with his brother... then makes his son get betrothed with another lion? a gay marraidge? y would mufasa do that? am i misunderstanding this or what?
2blaurghwoah...! wtf did i just read? let me get this straight... mufasa is having gay incest with his brother... then makes his son get betrothed with another lion? a gay marraidge? y would mufasa do that? am i misunderstanding this or what?
4/4/2012 c1 kate
Please make a sequel soon and hurry
Please make a sequel soon and hurry