for THE KYOKO FACTOR4/15 c5 Lauru
Funny and cute !
Funny and cute !
8/20/2012 c3 
3Sputterbug
hahahaz it was AWESOME! XD the part with the guys hitting on sho especially made me crack up ;D
3Sputterbughahahaz it was AWESOME! XD the part with the guys hitting on sho especially made me crack up ;D
7/23/2012 c5 Daisy Holden
HAHAHAHA! Was that some sort of parody? It was one of the most hilarious ones I've ever read! All your stories keep me laughing out loud. Literally! Please continue making parody famfics like these!
HAHAHAHA! Was that some sort of parody? It was one of the most hilarious ones I've ever read! All your stories keep me laughing out loud. Literally! Please continue making parody famfics like these!
7/10/2012 c5 7Lynn Beltran
For chapter 3- No this idea was more fun and um . . . exposing than sharks hahahaha, I kind of figured it was rigged already cuz ren completely faked that loss no way you go from pro to no that fast.
4 4- kyoko would definitely never do that no matter what sho was going to or ever was going to say. Again OOC - or is it OCC- (*shakes head* you figure her "best" *air quotes* friend would know this).
& 4 5- I knew kyoko was the chorus girl, first off cuz ren responded to the wink and wave. Second cuz if it wasnt it would be too predictable. (3
In all you stuck to the characters and I felt the were believable, their dialouge, behavior, and habits matched. It was fun to read and nice to see kyoko see her enemy humilated. I was told that if you can keep the audience at the edge of their seats and keep them guessing then it was great. Though im not sure about my works I know yours is just about there a little predictable but alot of suprise twists to get there. Thats why im glad I read your stories I look forward to reading the rest
7Lynn BeltranFor chapter 3- No this idea was more fun and um . . . exposing than sharks hahahaha, I kind of figured it was rigged already cuz ren completely faked that loss no way you go from pro to no that fast.
4 4- kyoko would definitely never do that no matter what sho was going to or ever was going to say. Again OOC - or is it OCC- (*shakes head* you figure her "best" *air quotes* friend would know this).
& 4 5- I knew kyoko was the chorus girl, first off cuz ren responded to the wink and wave. Second cuz if it wasnt it would be too predictable. (3
In all you stuck to the characters and I felt the were believable, their dialouge, behavior, and habits matched. It was fun to read and nice to see kyoko see her enemy humilated. I was told that if you can keep the audience at the edge of their seats and keep them guessing then it was great. Though im not sure about my works I know yours is just about there a little predictable but alot of suprise twists to get there. Thats why im glad I read your stories I look forward to reading the rest
5/17/2012 c5 CreedHartnet13
well not really..
the time that Ren smiled to the chorus girl..
i figured it out that it must be Kyoko..
hehehehe..
and before they explain what is really happening and reveled the true identity of the said "Kyoko in the tent" i figure that it must have been Minori..
hehehe..
over all..
this story is fun and nicely done..
Well done..
well not really..
the time that Ren smiled to the chorus girl..
i figured it out that it must be Kyoko..
hehehehe..
and before they explain what is really happening and reveled the true identity of the said "Kyoko in the tent" i figure that it must have been Minori..
hehehe..
over all..
this story is fun and nicely done..
Well done..
5/17/2012 c3 CreedHartnet13
hahahaha..
to bad for Ren.. :(..
Yashiro has a point (how did Ren taught Kyoko in walking like a model, when he himself trip a couple of times?)..hehehe..
nice story..
hahahaha..
to bad for Ren.. :(..
Yashiro has a point (how did Ren taught Kyoko in walking like a model, when he himself trip a couple of times?)..hehehe..
nice story..
5/1/2012 c1 3skipbeataddict
I hope that was a Kyoko double... Or I will bang my head into a wall. This kyoko is OOC. I can't believe sho fell for it...
3skipbeataddictI hope that was a Kyoko double... Or I will bang my head into a wall. This kyoko is OOC. I can't believe sho fell for it...
4/30/2012 c4 6mangaEATER-chan
WTF? I feel so ** rite now! I can't bleve that kyoko went with SHOU if ALL people! Please write more soon because I an going to die!
6mangaEATER-chanWTF? I feel so ** rite now! I can't bleve that kyoko went with SHOU if ALL people! Please write more soon because I an going to die!
4/30/2012 c4 Sumi031885
Lol... They had a Kyoko double! I bet that the challenge was to see if he would be able to recognize her. Please update soon. I want to know if my guess was right
Lol... They had a Kyoko double! I bet that the challenge was to see if he would be able to recognize her. Please update soon. I want to know if my guess was right
4/30/2012 c4 AdrienneSomni
Please let it be a a kyoko look like... :( Please update soon! Great job by the way!
Please let it be a a kyoko look like... :( Please update soon! Great job by the way!
4/5/2012 c1 charlestonstexan
This sounds like it has such great potential! I can't wait to read the next chapters!
This sounds like it has such great potential! I can't wait to read the next chapters!
4/5/2012 c1 5Justanothersinger
Dannnnnggggg.
I can't wait to see more of the Kyoko Factor. Heck no, I wanna see how Kyoko REACTS to seeing the Kyoko factor *snigger* Do you think she'll still be dense after seing that?
...I'm not too sure...
Ah, anyway! Keep up the good work!
-J
5JustanothersingerDannnnnggggg.
I can't wait to see more of the Kyoko Factor. Heck no, I wanna see how Kyoko REACTS to seeing the Kyoko factor *snigger* Do you think she'll still be dense after seing that?
...I'm not too sure...
Ah, anyway! Keep up the good work!
-J