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Hold on Hold on. If this starts from the episode 'incendiem' then that mean FP is still in her lantern doesn't it?
11vhdc1234Hold on Hold on. If this starts from the episode 'incendiem' then that mean FP is still in her lantern doesn't it?
4/15 c15 4The Awes0me 0ne
That... Was... AWESOME... Great job! It was almost worth the wait! Haha, I love this story and I'm glad you finnally updated it. I'm looking forward to reading what happens next! Although I saw one problem, when you have dialouge you should start a new paragraph every time a different person speaks. No one ever teaches you that, and the only reason I know it is because someone told me when I was doing that.
4The Awes0me 0neThat... Was... AWESOME... Great job! It was almost worth the wait! Haha, I love this story and I'm glad you finnally updated it. I'm looking forward to reading what happens next! Although I saw one problem, when you have dialouge you should start a new paragraph every time a different person speaks. No one ever teaches you that, and the only reason I know it is because someone told me when I was doing that.
4/2 c3 Somebody
Marceline seems a little mature for her age in the flashback. otherwise, the chapter's alright
Marceline seems a little mature for her age in the flashback. otherwise, the chapter's alright
2/17 c14 Writer of Epics
I really like the story, you have nice spins on episodes with a valid plot. over all its a very good read. and I did look up earths second moon, if you mean Cruithne, it isn't a moon. It's actually a minor planet that orbits the sun in a very similar orbit to earth at relatively the same speed (give or take a couple million miles per hour) and sometimes comes close to earth.
I really like the story, you have nice spins on episodes with a valid plot. over all its a very good read. and I did look up earths second moon, if you mean Cruithne, it isn't a moon. It's actually a minor planet that orbits the sun in a very similar orbit to earth at relatively the same speed (give or take a couple million miles per hour) and sometimes comes close to earth.
2/10 c14 4The Awes0me 0ne
Ooh history of a mysterious charachter.. Looking forward to it. Also, INTELLIGENT DINOSAURS. Well duh ya got raptors, and stuffs. Im hungry.. I wonder what a dinosaur would taste like? Kill a triceratops, get a chunk of meat, and cook it up. Ya know, I've never tasted a reptile before.. I mean birds yeah but ya know. Anyways good job!
4The Awes0me 0neOoh history of a mysterious charachter.. Looking forward to it. Also, INTELLIGENT DINOSAURS. Well duh ya got raptors, and stuffs. Im hungry.. I wonder what a dinosaur would taste like? Kill a triceratops, get a chunk of meat, and cook it up. Ya know, I've never tasted a reptile before.. I mean birds yeah but ya know. Anyways good job!
1/25 c11 finnfan219
Dont beg for reviews man. I love this series. Instead of reviewing i just move. To the next chapter. Sorry about that. Oh btw its Marine Corps. Keep on writing por favor!
Dont beg for reviews man. I love this series. Instead of reviewing i just move. To the next chapter. Sorry about that. Oh btw its Marine Corps. Keep on writing por favor!
1/21 c13 1TheWordSmith777
oh i know what you mean some parts a the story are just sad to write but it's like the story has a mind of its own and it makes you write it.
1TheWordSmith777oh i know what you mean some parts a the story are just sad to write but it's like the story has a mind of its own and it makes you write it.
1/21 c13 25SCIK1012
Well, I think you did a pretty awesome job with every part of this chapter, be it fluff, action or suspense. Even if you say you are not good with romantic stuff, their date was actually very sweet.
Then after fighting that beast, I swear I could feel all the tension at the hospital with Finn being wounded and angry, while Anna was in the E.R.
I like descriptive authors, and you definitely are one of them.
25SCIK1012Well, I think you did a pretty awesome job with every part of this chapter, be it fluff, action or suspense. Even if you say you are not good with romantic stuff, their date was actually very sweet.
Then after fighting that beast, I swear I could feel all the tension at the hospital with Finn being wounded and angry, while Anna was in the E.R.
I like descriptive authors, and you definitely are one of them.