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2akitawolf
Continue the fic! :D i like that idea of owner XD i don't know what description it could have since i don't know what is going to happen in this story.
2akitawolfContinue the fic! :D i like that idea of owner XD i don't know what description it could have since i don't know what is going to happen in this story.
9/28/2012 c2 17Lone Warrior2
This story is awesome! I hope you write more soon. I find it a little odd how so many people write Jack as this cool kid who has a lot of friends though. Seeing his life in the show doesn't really add up to that. I still like your story though.
Hmm... a summary... I don't know that we have enough information to write a better summary for you.. but I'll try.
'It all started with a party. Too bad it was the last act of freedom he would ever know.'
There, I just changed what you already had, also... i would remove the 'innocent' part of party from your description, if nothing else. I wouldn't call a party with alcohol and teenagers having sex particularly innocent. I'm sure it's a good ** time, but not really innocent.
17Lone Warrior2This story is awesome! I hope you write more soon. I find it a little odd how so many people write Jack as this cool kid who has a lot of friends though. Seeing his life in the show doesn't really add up to that. I still like your story though.
Hmm... a summary... I don't know that we have enough information to write a better summary for you.. but I'll try.
'It all started with a party. Too bad it was the last act of freedom he would ever know.'
There, I just changed what you already had, also... i would remove the 'innocent' part of party from your description, if nothing else. I wouldn't call a party with alcohol and teenagers having sex particularly innocent. I'm sure it's a good ** time, but not really innocent.
9/26/2012 c2 2flamthower500
I like the summary it drew me in, and this story is really good so far I hope you keep going
2flamthower500I like the summary it drew me in, and this story is really good so far I hope you keep going
5/12/2012 c2 Dani Quinn
You need to write more of this! I am loving it.
I also giggled at the thought that Jack was so high he was more concerned about an older woman jumping him that Wuya killing him :)
You need to write more of this! I am loving it.
I also giggled at the thought that Jack was so high he was more concerned about an older woman jumping him that Wuya killing him :)
4/30/2012 c1 Sushirisu
This is a pretty interesting idea. I, too, have always pictured Wuya as motherly, albeit in a tough way, towards Jack. I thought the characters were pretty in character. Jack is one to do anything possible to come across as "cool" and become popular, so I can perfectly see him drinking just to try and fit in.
I do hope you decide to continue this. I really appreciated reading this and would love to read more.
This is a pretty interesting idea. I, too, have always pictured Wuya as motherly, albeit in a tough way, towards Jack. I thought the characters were pretty in character. Jack is one to do anything possible to come across as "cool" and become popular, so I can perfectly see him drinking just to try and fit in.
I do hope you decide to continue this. I really appreciated reading this and would love to read more.