for Awkward Feelings5/17/2012 c4 petiyaka
Haruka and her flirting habit... MIchiru is nice to not kick her ** about it.
It was pretty good.
Haruka and her flirting habit... MIchiru is nice to not kick her ** about it.
It was pretty good.
5/16/2012 c4 
7Cloud Auditore Fair
A fantastic chapter, as usual. I like the personal conflicts you incorporate, not only as their modern day selves but their somewhat alter egos as well. Keep it up!
7Cloud Auditore FairA fantastic chapter, as usual. I like the personal conflicts you incorporate, not only as their modern day selves but their somewhat alter egos as well. Keep it up!
5/14/2012 c3 Cloud Auditore Fair
I utterly adored their playing. A stupid smile was just plastered to my face. In a silly moment, you managed to still have them try to one-up each other, still keeping them on their toes. Fantastic. I look forward to more.
I utterly adored their playing. A stupid smile was just plastered to my face. In a silly moment, you managed to still have them try to one-up each other, still keeping them on their toes. Fantastic. I look forward to more.
5/12/2012 c3 Keeper Aki
Great story. I like how they interact with each other. Ruka-Michi are the best (v)
Great story. I like how they interact with each other. Ruka-Michi are the best (v)
5/7/2012 c2 Keeper Aki
Well it's good enough for me.
This is the starting period where they play "hide and seek" with their feelings towards each other.
I like how Michiru teases Haruka, gets jealous when the other flirts and likewise. But of course they're only meant to each other.
Nice one, kudos for you! v(^o^)
Well it's good enough for me.
This is the starting period where they play "hide and seek" with their feelings towards each other.
I like how Michiru teases Haruka, gets jealous when the other flirts and likewise. But of course they're only meant to each other.
Nice one, kudos for you! v(^o^)
5/6/2012 c2 Samaka
I'm liking your story so far :) One thing you could do to improve it though will be to separate dialogue from narration. It's easier for the reader when someone has finished talking or to know when someone else started speaking. Other than that good job ;)
I'm liking your story so far :) One thing you could do to improve it though will be to separate dialogue from narration. It's easier for the reader when someone has finished talking or to know when someone else started speaking. Other than that good job ;)
5/6/2012 c2 Cloud Auditore Fair
I'm only saying this because we can't really indent and it hurt my eyes. Maybe you could space out the paragraphs? Inserting that extra line always gets me but I've found it makes it easier to read. ANYWHO, I love this story. :3
I snickered when Michiru giggled at Haruka's failed attempt at flirting. Her poor pride.
This line: "the famous racer had stolen the heart of their princess, moaned the boys, while the girls complained it was the distant violinist who bewitched her beloved prince." I adore it. Simplistic but utterly perfectly said.
Aw, no time for dreams or ambitions. Nice touch of sadness. Continuing, well done with Michiru's notice of Haruka's flirtation and that it's different between them. Love rival. I laughed. Hmm.. Oh yes. Their bantering is adorable. And you're causing me to mentally chant "kiss, dammit, kiss."
Looking forward to the next chapter,
Cloud
I'm only saying this because we can't really indent and it hurt my eyes. Maybe you could space out the paragraphs? Inserting that extra line always gets me but I've found it makes it easier to read. ANYWHO, I love this story. :3
I snickered when Michiru giggled at Haruka's failed attempt at flirting. Her poor pride.
This line: "the famous racer had stolen the heart of their princess, moaned the boys, while the girls complained it was the distant violinist who bewitched her beloved prince." I adore it. Simplistic but utterly perfectly said.
Aw, no time for dreams or ambitions. Nice touch of sadness. Continuing, well done with Michiru's notice of Haruka's flirtation and that it's different between them. Love rival. I laughed. Hmm.. Oh yes. Their bantering is adorable. And you're causing me to mentally chant "kiss, dammit, kiss."
Looking forward to the next chapter,
Cloud
5/2/2012 c1 Cloud Auditore Fair
I'm quite intrigued. I do so hope you continue. It looks like this is the first one you submitted here and I dare to say that it's a nice start. Quite well done and with few typos.
I'm quite intrigued. I do so hope you continue. It looks like this is the first one you submitted here and I dare to say that it's a nice start. Quite well done and with few typos.