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Hurry back Pleae! I am anxious to see how this turns out!
Lisa
Hurry back Pleae! I am anxious to see how this turns out!
Lisa
5/14/2012 c6 Eni01
o boy, seems like Gibbs has a lot of work to do to convince Tim that he is as important than Tony.
But then he did not react. Do understand Tonys decision. hope to read a next chapter soon.
YOur story is not bad, it is different written from your first version, but it is allright.
o boy, seems like Gibbs has a lot of work to do to convince Tim that he is as important than Tony.
But then he did not react. Do understand Tonys decision. hope to read a next chapter soon.
YOur story is not bad, it is different written from your first version, but it is allright.
5/14/2012 c5 
2D'Rossi
loving the rewrite. I was fond of the original, but I'm liking this version better. It's more true to character, I would expect Tony to quit after a stunt like that.
2D'Rossiloving the rewrite. I was fond of the original, but I'm liking this version better. It's more true to character, I would expect Tony to quit after a stunt like that.
5/14/2012 c5 Feeclo
I'm sorry if my comments makes you rewrite the chapter four. But I must admit I love the way you write it !
Good story ! I enjoy read it and I will be waiting for the next chapter ! :)
I'm sorry if my comments makes you rewrite the chapter four. But I must admit I love the way you write it !
Good story ! I enjoy read it and I will be waiting for the next chapter ! :)
5/13/2012 c5 9DS2010
not surprised Tony walked after all this, wondering if he should come back... He really needs to grow up and maybe this is the steps he needs.
9DS2010not surprised Tony walked after all this, wondering if he should come back... He really needs to grow up and maybe this is the steps he needs.
5/13/2012 c5 Eni01
good chapter but once again there is the "non reaction" from Gibbs. Like in the first story. He seems to "hesitate", to do nothing even if nothing much is said in this chapter, from Gibbs.
good chapter but once again there is the "non reaction" from Gibbs. Like in the first story. He seems to "hesitate", to do nothing even if nothing much is said in this chapter, from Gibbs.
5/13/2012 c4 1camry72
Um...when did McGee leave Abby? I know this is your story but I always felt like Abby didn't want to be in a relationship not Tim especially after the chat with Kate several seasons ago. Then there was the Cover Story episode. Just saying, you make a girl wonder. Plus most punishments Tim gets are usually Abby's fault.
I agree with Feeclo as well.
1camry72Um...when did McGee leave Abby? I know this is your story but I always felt like Abby didn't want to be in a relationship not Tim especially after the chat with Kate several seasons ago. Then there was the Cover Story episode. Just saying, you make a girl wonder. Plus most punishments Tim gets are usually Abby's fault.
I agree with Feeclo as well.
5/11/2012 c4 Gottahavemyncis
Have to see I have mixed feelings about this, starting to worry that T & Z won't be properly punished. I'm sure you have a clear direction, so will hang on. I did peek at the reviews and saw what, imo, is a great suggestion - have Vance decide the punishments. Would take it off Gibbs' shoulders - I just don't think he can be objective enough about this - and could be what would happen in canon. Seems to me that would help Tim's attitude immensely because then it's not on Gibbs, favorites or no favorites, its on Vance.
Have to see I have mixed feelings about this, starting to worry that T & Z won't be properly punished. I'm sure you have a clear direction, so will hang on. I did peek at the reviews and saw what, imo, is a great suggestion - have Vance decide the punishments. Would take it off Gibbs' shoulders - I just don't think he can be objective enough about this - and could be what would happen in canon. Seems to me that would help Tim's attitude immensely because then it's not on Gibbs, favorites or no favorites, its on Vance.
5/11/2012 c4 9DS2010
I liked that Gibbs was honest about the suspension idea. Though I think it is deserved and I think both Tony and Ziva owe Tim an honest apology.
9DS2010I liked that Gibbs was honest about the suspension idea. Though I think it is deserved and I think both Tony and Ziva owe Tim an honest apology.
5/11/2012 c4 Feeclo
Hi !
I really like the one you do until the trip to disneyland.
I really like the review too, but the chapter four deceived me a bit. I don't understand why in the chapter 3 everybody seems angry at Tony and Ziva for there actions and in the chapter four all they seems to say to Tim it's "common on you can forgive them it's nothing, stop whining and get over it".
Maybe I just don't understand the way you wanted to write the chapter, but I hope for the next chapters it don't go this way.
Beside, I really like the story !
Hi !
I really like the one you do until the trip to disneyland.
I really like the review too, but the chapter four deceived me a bit. I don't understand why in the chapter 3 everybody seems angry at Tony and Ziva for there actions and in the chapter four all they seems to say to Tim it's "common on you can forgive them it's nothing, stop whining and get over it".
Maybe I just don't understand the way you wanted to write the chapter, but I hope for the next chapters it don't go this way.
Beside, I really like the story !
5/11/2012 c4 Debthebee77
Maybe tony needs another taste of agent afloat for a couiple months to appreciate what he has...Ziva she's a problem maybe something like sending her to a month of sensitivity training (which I know she hates) will keep her from doing this kind of thing and maybe away from Tonys influenze...does that sound evil enough for them?
Maybe tony needs another taste of agent afloat for a couiple months to appreciate what he has...Ziva she's a problem maybe something like sending her to a month of sensitivity training (which I know she hates) will keep her from doing this kind of thing and maybe away from Tonys influenze...does that sound evil enough for them?