for Hide n Seek4/6 c3 annieathome1
just this last comment - I just realized your title: hide n seek. Brendan did HIDE his true self and now he is on a mission to SEEK his true love. how clever - I like that!
just this last comment - I just realized your title: hide n seek. Brendan did HIDE his true self and now he is on a mission to SEEK his true love. how clever - I like that!
4/6 c1 annieathome1
I've been reading your fanfiction all day & I've just gotta say, you really do live up to your pen name. you really are the best thing since-sliced-bread!
I've been reading your fanfiction all day & I've just gotta say, you really do live up to your pen name. you really are the best thing since-sliced-bread!
4/6 c5 annieathome1
I loved, loved, loved this fic - until the end. This was my new fav fan fic - until the end. Everything was proceeding perfectly - until the end. but that's just me and until then it was wonderful! I loved so many lines in this: Ste's - 'stiff upper lip at the end of it's warranty', 'liquid lunch', Cheryl adjusting - 'her curls and her cleavage', Brendan saying to Ste - 'I'll be your chocolate', a hug described - 'as being hit by a bullet of love'; all these adjectives & colorful phrases gave so much life to the story, it felt so real. That whole monologue Bren gave to Cheryl describing 'the one' was simply beautiful. I don't think I've ever read in any other fanfic a Brendan with this clear a voice and emoting so powerfully before. (if Ste had heard this, no doubts would have remained.) The 'guess' of Cheryl and the 'game' of Brendan with pronouns and then finally his admission of his own sexuality and her full acceptance was just heartbreaking truthful. Brendan did find enough time and enough women in his circle to keep repeating those 4 little words: I-love-my-Steven! but that plush vehicle and the other man -Noah? and it just put me in a panic, and then a little tantrum; until the last it was lovely, romantic, 'soapy', and Stendan! (also loved your running mentions of the gods, and mere mortals, fate & the ultimate poker game!) brilliant! and I can't recommend this enough!
I loved, loved, loved this fic - until the end. This was my new fav fan fic - until the end. Everything was proceeding perfectly - until the end. but that's just me and until then it was wonderful! I loved so many lines in this: Ste's - 'stiff upper lip at the end of it's warranty', 'liquid lunch', Cheryl adjusting - 'her curls and her cleavage', Brendan saying to Ste - 'I'll be your chocolate', a hug described - 'as being hit by a bullet of love'; all these adjectives & colorful phrases gave so much life to the story, it felt so real. That whole monologue Bren gave to Cheryl describing 'the one' was simply beautiful. I don't think I've ever read in any other fanfic a Brendan with this clear a voice and emoting so powerfully before. (if Ste had heard this, no doubts would have remained.) The 'guess' of Cheryl and the 'game' of Brendan with pronouns and then finally his admission of his own sexuality and her full acceptance was just heartbreaking truthful. Brendan did find enough time and enough women in his circle to keep repeating those 4 little words: I-love-my-Steven! but that plush vehicle and the other man -Noah? and it just put me in a panic, and then a little tantrum; until the last it was lovely, romantic, 'soapy', and Stendan! (also loved your running mentions of the gods, and mere mortals, fate & the ultimate poker game!) brilliant! and I can't recommend this enough!
6/17/2012 c5 
16Rubix84
This story was pretty damn good. There's something about your use of language that is unique.
I hope you have some plans for a continuation?
16Rubix84This story was pretty damn good. There's something about your use of language that is unique.
I hope you have some plans for a continuation?
6/4/2012 c5 CazB
Excellent final chapter..finally admitting out loud to his love for Ste! Was surprised when Amy said Ste had gone..and now he's back with someone else! Surely Brendan's got to get his man now! Are we going to get a follow up?
Excellent final chapter..finally admitting out loud to his love for Ste! Was surprised when Amy said Ste had gone..and now he's back with someone else! Surely Brendan's got to get his man now! Are we going to get a follow up?
6/4/2012 c5 142Ruthyroo
i really liked this chapter, maybe you could continue this? well done hun. xx
142Ruthyrooi really liked this chapter, maybe you could continue this? well done hun. xx
6/4/2012 c5 17GirlWednesday
I was listening to everywhere by fleetwood mac whilst listening to this, that added to the lovlieness but seemed a little out of place in parts ha ha just thought i would share.
I'm loving the positivity of the first part od the chapter chapter how Brendan just feels releived that its out. Im thrilled for him.
I couldn't help but chuckle that cheryl wanted to know his love life details at length, kind of an odd thing to discuss with his sister but hey ho whatever floats your boat.
but he really did feel that he could read Ste like a book. He knew temper tantrums were normally followed by sulks and then shy looks, pouts, random bits of conversation and then kisses. Yeap pretty much.
made his way over to his favourite council estate-not
(sounds like me when i visit my best mate.)
But then in a cruel twist of fate...
"He's gone."
"He's gone!" That wasn't in the book.
"Gone where?"
"I dunno. Just gone. Said he needed to get away."
Thats when the song didnt really suit what I was reading.
He's mine I love him? Oh brendan,brenda, brendan. He's not a possession.
Wow Brendan nearly came close to apology when he spoke to rae and then he actually did wow.
The slap ooooh someone had to do it.
It would seem that Ste was exiting a very plush vehicle with a tall lean black man. I'm jealous.
The only way is chester? Ha ha thats priceless.
I couldn't help thinking that an evil cackling laugh would have been perfact for the end scene.
And some very nice analogiues too.
17GirlWednesdayI was listening to everywhere by fleetwood mac whilst listening to this, that added to the lovlieness but seemed a little out of place in parts ha ha just thought i would share.
I'm loving the positivity of the first part od the chapter chapter how Brendan just feels releived that its out. Im thrilled for him.
I couldn't help but chuckle that cheryl wanted to know his love life details at length, kind of an odd thing to discuss with his sister but hey ho whatever floats your boat.
but he really did feel that he could read Ste like a book. He knew temper tantrums were normally followed by sulks and then shy looks, pouts, random bits of conversation and then kisses. Yeap pretty much.
made his way over to his favourite council estate-not
(sounds like me when i visit my best mate.)
But then in a cruel twist of fate...
"He's gone."
"He's gone!" That wasn't in the book.
"Gone where?"
"I dunno. Just gone. Said he needed to get away."
Thats when the song didnt really suit what I was reading.
He's mine I love him? Oh brendan,brenda, brendan. He's not a possession.
Wow Brendan nearly came close to apology when he spoke to rae and then he actually did wow.
The slap ooooh someone had to do it.
It would seem that Ste was exiting a very plush vehicle with a tall lean black man. I'm jealous.
The only way is chester? Ha ha thats priceless.
I couldn't help thinking that an evil cackling laugh would have been perfact for the end scene.
And some very nice analogiues too.
5/28/2012 c4 CazB
Excellent chapter and i love these conversations between Brendan and Cheryl. Was merrily laughing away at their banter until she asked if he was gay..then felt so sad for Brendan especially at his words..thought Cheryl handled it really well though.
Although i only watch Hollyoaks occasionally i'm loving this fic..credit to your writing! ..and totally agree with Cheryl..i get excited if my hair behaves itself for more than three days!
Excellent chapter and i love these conversations between Brendan and Cheryl. Was merrily laughing away at their banter until she asked if he was gay..then felt so sad for Brendan especially at his words..thought Cheryl handled it really well though.
Although i only watch Hollyoaks occasionally i'm loving this fic..credit to your writing! ..and totally agree with Cheryl..i get excited if my hair behaves itself for more than three days!
5/27/2012 c4 1StendanUSF
"Wee Ste?"
"He's not so wee Cheryl, trust me."
Haha! I made the strangest snorting sound when I read this ... Great chapter! Can't wait to see where you take this!
1StendanUSF"Wee Ste?"
"He's not so wee Cheryl, trust me."
Haha! I made the strangest snorting sound when I read this ... Great chapter! Can't wait to see where you take this!
5/27/2012 c4 17GirlWednesday
Ah the old Zumba classes, went once and loved it sooo much I didnt go again.
I'll look forward to cheryl and Brendan's next heart to heart and I'll have hot chocolate with tow marshmallows and a dollop of squirty cream.
"You're terrible Bren" she'd respond, whilst looking at him with pure love and affection.
This is cheryl and Brendan to a T.
Ha ha Cheryl has the most perfect of timing. 2 in the morning? what could be more perfect ay?
The awkward moment when your sister asks "Your girl, your new fancy, why didn't you name her?"
All work and no play, makes for one demented lil' bunny ye know." ha ha my new philosiphy.
"Curvier than public tastes allow?
Brendan had to smirk at that one. So did I (actually it was more of a chesire cat style grin.)
B boy ! I love this new nickname.
Oh no so Brendan Cheryl already knew ;)
She was a good girl (usually, unless there was chocolate involved). Same goes for all of us.
Pete apparently kept rinsing his mouth out with medicated mouthwash for two days. Tom Kirk refused point blank to date any girl he hadn't gone to school with, ever again and Liam Fitzpatrick narrowly escaped an assault charge.
It would seem their dates were more boys than ladies. This here has to be the highlight of the chapter.
No-one could account for Brendan.
For nearly three hours. Wow three hours that must be a record?
I love how chetly just got strait to the point and came out and asked him no time for messing about.
Really felt for brendan when he said he was sick and she shouldnt be near him.
Dont cry Bren you are a proper man.
She handed it to him. They both read the message emblazoned on it and smiled.
Diamonds are a girl's best friend. Hah ah ah ah ha ha ha ha lol lol lmfao.
"Wee Ste?"
"He's not so wee Cheryl, trust me." Brendan said with a smirk
Lets just brush over that pretend he never said it . lol
Cheryl is the best sister ever !
17GirlWednesdayAh the old Zumba classes, went once and loved it sooo much I didnt go again.
I'll look forward to cheryl and Brendan's next heart to heart and I'll have hot chocolate with tow marshmallows and a dollop of squirty cream.
"You're terrible Bren" she'd respond, whilst looking at him with pure love and affection.
This is cheryl and Brendan to a T.
Ha ha Cheryl has the most perfect of timing. 2 in the morning? what could be more perfect ay?
The awkward moment when your sister asks "Your girl, your new fancy, why didn't you name her?"
All work and no play, makes for one demented lil' bunny ye know." ha ha my new philosiphy.
"Curvier than public tastes allow?
Brendan had to smirk at that one. So did I (actually it was more of a chesire cat style grin.)
B boy ! I love this new nickname.
Oh no so Brendan Cheryl already knew ;)
She was a good girl (usually, unless there was chocolate involved). Same goes for all of us.
Pete apparently kept rinsing his mouth out with medicated mouthwash for two days. Tom Kirk refused point blank to date any girl he hadn't gone to school with, ever again and Liam Fitzpatrick narrowly escaped an assault charge.
It would seem their dates were more boys than ladies. This here has to be the highlight of the chapter.
No-one could account for Brendan.
For nearly three hours. Wow three hours that must be a record?
I love how chetly just got strait to the point and came out and asked him no time for messing about.
Really felt for brendan when he said he was sick and she shouldnt be near him.
Dont cry Bren you are a proper man.
She handed it to him. They both read the message emblazoned on it and smiled.
Diamonds are a girl's best friend. Hah ah ah ah ha ha ha ha lol lol lmfao.
"Wee Ste?"
"He's not so wee Cheryl, trust me." Brendan said with a smirk
Lets just brush over that pretend he never said it . lol
Cheryl is the best sister ever !
5/20/2012 c3 142Ruthyroo
another great chapter Hun i really enjoyed it. Loved this:
He wanted kisses and touches and promises. He wanted to come out from underneath the covers where he and Brendan lived. Where Brendan would whisper I love you, you're mine against his skin and hope that Ste would recognise the message from the outline of his lips, his tongue providing the full stop, his heart providing the page.
well done. xx
142Ruthyrooanother great chapter Hun i really enjoyed it. Loved this:
He wanted kisses and touches and promises. He wanted to come out from underneath the covers where he and Brendan lived. Where Brendan would whisper I love you, you're mine against his skin and hope that Ste would recognise the message from the outline of his lips, his tongue providing the full stop, his heart providing the page.
well done. xx
5/20/2012 c3 CazB
Powerful, emotional chapter...think Ste's done right to walk away. Hopefully his words have got Brendan thinking and will continue to do so. Another excellent update.
Powerful, emotional chapter...think Ste's done right to walk away. Hopefully his words have got Brendan thinking and will continue to do so. Another excellent update.
5/20/2012 c3 17GirlWednesday
I love your style you always come up with quirky analogies that make me smile like the fur coats in the closet.
I thought ste's rage was really powerful and the way Brendan just stood there and took it as he pummeled him.
Bur stilll he could not take him seriously.
You're not my only option Mr Brady."
With tears in his eyes, Ste stepped out of Brendan's embrace and walked out of the room. He had to fight his natural impulse to slam the door behind him, like the teenager Brendan accused him of being.
Good for ste.
so much frustration in this chapter. update really sooon
lots of review love your no 1 fan xx
17GirlWednesdayI love your style you always come up with quirky analogies that make me smile like the fur coats in the closet.
I thought ste's rage was really powerful and the way Brendan just stood there and took it as he pummeled him.
Bur stilll he could not take him seriously.
You're not my only option Mr Brady."
With tears in his eyes, Ste stepped out of Brendan's embrace and walked out of the room. He had to fight his natural impulse to slam the door behind him, like the teenager Brendan accused him of being.
Good for ste.
so much frustration in this chapter. update really sooon
lots of review love your no 1 fan xx