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1HeroAmI
This is cute. Just a tip, be careful with changing dialogue. It's best to start a new paragraph/line when the speaker changes, to help eliminate confusion as to who the speaker is at the time. And with the Spanish, the adjective is usually placed after the noun, so it would be "mi tomate delicioso". I hope this is helpful andI hope that you continue with the story soon.
1HeroAmIThis is cute. Just a tip, be careful with changing dialogue. It's best to start a new paragraph/line when the speaker changes, to help eliminate confusion as to who the speaker is at the time. And with the Spanish, the adjective is usually placed after the noun, so it would be "mi tomate delicioso". I hope this is helpful andI hope that you continue with the story soon.