for Mass Effect: Contact9/24/2012 c7 crimsonskull
I know its probably simple but isn't showing your face very significant to a quarian I don't understand how a couple minutes of talking made them close enough for her to actually do that
I know its probably simple but isn't showing your face very significant to a quarian I don't understand how a couple minutes of talking made them close enough for her to actually do that
9/24/2012 c7 
2Aeternix
Another great chapter from a fantastic story and author!
Cerberus, Cerberus, Cerberus, when will you realize that the universe doesn't like you're radical ideals?
I'm very curious as to what their role to play is, expecially with Qui'in turning into an ally for Shepard.
I'm wondering if any other ships have been sent by her race though? I'd hate to think there's more firepower coming after how much damage was done last time.
Very excited to see where this goes.
2AeternixAnother great chapter from a fantastic story and author!
Cerberus, Cerberus, Cerberus, when will you realize that the universe doesn't like you're radical ideals?
I'm very curious as to what their role to play is, expecially with Qui'in turning into an ally for Shepard.
I'm wondering if any other ships have been sent by her race though? I'd hate to think there's more firepower coming after how much damage was done last time.
Very excited to see where this goes.
7/22/2012 c6 Guest
Not to be that person though when is ch7
Not to be that person though when is ch7
7/22/2012 c2 Guest
She looks lovely in magenta
She looks lovely in magenta
7/22/2012 c6 Aeternix
Very good. Usually I find it rare (at least through my searches) to find a continuing conflict after the events of the game. Its usually a tie up story (though those are ncie as well). Its a cool change and I like how you've woven the characters into a new battle for survival. Though this seems a lot more... how shall we say personal and is in my opinion a brilliant contrast to the Reaper threat before this conflict.
In terms of constructive critism, I would say the occasional spelling or grammer (we all do it though so it isn't really a big problem). Also if you want help I usually find battle scenes easier to write (maybe not to read) when its fast and choppy sentences, quick movements, sudden actions. If the battle is choatic and disordered you can make your writing in that style to absorb the reader, to make he/she feel what it must be like in that enviroment. Just a thought though if you want to consider it.
I like the motivations of the Orotari, though I doubt they all are as focused on revenge as Qui'ina is. Maybe some want to be like the Imperialistic Prothians? We shall see. Also the whole Tali "chat", really interested me in where you will take that.
But till we find out more about thess conflicts I shall egarly await the next installment.
Very good. Usually I find it rare (at least through my searches) to find a continuing conflict after the events of the game. Its usually a tie up story (though those are ncie as well). Its a cool change and I like how you've woven the characters into a new battle for survival. Though this seems a lot more... how shall we say personal and is in my opinion a brilliant contrast to the Reaper threat before this conflict.
In terms of constructive critism, I would say the occasional spelling or grammer (we all do it though so it isn't really a big problem). Also if you want help I usually find battle scenes easier to write (maybe not to read) when its fast and choppy sentences, quick movements, sudden actions. If the battle is choatic and disordered you can make your writing in that style to absorb the reader, to make he/she feel what it must be like in that enviroment. Just a thought though if you want to consider it.
I like the motivations of the Orotari, though I doubt they all are as focused on revenge as Qui'ina is. Maybe some want to be like the Imperialistic Prothians? We shall see. Also the whole Tali "chat", really interested me in where you will take that.
But till we find out more about thess conflicts I shall egarly await the next installment.
7/5/2012 c5 1Mr-Dr-Prof Sweetness
The (or-uh-tar-E) vs. Prothean... Yes! I bet she needs to be nerfed, also, love-triangle anyone?
1Mr-Dr-Prof SweetnessThe (or-uh-tar-E) vs. Prothean... Yes! I bet she needs to be nerfed, also, love-triangle anyone?
7/4/2012 c5 9The Eezoman
Intriguing. Also, Tali's scene was kinda cheesy, in the best way possible. Nice job.
9The EezomanIntriguing. Also, Tali's scene was kinda cheesy, in the best way possible. Nice job.
5/27/2012 c4 aRandomNoob
Good job so far, interested to see where this goes.
I don't mind longer chapters...:)
Good job so far, interested to see where this goes.
I don't mind longer chapters...:)