for Little Brothers5/19 c3 Miki
You're a good writer with a good sense of plot drive. What makes this story less than the best is that you seem incredibly rushed. The characters just jump to what you want them to do instead of hesitating or compromising realistically. For example Bruce tying up Jason and within 2 minutes is totally ok with adopting him and making him a replacement for Dick. Everything just happens with no realistic character thoughts or reactions. Like Jason is a rebel but suggested he team up with the other two the second he ran into them. You write well and move the story forward in a great way. If you took your time and gave the characters depth you could be a good writer. Good luck and thanks for the story.
You're a good writer with a good sense of plot drive. What makes this story less than the best is that you seem incredibly rushed. The characters just jump to what you want them to do instead of hesitating or compromising realistically. For example Bruce tying up Jason and within 2 minutes is totally ok with adopting him and making him a replacement for Dick. Everything just happens with no realistic character thoughts or reactions. Like Jason is a rebel but suggested he team up with the other two the second he ran into them. You write well and move the story forward in a great way. If you took your time and gave the characters depth you could be a good writer. Good luck and thanks for the story.
5/22/2012 c5 
20KKCopper
AWW ACEY POO! D he rocks a lot YAY BATDOG!
(isn't it sad that I first knew of batdog from the Krypto dog series? GAH the episode where he met SUperman made me wanna cry! D, isn't it weird how everyone SUPERMAN knows lived? Krypto, Kara...)
off topic! Very nice I was expecting more ruckus from the boys and perhaps they apologize more to get out of trouble and all fall asleep together and they all get sick later 0
Keep writing
KKCopper
20KKCopperAWW ACEY POO! D he rocks a lot YAY BATDOG!
(isn't it sad that I first knew of batdog from the Krypto dog series? GAH the episode where he met SUperman made me wanna cry! D, isn't it weird how everyone SUPERMAN knows lived? Krypto, Kara...)
off topic! Very nice I was expecting more ruckus from the boys and perhaps they apologize more to get out of trouble and all fall asleep together and they all get sick later 0
Keep writing
KKCopper
5/22/2012 c4 KKCopper
I hope your Wally theory was right personally i LOVE the Spitfire thing they did! D
"I got your favorite food... everything."
"Babe, you rock."
I wanted to CRY it was so great!
xD okay so I tear up over THAT but I couldn't move an emotion but SHOCK for Tim's parents' deaths? (wow, lots of S's...s...s...s)
YAY good chapter! hehe Bikey went boom boom
Keep writing
KKCopper
I hope your Wally theory was right personally i LOVE the Spitfire thing they did! D
"I got your favorite food... everything."
"Babe, you rock."
I wanted to CRY it was so great!
xD okay so I tear up over THAT but I couldn't move an emotion but SHOCK for Tim's parents' deaths? (wow, lots of S's...s...s...s)
YAY good chapter! hehe Bikey went boom boom
Keep writing
KKCopper
5/22/2012 c3 KKCopper
O_o Black Mask... lemme at'im... LEMME AT'IM! O_O GAGHKLNSD:KJCBNNNNNJU;ladskjf
yehp, my train of thought when that happened! Well, you knew, I was chatting with you!
great chapter!*minus cold hearted deaths and "Oh man" I expected the next line to be "Holy murders Batman! The child is an orphan now!" -*
Keep writing
KKCopper
O_o Black Mask... lemme at'im... LEMME AT'IM! O_O GAGHKLNSD:KJCBNNNNNJU;ladskjf
yehp, my train of thought when that happened! Well, you knew, I was chatting with you!
great chapter!*minus cold hearted deaths and "Oh man" I expected the next line to be "Holy murders Batman! The child is an orphan now!" -*
Keep writing
KKCopper
5/22/2012 c2 KKCopper
He has to be deemed worthy to join DE BAT FAMILY *insert corny french accent here*
VERY nice I highly enjoyed this, though I don't think Bruce would have been so quick to bring him in I still loved it
Keep writing
KKCopper
He has to be deemed worthy to join DE BAT FAMILY *insert corny french accent here*
VERY nice I highly enjoyed this, though I don't think Bruce would have been so quick to bring him in I still loved it
Keep writing
KKCopper
5/22/2012 c1 KKCopper
it's PHINEAS AND FERB!
LITTLE BROTHER, CAUSE THEY'RE YOUNGER, WE'RE RELATED, AND YOU'RE A BOY!
xD such a "duh" lyric but i LOVE it!
Keep writing
KKCopper
it's PHINEAS AND FERB!
LITTLE BROTHER, CAUSE THEY'RE YOUNGER, WE'RE RELATED, AND YOU'RE A BOY!
xD such a "duh" lyric but i LOVE it!
Keep writing
KKCopper
5/13/2012 c4 fangirlofepicproportions
See, I nearly passed out and I KNEW it was gonna be Kaldur. My sisters were like,"WTF?" They don't understand...and loved the chapter!
See, I nearly passed out and I KNEW it was gonna be Kaldur. My sisters were like,"WTF?" They don't understand...and loved the chapter!
5/13/2012 c4 61Glimare
*raises hand* I did! Course I thought Kaldur was the mole *evil laugh* now he's more interesting.
61Glimare*raises hand* I did! Course I thought Kaldur was the mole *evil laugh* now he's more interesting.
5/13/2012 c5 Ashley
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW! THIS STORY IS SOOOOO CUTEEE! I LOVE THESE KINDS OF STORIES! i wish people would make more of them
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW! THIS STORY IS SOOOOO CUTEEE! I LOVE THESE KINDS OF STORIES! i wish people would make more of them
5/13/2012 c3 39batman-defeats-all
Cute chapter. Having Jason become Red Hood without dying is interesting. Not bad, of course, just different.
After seeing the next lyrics in the song, I'm guessing Tim or Jay are going to break Dick's motorcycle or something.
39batman-defeats-allCute chapter. Having Jason become Red Hood without dying is interesting. Not bad, of course, just different.
After seeing the next lyrics in the song, I'm guessing Tim or Jay are going to break Dick's motorcycle or something.