for The Poart Mystery II: Tintin and the Lie Weaver10/31/2012 c12 
15Jadespade
Really good chapter! Just one thing: you should probably put a line between "Snowy followed closely behind her." and "There was little left of Tintin to be found." I got a little confused there. Otherwise, this is really good! Keep writing; I want to know what happens to Tintin!
15JadespadeReally good chapter! Just one thing: you should probably put a line between "Snowy followed closely behind her." and "There was little left of Tintin to be found." I got a little confused there. Otherwise, this is really good! Keep writing; I want to know what happens to Tintin!
10/27/2012 c11 Jadespade
Cliffhanger? NO!
Anyway, it's a shame this fanfic hasn't gotten anymore attention. It's one of the only fanfics with an OC that isn't a Mary Sue! Congratulations! And update soon!
Cliffhanger? NO!
Anyway, it's a shame this fanfic hasn't gotten anymore attention. It's one of the only fanfics with an OC that isn't a Mary Sue! Congratulations! And update soon!
9/3/2012 c10 Guest
Please finish this story!
Please finish this story!
8/16/2012 c10 1WascallyWabbit
How many chapters do you plan this to be? I'm loving the story so far and hope to read more soon!
1WascallyWabbitHow many chapters do you plan this to be? I'm loving the story so far and hope to read more soon!
8/6/2012 c10 2Scribblebun
You know what i love about your stories and what i think is very strong about them, even this one, is that they are very character driven. You bring out their weaknesses and fears without out making them seem weak and whinny. You bring out their strength and power without making them seem like perfect, almost inhuman, super beings. It's the right balance. You see and feel their struggle, and you want to see them pull through. Bravo! Can't wait for more!
2ScribblebunYou know what i love about your stories and what i think is very strong about them, even this one, is that they are very character driven. You bring out their weaknesses and fears without out making them seem weak and whinny. You bring out their strength and power without making them seem like perfect, almost inhuman, super beings. It's the right balance. You see and feel their struggle, and you want to see them pull through. Bravo! Can't wait for more!
6/21/2012 c10 7Maddi Paige
Epic. Just...amazingly epic. Im going to go and be mind boggled in a corner now...
7Maddi PaigeEpic. Just...amazingly epic. Im going to go and be mind boggled in a corner now...
6/21/2012 c10 RocknRollagirl
I may not be a total fan of your story(well, not yet) but i actually am a big fan of your did and do so well, that it is a pleasure to read your i also like the idea of the save-tintin-armee.
Keep on:))
I may not be a total fan of your story(well, not yet) but i actually am a big fan of your did and do so well, that it is a pleasure to read your i also like the idea of the save-tintin-armee.
Keep on:))
6/19/2012 c9 RocknRollagirl
I think i begin to change my mind about your story.I am very interested in how it will end and you can be sure that i will read and review every chapter:)
I think i begin to change my mind about your story.I am very interested in how it will end and you can be sure that i will read and review every chapter:)
6/18/2012 c9 Maddi Paige
I want to crawl into my closet and hyperventilate.
THIS. IS. EPIC.
I need to know what happens next.
I want to crawl into my closet and hyperventilate.
THIS. IS. EPIC.
I need to know what happens next.
6/16/2012 c9 1Pink-Pencil-Girl303
Aaah, another dramatic chapter! Your story is always so captivating and intense, what can one say? ;)
I'm confused as to how exactly George could get that many men to go along with him but... whatever. Awesome chapter! I really like how Tintin reacts to his 'suicide mission' situation, this is more to his character than he's been the whole story; brave and determined but scared too. And then Anne pops up, why doesn't George kill her? I thought that was the whole reason he's been looking all over for her!
One thing that I think could really help the flow of your prose; use shorter sentences. I know it's tempting to cram a ton of stuff into one sentence for the effect, but pulling that card too many times takes away from the impact. Try breaking up those sentences as you're writing them and it'll read easier.
I don't think I need to tell you this; Please update soon! I have to find out what happens to Tintin and Anne! D:
1Pink-Pencil-Girl303Aaah, another dramatic chapter! Your story is always so captivating and intense, what can one say? ;)
I'm confused as to how exactly George could get that many men to go along with him but... whatever. Awesome chapter! I really like how Tintin reacts to his 'suicide mission' situation, this is more to his character than he's been the whole story; brave and determined but scared too. And then Anne pops up, why doesn't George kill her? I thought that was the whole reason he's been looking all over for her!
One thing that I think could really help the flow of your prose; use shorter sentences. I know it's tempting to cram a ton of stuff into one sentence for the effect, but pulling that card too many times takes away from the impact. Try breaking up those sentences as you're writing them and it'll read easier.
I don't think I need to tell you this; Please update soon! I have to find out what happens to Tintin and Anne! D:
6/10/2012 c8 RocknRollagirl
Your last chapter was epic in a way, that nearly made me cry.
Very, very big;thats everything I can say about very sad:(You just cant let Tintin die!
There are only two things about your fanfiction i am not really happy with:I dont think your Characters fits in the original at your story tintin even named different, which is an interesting idea on one side, but a step too far on the other for a tintin story its much, much too Characters are depressed or in hopeless situations all the dramatic parts looses their fascination when everything is anyway, i cant wait for the next chapter!
Your last chapter was epic in a way, that nearly made me cry.
Very, very big;thats everything I can say about very sad:(You just cant let Tintin die!
There are only two things about your fanfiction i am not really happy with:I dont think your Characters fits in the original at your story tintin even named different, which is an interesting idea on one side, but a step too far on the other for a tintin story its much, much too Characters are depressed or in hopeless situations all the dramatic parts looses their fascination when everything is anyway, i cant wait for the next chapter!
6/9/2012 c8 7Maddi Paige
Jesus! This is epic. Im sobbing because I dont know what to do now. Wait for the next chapter I suppose...hint hint...
TINTIN! YOU CANT BE DEAD!
7Maddi PaigeJesus! This is epic. Im sobbing because I dont know what to do now. Wait for the next chapter I suppose...hint hint...
TINTIN! YOU CANT BE DEAD!
5/27/2012 c6 1Pink-Pencil-Girl303
First of all; woohoo! Another intense chapter from Arget Vindr! I loved it; so well-written and what fascinating dynamics between a pensive, guilty Tintin and a confused, naive Anne!
But secondly; Oh my gosh, when is Tintin going to tell her that is was her father who died? That is not the kind, compassionate, honest, caring Tintin we all know and love. That is self-serving, self-pitying Tintin that he seems to have somewhat adopted. :( I wish he would hurry up and tell her the truth, so she can start forgiving him! Or not forgiving him, depending on what she decides. I would be pretty upset if my boyfriend knew my father died but didn't tell me.
I did really like the dramatic tension built up in the end of this chapter, how Anne wanted to go all the way with Tintin, and Tintin of course, being as guilty about the whole thing as he is, couldn't! D: And Tintin's back story... It was so cool and what a great idea! It totally works with Tintin's character and everything, and also fits right in with the first Tintin book! [as in he goes back to Russia to expose all the horrible things going on there at the time] Anyway, awesome chapter! Please update again soon, so we can *hopefully* see some sort of 'scene of truth' between Tintin and Anne!
1Pink-Pencil-Girl303First of all; woohoo! Another intense chapter from Arget Vindr! I loved it; so well-written and what fascinating dynamics between a pensive, guilty Tintin and a confused, naive Anne!
But secondly; Oh my gosh, when is Tintin going to tell her that is was her father who died? That is not the kind, compassionate, honest, caring Tintin we all know and love. That is self-serving, self-pitying Tintin that he seems to have somewhat adopted. :( I wish he would hurry up and tell her the truth, so she can start forgiving him! Or not forgiving him, depending on what she decides. I would be pretty upset if my boyfriend knew my father died but didn't tell me.
I did really like the dramatic tension built up in the end of this chapter, how Anne wanted to go all the way with Tintin, and Tintin of course, being as guilty about the whole thing as he is, couldn't! D: And Tintin's back story... It was so cool and what a great idea! It totally works with Tintin's character and everything, and also fits right in with the first Tintin book! [as in he goes back to Russia to expose all the horrible things going on there at the time] Anyway, awesome chapter! Please update again soon, so we can *hopefully* see some sort of 'scene of truth' between Tintin and Anne!
5/25/2012 c5 LexieGirl96
That was great! Very excited for the upcoming chapters! You obviously took time in your writing and your word choice is excellent! Keep up the good work!
That was great! Very excited for the upcoming chapters! You obviously took time in your writing and your word choice is excellent! Keep up the good work!
5/20/2012 c4 Pink-Pencil-Girl303
HOLY. FUDGE. MUFFINS.
I had absolutely no idea that you posted a sequel, why didn't you PM message me and warn me? ;P Although it's obvious you've been very busy writing, churning out four intense amazing chapters in, what, a week? Goodness gracious.
This sequel is even better than your previous story, if that's even possible! Amazing emotions, super charged dialogue, it's all just so brilliant... made even better by your poetic, readable prose.
But all the pressure you're putting on Tintin makes for an interesting, shall we say... character exploration? Be wary of this, because the last thing you want is for Tintin's reaction to be SO desperate that it's OOC. Your readers want to see a hint of Tintin's old, happy, logical self, a flash of his wry grin and never-faltering confidence, however small and uncertain it may be. It is certainly interesting, putting him in such an intense and emotional situation, but it's almost too much for such a [let's face it?] flat character as Tintin. I'm not saying he's dull, he just lacks emotional depth, and suddenly giving him the emotional depth of the Mariana Trench is hard to adjust to.
Another thing; you, a writer of Tintin/OC fan fiction, have fallen victim to The Snowy Problem. It is a common dilemma among such writers as you and I, because among the throes of a complicated, violent, emotional plot, it's all too easy to shine the spotlight on Tintin and his lover and leave the little white terrier in the shadows. Please TRY to remember Snowy! Or, at least explain briefly where he is. It would make me feel better. Otherwise it seems like, among all this intensity, Tintin has *gasp* forgotten Snowy, which would definitely be OOC.
Anyway, please consider my humble suggestions and continue on with this amazing story! I love it when my favourite authors finish one awesome story... then turn around literally five seconds later and start the sequel! :D You rock. Can't wait for the next update, obviously, to see what happens when Anne wakes up! :O
P.S.- Just so you know, to compliment you on your gorgeous imagery, yours is one of the only Tintin fanfics I've read where I can compose awesome angst-y portraits of what Tintin's doing in my head as I read. Like when he's being accused of murdering Mr. Poart, he pauses, walks over to the window and looks out. Yeah!
P.P.S.- Last line of your most recent chapter; "What would the infamous Tintin look in the eyes of the beautiful innocent Anne?" ... I think you meant you phrase this differently, because it doesn't make much sense to me.
HOLY. FUDGE. MUFFINS.
I had absolutely no idea that you posted a sequel, why didn't you PM message me and warn me? ;P Although it's obvious you've been very busy writing, churning out four intense amazing chapters in, what, a week? Goodness gracious.
This sequel is even better than your previous story, if that's even possible! Amazing emotions, super charged dialogue, it's all just so brilliant... made even better by your poetic, readable prose.
But all the pressure you're putting on Tintin makes for an interesting, shall we say... character exploration? Be wary of this, because the last thing you want is for Tintin's reaction to be SO desperate that it's OOC. Your readers want to see a hint of Tintin's old, happy, logical self, a flash of his wry grin and never-faltering confidence, however small and uncertain it may be. It is certainly interesting, putting him in such an intense and emotional situation, but it's almost too much for such a [let's face it?] flat character as Tintin. I'm not saying he's dull, he just lacks emotional depth, and suddenly giving him the emotional depth of the Mariana Trench is hard to adjust to.
Another thing; you, a writer of Tintin/OC fan fiction, have fallen victim to The Snowy Problem. It is a common dilemma among such writers as you and I, because among the throes of a complicated, violent, emotional plot, it's all too easy to shine the spotlight on Tintin and his lover and leave the little white terrier in the shadows. Please TRY to remember Snowy! Or, at least explain briefly where he is. It would make me feel better. Otherwise it seems like, among all this intensity, Tintin has *gasp* forgotten Snowy, which would definitely be OOC.
Anyway, please consider my humble suggestions and continue on with this amazing story! I love it when my favourite authors finish one awesome story... then turn around literally five seconds later and start the sequel! :D You rock. Can't wait for the next update, obviously, to see what happens when Anne wakes up! :O
P.S.- Just so you know, to compliment you on your gorgeous imagery, yours is one of the only Tintin fanfics I've read where I can compose awesome angst-y portraits of what Tintin's doing in my head as I read. Like when he's being accused of murdering Mr. Poart, he pauses, walks over to the window and looks out. Yeah!
P.P.S.- Last line of your most recent chapter; "What would the infamous Tintin look in the eyes of the beautiful innocent Anne?" ... I think you meant you phrase this differently, because it doesn't make much sense to me.