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What will the high lords of terra think of this, me wonders?
What will the high lords of terra think of this, me wonders?
6/4/2012 c1 re ollie was it
at first i was going to politely argue with you over some points but then i noticed you were being an ass to me mearly because i was i was spreading my ideas most of wich you did not like (hardly a bad thing of course) and you were being an unpolite grammar nazi. so insted i will just suggest you wise up and stop nerd raging at and being an all around asshole to people who think differently than you other wise you might end up losing freinds or pissing sombody off who you really dont want to. bye :)
at first i was going to politely argue with you over some points but then i noticed you were being an ass to me mearly because i was i was spreading my ideas most of wich you did not like (hardly a bad thing of course) and you were being an unpolite grammar nazi. so insted i will just suggest you wise up and stop nerd raging at and being an all around asshole to people who think differently than you other wise you might end up losing freinds or pissing sombody off who you really dont want to. bye :)
6/4/2012 c1 Ollie was it
I don't think the guy was butthurt...more irritated someone just randomly decided to make a mary sue(OLDER AND SMARTER THAN THE EMPEROR OF MANKIND), have said mary sues nation be "enlightened" and "allied" to the ELDAR WHO MADE A FUCKING GOD OF THE WARP AND CAUSED QUADRILLIONS OF DEATHS! The Eldar don't give a shit about anyone but themselves. The second they see a chance to take another race down they'll take it. Also...your idea is fucking stupid. Orks only want to fight. Drell/Asari are from Mass Effect not WH40k...and if it was a fusion they'd have been wiped out AGES ago. The Eldar would be killing the fuck out of your democracy for existing because its freaking easy to corrupt democracies using chaos. As for ...you're a dumbass enough said. Also...ollie dude...learn English.
I don't think the guy was butthurt...more irritated someone just randomly decided to make a mary sue(OLDER AND SMARTER THAN THE EMPEROR OF MANKIND), have said mary sues nation be "enlightened" and "allied" to the ELDAR WHO MADE A FUCKING GOD OF THE WARP AND CAUSED QUADRILLIONS OF DEATHS! The Eldar don't give a shit about anyone but themselves. The second they see a chance to take another race down they'll take it. Also...your idea is fucking stupid. Orks only want to fight. Drell/Asari are from Mass Effect not WH40k...and if it was a fusion they'd have been wiped out AGES ago. The Eldar would be killing the fuck out of your democracy for existing because its freaking easy to corrupt democracies using chaos. As for ...you're a dumbass enough said. Also...ollie dude...learn English.
6/4/2012 c1 Aktis
The anonymous reviewer could have put things a bit more politely, but is basically correct. The whole Victory Sector comes across as overly idealized; and, really? Rangers, SEALS, and Delta Force? These names badly need changing (I like them too, but lets see some originality). It really doesn't help that the Imperium gets bashed here. For all its innumerable faults, the horrible truth is that they are the nearest thing 40k has to good guys (aside from the Tau, I guess). Calling the Emperor the 'fool' doesn't win you any points either.
Keep in mind that a large part of the attraction of the 40k universe is the grim-dark, and Brighthammer's fun lies in going to the opposite extreme. If you take this away, your AU becomes less Warhammer and more original fiction. You might be able to pull it off, but right now, the whole idea needs work.
The anonymous reviewer could have put things a bit more politely, but is basically correct. The whole Victory Sector comes across as overly idealized; and, really? Rangers, SEALS, and Delta Force? These names badly need changing (I like them too, but lets see some originality). It really doesn't help that the Imperium gets bashed here. For all its innumerable faults, the horrible truth is that they are the nearest thing 40k has to good guys (aside from the Tau, I guess). Calling the Emperor the 'fool' doesn't win you any points either.
Keep in mind that a large part of the attraction of the 40k universe is the grim-dark, and Brighthammer's fun lies in going to the opposite extreme. If you take this away, your AU becomes less Warhammer and more original fiction. You might be able to pull it off, but right now, the whole idea needs work.
6/3/2012 c1 
6mr I hate znt nobles kill em
don't mind the guy who said this fic sucks why not make them like the GDI from Renegade(ME/C&C) simply put stronger but quite sane
6mr I hate znt nobles kill emdon't mind the guy who said this fic sucks why not make them like the GDI from Renegade(ME/C&C) simply put stronger but quite sane
6/3/2012 c1 ollie
i had an idea of somthing like this once. i called it the coalition of united races. they started as a group of humans who fled earth during the age of strife and set about searching for allies among the stars. they were the one last hope for democracy and understanding in there violent universe. they were made up of many races like humans drell eldar asari tau and even orks. anyway continue and ignore the pointless buthurt troll/flamer below me
i had an idea of somthing like this once. i called it the coalition of united races. they started as a group of humans who fled earth during the age of strife and set about searching for allies among the stars. they were the one last hope for democracy and understanding in there violent universe. they were made up of many races like humans drell eldar asari tau and even orks. anyway continue and ignore the pointless buthurt troll/flamer below me
6/2/2012 c1 WARNING MARY SUE INCOMING
Yeah...see this sucks already. Its a crapsack universe by default and this "Ancient" well she already sounds like a mary sue...plus the Emperor would bitchslap the fucking hell out of her because she is an idiot. Also...blanks are /motherfucking rare/. Like...1 in every TRILLION or something. The fact that your little faction has enough to do this "They were resistant to the Warp, or even flat-out immune, due to their atheistic view of things, refusal to call the Abominations gods, and prevalence of the "Blank" Gene. They were strong, but she hoped that they were ready for this."...yeah no. Also as noted during the great crusade Atheism does not protect against chaos corruption...at all. If anything it makes them easier to corrupt.
Yeah...see this sucks already. Its a crapsack universe by default and this "Ancient" well she already sounds like a mary sue...plus the Emperor would bitchslap the fucking hell out of her because she is an idiot. Also...blanks are /motherfucking rare/. Like...1 in every TRILLION or something. The fact that your little faction has enough to do this "They were resistant to the Warp, or even flat-out immune, due to their atheistic view of things, refusal to call the Abominations gods, and prevalence of the "Blank" Gene. They were strong, but she hoped that they were ready for this."...yeah no. Also as noted during the great crusade Atheism does not protect against chaos corruption...at all. If anything it makes them easier to corrupt.