for Falling in Love9/14/2012 c7 Eevee20
Yes yes yes yes ye... Cool chibiMercury
Yes yes yes yes ye... Cool chibiMercury
9/14/2012 c6 Eevee20
Soul mates cool can you tell us more I mean can you come up with sailor mini Jupiter haha
Soul mates cool can you tell us more I mean can you come up with sailor mini Jupiter haha
8/24/2012 c1 Paragraph
This story is too hard to read. You need to break up the text so that it is readable.
EX: "Endy could you stop pacing? It's distracting." Zoisite asked annoyed. "But we're going to the Moon tomorrow." Endymion protested. "What's that got to do with it?" Zoisite asked. "That blasted Moon Princess." was the reply. "What?" Jadeite asked. "I hate that annoying brat." Endymion said pacing faster. "When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in." Nephrite said amused. "Endymion pulled pranks on her so she started pulling a few harmless pranks herself." Kunzite started. "They weren't harmless!" Endymion exclaimed.
Should actually read:
"Endy could you stop pacing? It's distracting." Zoisite asked annoyed.
"But we're going to the Moon tomorrow." Endymion protested.
"What's that got to do with it?" Zoisite asked.
"That blasted Moon Princess." was the reply.
"What?" Jadeite asked.
"I hate that annoying brat." Endymion said pacing faster.
"When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in." Nephrite said amused.
"Endymion pulled pranks on her so she started pulling a few harmless pranks herself." Kunzite started.
"They weren't harmless!" Endymion exclaimed.
See how much easier that makes it to read? Also, you should study up on basic grammar.
EX: "When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in." Nephrite said amused.
Should read: "When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in," Nephrite said amused.
See the comma in place of the period? There are sites you can go to that will teach you this stuff. Or, you can seek out a beta reader to help you. This will greatly improve your stories!
This story is too hard to read. You need to break up the text so that it is readable.
EX: "Endy could you stop pacing? It's distracting." Zoisite asked annoyed. "But we're going to the Moon tomorrow." Endymion protested. "What's that got to do with it?" Zoisite asked. "That blasted Moon Princess." was the reply. "What?" Jadeite asked. "I hate that annoying brat." Endymion said pacing faster. "When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in." Nephrite said amused. "Endymion pulled pranks on her so she started pulling a few harmless pranks herself." Kunzite started. "They weren't harmless!" Endymion exclaimed.
Should actually read:
"Endy could you stop pacing? It's distracting." Zoisite asked annoyed.
"But we're going to the Moon tomorrow." Endymion protested.
"What's that got to do with it?" Zoisite asked.
"That blasted Moon Princess." was the reply.
"What?" Jadeite asked.
"I hate that annoying brat." Endymion said pacing faster.
"When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in." Nephrite said amused.
"Endymion pulled pranks on her so she started pulling a few harmless pranks herself." Kunzite started.
"They weren't harmless!" Endymion exclaimed.
See how much easier that makes it to read? Also, you should study up on basic grammar.
EX: "When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in." Nephrite said amused.
Should read: "When we visited the Moon you two hadn't been found yet so we'll fill you in," Nephrite said amused.
See the comma in place of the period? There are sites you can go to that will teach you this stuff. Or, you can seek out a beta reader to help you. This will greatly improve your stories!
8/21/2012 c9 Guest
love the story
love the story
7/11/2012 c5 Guest
very nice although i still don't get it how do Endymion and the generals fall in love with Serenity and the scouts if right now they hate each other it reminds me of one of my favorite soap operas anyway update soon.
very nice although i still don't get it how do Endymion and the generals fall in love with Serenity and the scouts if right now they hate each other it reminds me of one of my favorite soap operas anyway update soon.
6/28/2012 c1 Guest
interesting story! can't wait for the next update.
interesting story! can't wait for the next update.
6/24/2012 c2 
7Moonprincess998
Really nice story although i don't see how the prince and princess or the Senshi and shitennou fall in love if right now it seems they hate each other but i guess the romance comes later UPDATE SOON
7Moonprincess998Really nice story although i don't see how the prince and princess or the Senshi and shitennou fall in love if right now it seems they hate each other but i guess the romance comes later UPDATE SOON