for Meet the Private7/24/2012 c5 
1TheAceOfDarkHearts
Haha it's ok! I'm a hopeless romantic as well! ._. But those kissing scenes fit your main character well, and this story definately brings out Soldiers soft side, I love it! Double thumbs up!
P.S. I'm anxciously waiting for the next chapter! .
1TheAceOfDarkHeartsHaha it's ok! I'm a hopeless romantic as well! ._. But those kissing scenes fit your main character well, and this story definately brings out Soldiers soft side, I love it! Double thumbs up!
P.S. I'm anxciously waiting for the next chapter! .
7/19/2012 c5 Mr. Dr. Medicman
Good. I respect your choice as author and love how you didn't just go straight for scout. Ike everyone else...
Good. I respect your choice as author and love how you didn't just go straight for scout. Ike everyone else...
7/19/2012 c5 4YinYangHeart
Lol cute! I sorta have a crush of Soldier too, so I'm happy with the pairing...and yeah Spy kinda creeps me out as well. /; Awesome work! X3
4YinYangHeartLol cute! I sorta have a crush of Soldier too, so I'm happy with the pairing...and yeah Spy kinda creeps me out as well. /; Awesome work! X3
7/19/2012 c5 13Tokyo Sunset
Your writing style is improving! Nice job! The wall of text bothered me a lot before.
13Tokyo SunsetYour writing style is improving! Nice job! The wall of text bothered me a lot before.
7/18/2012 c4 Mr. Dr. Medicman
I challenge you to make her fall in love with Spy. But if that's too hard, then scout while everyone bags on him over it.
I challenge you to make her fall in love with Spy. But if that's too hard, then scout while everyone bags on him over it.
7/18/2012 c4 LadyBarricade
Really like the story Kayla, hmmm I vote Spy!
Really like the story Kayla, hmmm I vote Spy!
7/18/2012 c4 theifkingbakura1
Aww Heavy and Engie are like awesome big brothers :D.
I don't know why I want Spy with her, guess its because he doesn't really get a lot of love on here with the ladies...BLU Spy I mean since he's always at the receiving end of disaster. That Red Spy is a real pimp, seems like everybody likes him more for some reason even though he is a real jerk.
Meh Can't wait to read more
Aww Heavy and Engie are like awesome big brothers :D.
I don't know why I want Spy with her, guess its because he doesn't really get a lot of love on here with the ladies...BLU Spy I mean since he's always at the receiving end of disaster. That Red Spy is a real pimp, seems like everybody likes him more for some reason even though he is a real jerk.
Meh Can't wait to read more
7/18/2012 c1 A Guest of Guest
Excellent! You are improving quite well.
Rommance options... Rommance options...
Well, I like a good Sniper rommance as much as the next guy.
Excellent! You are improving quite well.
Rommance options... Rommance options...
Well, I like a good Sniper rommance as much as the next guy.
7/18/2012 c4 4YinYangHeart
Lol awwww, I always knew Heavy was a big softy! X3
And as for whom to love? -whistles- That's a toughy...
I am crossed between Soldier and Pyro, but who can resist that big lug Heavy? XD I was also gonna say Engie, but I really do see him as a father figure. And Scout is nothing but a bratty little brother. XD
4YinYangHeartLol awwww, I always knew Heavy was a big softy! X3
And as for whom to love? -whistles- That's a toughy...
I am crossed between Soldier and Pyro, but who can resist that big lug Heavy? XD I was also gonna say Engie, but I really do see him as a father figure. And Scout is nothing but a bratty little brother. XD
7/15/2012 c3 A Guest of Guest
Well, while the wall of text is pretty annoying, you'll need a bit more of a boost. See, in writing, everytime a sentence said by a character starts, its separate from the paragraph. Now, there are those said sentences that can start a paragraph.
There are special cases when those sentences are within in the paragraph. At the moment, your problem is that your not separating the sentences from the paragraphs.
This can also help with regular editing. Helps promote more specific action in a story, and promotes more story and allows the character personality to shine without having to explain what that personality is.
Well, while the wall of text is pretty annoying, you'll need a bit more of a boost. See, in writing, everytime a sentence said by a character starts, its separate from the paragraph. Now, there are those said sentences that can start a paragraph.
There are special cases when those sentences are within in the paragraph. At the moment, your problem is that your not separating the sentences from the paragraphs.
This can also help with regular editing. Helps promote more specific action in a story, and promotes more story and allows the character personality to shine without having to explain what that personality is.