for No need to say goodbye: A series of one shots1/17/2015 c6 
4Paragon Eight
Probably the latest review ever - but IT WAS SO GOOD. I was on the brink of tears at the end. Why can't you write the actual series by Pittacus Lore, it would be so much better! Anyway, love your work, and PLEASE update The Destiny of Seven. Please!
Eight is awesome.
Kiara is awesome.
(update TDOS) :D
4Paragon EightProbably the latest review ever - but IT WAS SO GOOD. I was on the brink of tears at the end. Why can't you write the actual series by Pittacus Lore, it would be so much better! Anyway, love your work, and PLEASE update The Destiny of Seven. Please!
Eight is awesome.
Kiara is awesome.
(update TDOS) :D
4/9/2014 c6 6Meerkat78
So sad at the end when they can't remember each other :-(
Really great story, I really enjoyed reading it and it's great how you have backgrounds for the characters.
6Meerkat78So sad at the end when they can't remember each other :-(
Really great story, I really enjoyed reading it and it's great how you have backgrounds for the characters.
3/13/2014 c6 you know who
a derivation, deviation, deflection, but definitely more demanding. i do daresay You dojustice to the daring dream you are dealing with. Your capacity to cumulate details confining the clueless reader into a corner only to clear a way to a surprising culmination is charming. clean home chapters were over described but callosal chaos is curiously your comfort zone. invigorating readers imagination with limited intimate information was indeed interesting and the incredible aspect to your last and penultimate chapters. YOU DEFINITELY ARE A GARDE BUT IM WAITING FOR UR LEGACIES...
a derivation, deviation, deflection, but definitely more demanding. i do daresay You dojustice to the daring dream you are dealing with. Your capacity to cumulate details confining the clueless reader into a corner only to clear a way to a surprising culmination is charming. clean home chapters were over described but callosal chaos is curiously your comfort zone. invigorating readers imagination with limited intimate information was indeed interesting and the incredible aspect to your last and penultimate chapters. YOU DEFINITELY ARE A GARDE BUT IM WAITING FOR UR LEGACIES...
3/12/2014 c6 2WritingMagic725
I FORGOT HOW MUCH THEM FORGETING MADE ME CRY! This was so amazingly written but due to my extreme crying over here you could have spelled everything wrong and I wouldn't have noticed so I'm kind of useless. But It was soooo sad but you know beautiful at the same time which is really amazing. I'm sad to see this story end but... now I'll just go obsessively wait for your update on The Second Chance. It better be snappy TGS cause I wanna review your story again. Everyone needs to know how amazing your writing is and my obsessive reviewing is gonna make them read it. But just remember that me and my adorable baby sister are your biggest friends and still expect responses to out PMs. Well... now you have your longest most dorkiest review ever *bows dramatically*
2WritingMagic725I FORGOT HOW MUCH THEM FORGETING MADE ME CRY! This was so amazingly written but due to my extreme crying over here you could have spelled everything wrong and I wouldn't have noticed so I'm kind of useless. But It was soooo sad but you know beautiful at the same time which is really amazing. I'm sad to see this story end but... now I'll just go obsessively wait for your update on The Second Chance. It better be snappy TGS cause I wanna review your story again. Everyone needs to know how amazing your writing is and my obsessive reviewing is gonna make them read it. But just remember that me and my adorable baby sister are your biggest friends and still expect responses to out PMs. Well... now you have your longest most dorkiest review ever *bows dramatically*
3/12/2014 c5 WritingMagic725
*sobs dramatically* This was so sad TSG! I mean honestly I know their parents had to die but yo didn't have to remind me! I give you serious props though, I don't know if I could handle killing a fictional Mogodorian but to write about the death of a LORIC? I couldn't handle it I'd cry. But that really just shows the depth of your writing and also your talent. I am quite frankly glad you are continuing this despite the fact that now it's done...
*sobs dramatically* This was so sad TSG! I mean honestly I know their parents had to die but yo didn't have to remind me! I give you serious props though, I don't know if I could handle killing a fictional Mogodorian but to write about the death of a LORIC? I couldn't handle it I'd cry. But that really just shows the depth of your writing and also your talent. I am quite frankly glad you are continuing this despite the fact that now it's done...
3/12/2014 c4 WritingMagic725
It's soooo much shorter TSG! That's what I'm gonna call you TSG for thesecondgarde, you know but anyway I do not like you saying you aren't going to continue even though I know you will, this one seems a bit off because Kiara doesn't seem like the kind of character to be seriously into books in your other story. I mean I love it don't get me wrong but it almost seems like if a more Marina ish quality. See I finally found something to comment on. I feel like you should know, I still loved all of it though.
It's soooo much shorter TSG! That's what I'm gonna call you TSG for thesecondgarde, you know but anyway I do not like you saying you aren't going to continue even though I know you will, this one seems a bit off because Kiara doesn't seem like the kind of character to be seriously into books in your other story. I mean I love it don't get me wrong but it almost seems like if a more Marina ish quality. See I finally found something to comment on. I feel like you should know, I still loved all of it though.
3/12/2014 c3 WritingMagic725
Aww you go Kiara and Joseph! Nope can't do it still gonna call him Eight. HAHAHAHA I love the last sentence, and you do really amazingly with the tying it into the song lyrics, which I give you props for. I can honestly say I'm trying really hard for criticism here and failing. But if there's something I will find it don't you worry!
Aww you go Kiara and Joseph! Nope can't do it still gonna call him Eight. HAHAHAHA I love the last sentence, and you do really amazingly with the tying it into the song lyrics, which I give you props for. I can honestly say I'm trying really hard for criticism here and failing. But if there's something I will find it don't you worry!
3/12/2014 c2 WritingMagic725
Eight and Marina! Nine and Kiara! Oh they were both cute together when they were barely walking! I don't think the names suck, as a matter of fact I love the name Leo for Nine... But I'm still gonna call him Nine cause that's awkward. I know this is no loner relevant but if I had known when you wrote it I would have definitely said OF COURSE YOU SHOLD CONTINUE!
Eight and Marina! Nine and Kiara! Oh they were both cute together when they were barely walking! I don't think the names suck, as a matter of fact I love the name Leo for Nine... But I'm still gonna call him Nine cause that's awkward. I know this is no loner relevant but if I had known when you wrote it I would have definitely said OF COURSE YOU SHOLD CONTINUE!
3/12/2014 c1 WritingMagic725
AWW SO Cute! I can totally see Kiara being the knowledgeable one. Not to mention, Eight does kind of seem like the person who would believe his hand is going to fall off... Well I loved it plus the whole song thing and tying one in at the beginning is brilliant
AWW SO Cute! I can totally see Kiara being the knowledgeable one. Not to mention, Eight does kind of seem like the person who would believe his hand is going to fall off... Well I loved it plus the whole song thing and tying one in at the beginning is brilliant
3/3/2014 c6 wii98
Awesome story! Really leads up and explains Second Chance. Now we know why even though they left at the age of 7, they still didn't recognize each other as twins. I'm glad I took the time to read this.
Awesome story! Really leads up and explains Second Chance. Now we know why even though they left at the age of 7, they still didn't recognize each other as twins. I'm glad I took the time to read this.
3/3/2014 c4 wii98
More background about Kiara and her obsession with George Orwell! But why are there so many Earth books on Lorien?
More background about Kiara and her obsession with George Orwell! But why are there so many Earth books on Lorien?
3/3/2014 c3 wii98
Fill-in chapters, yay! Good job (no sarcasm), I don't see much of this stuff in other fanfics. Also shows their teamwork, how well they can work together. Good thing that they are twins!
Fill-in chapters, yay! Good job (no sarcasm), I don't see much of this stuff in other fanfics. Also shows their teamwork, how well they can work together. Good thing that they are twins!
3/3/2014 c2 wii98
O.o this is all tying back to second chance. Really cool. This is why Joseph and Kiara were chosen to be 2 and 8. And I'm going to assume that the shy girl was Marina. It may be too late, but you should continue the story until it reaches and respective end.
O.o this is all tying back to second chance. Really cool. This is why Joseph and Kiara were chosen to be 2 and 8. And I'm going to assume that the shy girl was Marina. It may be too late, but you should continue the story until it reaches and respective end.
3/3/2014 c1 wii98
Probably too late to review, but the twin relationship between Joseph and Kiara is pretty cool, how she can somewhat sense his feelings. I see why this is a prequel to Second Chance.
Probably too late to review, but the twin relationship between Joseph and Kiara is pretty cool, how she can somewhat sense his feelings. I see why this is a prequel to Second Chance.
2/28/2014 c6 2TomFieldings
That was so... Sweet and sad and heartbreaking and awesome at the same time! Wow. Absolutely brilliant.
I really loved this entire thing, and I wish that there were more. It was just so... Touching. I've finally found the word, and it doesn't even begin to describe it. Just... Wow.
I loved reading all these one-shots/ two-shots, they were really awesome. You are an absolutely fantastic writer, and I can't wait for your other stories. The ending was just so... touching. For lack of a better word. Deep and brilliant in every way possible. I felt so emotional at the end of it, it was just... Okay, I'm going to stop trying to describe it, since I obviously can't.
Thanks for writing!
Yours truly,
Tom.
2TomFieldingsThat was so... Sweet and sad and heartbreaking and awesome at the same time! Wow. Absolutely brilliant.
I really loved this entire thing, and I wish that there were more. It was just so... Touching. I've finally found the word, and it doesn't even begin to describe it. Just... Wow.
I loved reading all these one-shots/ two-shots, they were really awesome. You are an absolutely fantastic writer, and I can't wait for your other stories. The ending was just so... touching. For lack of a better word. Deep and brilliant in every way possible. I felt so emotional at the end of it, it was just... Okay, I'm going to stop trying to describe it, since I obviously can't.
Thanks for writing!
Yours truly,
Tom.