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4/1/2014 c2 1hananas59
I think you did a really good job on these chapters. I've got some tips though:
1. Keep your story organized and neat as it is hard to read your story.
2. Exand your story more as it's all really short and neat but if you would expand your story more and add a general storyline for your whole season it would be better
3. Make sure you add back to the park pieces where susan or bob are dealing with previously caught animals.

The amount of creatures is well thought of though and the way you capture them is cool too

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