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2/5 c11 DarkHunter10
Hinata is supposed to "learn something outside the traditional Hyuuga ways"? You mean OTHER then "blood bending", earth techniques, water techniques, summoning techniques, steam techniques(bloodline techniques, so impossible) AND ice techniques? She already has 14 other jutsu(I counted), BEFORE the exams(or this chapter) and HYUUGA DON'T USE JUTSU! Nothing about her fighting style NOW, is ANYTHING like the "traditional Hyuuga" fighting style.
So your giving naruto the ability to make metal weapons... When he ALREADY HAS metal weapons? Um... WHY? Also isn't Earth the EXACT OPPOSITE of his wind element? As in, it would be easier to learn ALL the other elements first? He's ONLY got wind scythes (basically) from his claws (which essentially Temari already has), hidden mist and his "slash at enemies" that zabuzza already taught him, AND hinata AND shika (yet ANOTHER technique that ISN'T for hyuuga, if you remember)... Oh and shadow clones... SOOOO.. Basically, I don't think he needs more "assistance" techniques, when HE'S supposed to be the "main powerhouse of the team"... He NEEDS ATTACK! Not just "claw, claw, punch, punch". Because right now, I don't see HOW you keep having people call him the "main power of the team".. When the OTHERS are getting FAR more attack abilities. Even though he SHOULD have more chakra then them put together(easily), it's kinda USELESS, if it ISN'T USED!
Kinda funny you have Hinata ordering the shrimp ramien broth too... Considering one of the FEW things we DO actually know about her, from the canon databooks is that the ONLY food she hates is SHELLFISH... (It actually STATES, that she especially dislikes CRAB AND SHRIMP the most) ROFL!
Hinata is supposed to "learn something outside the traditional Hyuuga ways"? You mean OTHER then "blood bending", earth techniques, water techniques, summoning techniques, steam techniques(bloodline techniques, so impossible) AND ice techniques? She already has 14 other jutsu(I counted), BEFORE the exams(or this chapter) and HYUUGA DON'T USE JUTSU! Nothing about her fighting style NOW, is ANYTHING like the "traditional Hyuuga" fighting style.
So your giving naruto the ability to make metal weapons... When he ALREADY HAS metal weapons? Um... WHY? Also isn't Earth the EXACT OPPOSITE of his wind element? As in, it would be easier to learn ALL the other elements first? He's ONLY got wind scythes (basically) from his claws (which essentially Temari already has), hidden mist and his "slash at enemies" that zabuzza already taught him, AND hinata AND shika (yet ANOTHER technique that ISN'T for hyuuga, if you remember)... Oh and shadow clones... SOOOO.. Basically, I don't think he needs more "assistance" techniques, when HE'S supposed to be the "main powerhouse of the team"... He NEEDS ATTACK! Not just "claw, claw, punch, punch". Because right now, I don't see HOW you keep having people call him the "main power of the team".. When the OTHERS are getting FAR more attack abilities. Even though he SHOULD have more chakra then them put together(easily), it's kinda USELESS, if it ISN'T USED!
Kinda funny you have Hinata ordering the shrimp ramien broth too... Considering one of the FEW things we DO actually know about her, from the canon databooks is that the ONLY food she hates is SHELLFISH... (It actually STATES, that she especially dislikes CRAB AND SHRIMP the most) ROFL!
2/5 c10 DarkHunter10
ROFL, so the ONLY ones that passed the exams from ALL the villages, were the ones the GREW UP in the village, who KNEW the terrain and Suna with the "kill everything first" jinchuriki? ROFL, yeah that shouldn't seem RIGGED at ALL to the other villages. I just don't see how Fu, who is QUITE LITERALLY 6 TIMES more powerful then garaa, fails.. Unless she just didn't do the whole "seek-and-destroy" to all the teams they got near.
"negji what's gotten into you"?.. Um nothing, he's acted like that, for most of his life... ALL of his ninja career.. Which Hinata SHOULD KNOW, considering they grew up together, IN THE SAME HOUSE! I'm just kinda flabbergasted at the OPEN hostility by negji, when he KNOWS FOR A FACT, she can beat him/humiliate him/scramble his brains and even KILL HIM, with a single hand sign!
ROFL, so the ONLY ones that passed the exams from ALL the villages, were the ones the GREW UP in the village, who KNEW the terrain and Suna with the "kill everything first" jinchuriki? ROFL, yeah that shouldn't seem RIGGED at ALL to the other villages. I just don't see how Fu, who is QUITE LITERALLY 6 TIMES more powerful then garaa, fails.. Unless she just didn't do the whole "seek-and-destroy" to all the teams they got near.
"negji what's gotten into you"?.. Um nothing, he's acted like that, for most of his life... ALL of his ninja career.. Which Hinata SHOULD KNOW, considering they grew up together, IN THE SAME HOUSE! I'm just kinda flabbergasted at the OPEN hostility by negji, when he KNOWS FOR A FACT, she can beat him/humiliate him/scramble his brains and even KILL HIM, with a single hand sign!
2/3 c8 DarkHunter10
I'm confused.. This "mission report"... Didn't say ANYTHING really, not... Naruto having to literally "bisect" his first person... The EXTRA fights ALL team 10 got into WITH ninjas... Sasuke have MULTIPLE, really BAD problems... "insubordination", "directly disobeying orders", "nearly getting himself killed", "inability to work with other ninja and antagonistic behavior", "abandonment of the client", "possible homicidal urges toward and most definitely unnatural obsession with, a NEW ALLY"... If you're going to do a "mission report", you gotta give the good with the bad! It isn't just the uchiha being young either, because there were 6 kids on that mission and only ONE had ALL the issues.. One out of six, isn't a problem to just be "overlooked". OH and lets not forget... Hiruzen would just now be hearing about the two CHUNIN that got killed, before team 10 arrived AND beat the people the supposed "chunin, assassination experts" couldn't. You had the hokage say that Asuma and team would "be heard from first and evaluated first"... But had kakashi speak LAST chapter... AND you had NONE of the team or Asuma say ANYTHING. Also, how did kakashi's team beat team 10 back? I know team 10 had to go to the tower (again), but.. Team 7 doesn't even know "tree hopping" yet... Or have JUST learned it.. So team 10 should be TONS faster.
Why is the uchiha being taught by Zabuzza? ALL the above reasons PLUS the fact that the whole thing of zabuzza coming to the village was to teach the three of TEAM 10! Not the pissy-ass, wanna-be ninja. This was ALREADY agreed too... The uchiha shouldn't be ANYWHERE in this. Besides the Sharringan CAN'T see through the mist (according to the wave adventure IN CANON) so his eyes are worthless and they are the ONLY thing redeeming as a ninja, about him. Otherwise, he's really just kinda AVERAGE. Or even a little "slow on the uptake".
I'm confused.. This "mission report"... Didn't say ANYTHING really, not... Naruto having to literally "bisect" his first person... The EXTRA fights ALL team 10 got into WITH ninjas... Sasuke have MULTIPLE, really BAD problems... "insubordination", "directly disobeying orders", "nearly getting himself killed", "inability to work with other ninja and antagonistic behavior", "abandonment of the client", "possible homicidal urges toward and most definitely unnatural obsession with, a NEW ALLY"... If you're going to do a "mission report", you gotta give the good with the bad! It isn't just the uchiha being young either, because there were 6 kids on that mission and only ONE had ALL the issues.. One out of six, isn't a problem to just be "overlooked". OH and lets not forget... Hiruzen would just now be hearing about the two CHUNIN that got killed, before team 10 arrived AND beat the people the supposed "chunin, assassination experts" couldn't. You had the hokage say that Asuma and team would "be heard from first and evaluated first"... But had kakashi speak LAST chapter... AND you had NONE of the team or Asuma say ANYTHING. Also, how did kakashi's team beat team 10 back? I know team 10 had to go to the tower (again), but.. Team 7 doesn't even know "tree hopping" yet... Or have JUST learned it.. So team 10 should be TONS faster.
Why is the uchiha being taught by Zabuzza? ALL the above reasons PLUS the fact that the whole thing of zabuzza coming to the village was to teach the three of TEAM 10! Not the pissy-ass, wanna-be ninja. This was ALREADY agreed too... The uchiha shouldn't be ANYWHERE in this. Besides the Sharringan CAN'T see through the mist (according to the wave adventure IN CANON) so his eyes are worthless and they are the ONLY thing redeeming as a ninja, about him. Otherwise, he's really just kinda AVERAGE. Or even a little "slow on the uptake".
2/2 c4 DarkHunter10
Not really buying this one.. Naruto is sent out AFTER the kid from the KNOWN "traitor" clan? When Naruto IS the "weapon of war" for the village? (Yeah I know most other writers always want to stress naruto's HUMANITY and his stupidity, but lets face it.. The Jinchuriki ONLY exist to be a "balance of power" between the villages and AS ULTIMATE WEAPONS for their villages) He's NOT going to be on a "clean up the trash" type mission (outside of the village.. Because again... Ultimate WEAPONS... Plus jinchuriki are "lightning rods" for enemies of the village and for trouble).
I don't really understand how in the heck these "missions" even happened... Pakkun was running back to konoha with the dead demon brothers (which makes no sense, because then how would sarutobi have known to back up team 7)... But then he runs into Asuma and co.. So they send him BACK to kakashi to tell him, they are coming, only to come BACK AGAIN to Asuma... With orders that somehow ANOTHER patrol guard is going to help team 7 and going to check around the area (that's now OLD as shit and had TWO groups and a dog run through it TWICE) of the brothers AGAIN... There is NO WAY OF HAVING "lines of communication between konoha and the land of waves"! Unless kakashi was "sooth saying" by predicting they'd need help before he ever sent back pakkun... Then SOMEHOW (in a very NONSENSE way)... Kakkashi is communicating telepathically with sarutobi or something? Who is COMPLETELY redistributing troops (despite the fact there were "no other ninja available" before?) and SOMEHOW telling kakashi this, PLUS kakashi now telling naruto's team? THIS ALONE is giving me a headache trying to follow this TWISTED logic puzzle. What was the POINT to all the mental gymnastics? Just don't want to do wave again, BUT still want the "bridge battle"?
Not really buying this one.. Naruto is sent out AFTER the kid from the KNOWN "traitor" clan? When Naruto IS the "weapon of war" for the village? (Yeah I know most other writers always want to stress naruto's HUMANITY and his stupidity, but lets face it.. The Jinchuriki ONLY exist to be a "balance of power" between the villages and AS ULTIMATE WEAPONS for their villages) He's NOT going to be on a "clean up the trash" type mission (outside of the village.. Because again... Ultimate WEAPONS... Plus jinchuriki are "lightning rods" for enemies of the village and for trouble).
I don't really understand how in the heck these "missions" even happened... Pakkun was running back to konoha with the dead demon brothers (which makes no sense, because then how would sarutobi have known to back up team 7)... But then he runs into Asuma and co.. So they send him BACK to kakashi to tell him, they are coming, only to come BACK AGAIN to Asuma... With orders that somehow ANOTHER patrol guard is going to help team 7 and going to check around the area (that's now OLD as shit and had TWO groups and a dog run through it TWICE) of the brothers AGAIN... There is NO WAY OF HAVING "lines of communication between konoha and the land of waves"! Unless kakashi was "sooth saying" by predicting they'd need help before he ever sent back pakkun... Then SOMEHOW (in a very NONSENSE way)... Kakkashi is communicating telepathically with sarutobi or something? Who is COMPLETELY redistributing troops (despite the fact there were "no other ninja available" before?) and SOMEHOW telling kakashi this, PLUS kakashi now telling naruto's team? THIS ALONE is giving me a headache trying to follow this TWISTED logic puzzle. What was the POINT to all the mental gymnastics? Just don't want to do wave again, BUT still want the "bridge battle"?
1/31 c1 DarkHunter10
So why isn't naruto on team 8? His sense of smell now BEATS kiba and kiba's sense of smell is THE ONLY reason he's on team 8... With his "pack mentality", Kiba SHOULD be paired with the Uchiha on team 7, in order to teach HIM more about working as a group! (but yeah, giving naruto these powers... You've essentially made Kiba COMPLETELY redundant... He's NOT the heir, his sister is... Now his senses aren't impressive, naruto beats him in those, naruto's "claws" are longer and stronger)... So yeah... Kiba's a character that's easy to just DROP from the series.. Because he's usually going to get "overshadowed" and "almost" every part of his character is going to become eclipsed by just about EVERYBODY else... I say "almost" because that whole *thinking in terms of a pack* seems to almost always get forgotten... And THAT'S the trait that SHOULD have been placed next to the Uchiha (especially given the REASON for the "uchiha revolt"), if naruto can suddenly "smell" better then the Inzuka then there really ISN'T a reason to put a "hot head" on a team of even-headed trackers(which is ALL they can do) is there? The hokage would just go ahead and put naruto on it.
So why isn't naruto on team 8? His sense of smell now BEATS kiba and kiba's sense of smell is THE ONLY reason he's on team 8... With his "pack mentality", Kiba SHOULD be paired with the Uchiha on team 7, in order to teach HIM more about working as a group! (but yeah, giving naruto these powers... You've essentially made Kiba COMPLETELY redundant... He's NOT the heir, his sister is... Now his senses aren't impressive, naruto beats him in those, naruto's "claws" are longer and stronger)... So yeah... Kiba's a character that's easy to just DROP from the series.. Because he's usually going to get "overshadowed" and "almost" every part of his character is going to become eclipsed by just about EVERYBODY else... I say "almost" because that whole *thinking in terms of a pack* seems to almost always get forgotten... And THAT'S the trait that SHOULD have been placed next to the Uchiha (especially given the REASON for the "uchiha revolt"), if naruto can suddenly "smell" better then the Inzuka then there really ISN'T a reason to put a "hot head" on a team of even-headed trackers(which is ALL they can do) is there? The hokage would just go ahead and put naruto on it.
11/2/2023 c2 Haji the Monster
Shikamaru has the weakest taijutsu besides Ino and Sakura at this point. Hinata is leagues faster than him, and he would have broken his leg on Naruto's.
Shikamaru has the weakest taijutsu besides Ino and Sakura at this point. Hinata is leagues faster than him, and he would have broken his leg on Naruto's.
10/31/2022 c1 
1DemonkingRazronnal
Also asumadies from immortal bastard but returns as an edo summon and is proud of them*
1DemonkingRazronnalAlso asumadies from immortal bastard but returns as an edo summon and is proud of them*
12/20/2021 c12 kyletheemojew
Nothing on the story but you typed the date wrong so just wanted you to know
Nothing on the story but you typed the date wrong so just wanted you to know
6/9/2021 c1 LL
Oh ima love reading all your stories!
Oh ima love reading all your stories!
12/5/2020 c12 Jack Kincaid
Well that update deadline was a lie
Great story and if you're not dead I would love to see a continuation as there are no other stories that fit the criteria that this story does
Well that update deadline was a lie
Great story and if you're not dead I would love to see a continuation as there are no other stories that fit the criteria that this story does
8/7/2019 c1 markshandon7
Why the fuck you made naruto switch teams when it is suppose to be a balanced teams not fucking bullshit like that. And Naruto still Is Dead-Last in Grades.
Why the fuck you made naruto switch teams when it is suppose to be a balanced teams not fucking bullshit like that. And Naruto still Is Dead-Last in Grades.