8/25/2019 c34 1DeadFish37
Another enjoyable story, though this one took a while to get going. Are you planning to write a sequel? I would really love to read it if so, and will be following you on this website in case you ever do post another story.
Another enjoyable story, though this one took a while to get going. Are you planning to write a sequel? I would really love to read it if so, and will be following you on this website in case you ever do post another story.
7/23/2019 c34 14Freddie Rindklip
Different but very well written. This is the second story of your I read through. Are you planning to return?
Different but very well written. This is the second story of your I read through. Are you planning to return?
5/20/2019 c34 14old-crow
Hi,
This tale is an old favorite, I enjoy it each time I come to it. If the mood ever strikes you for a chapter edit, you might add a few pages regarding the final Hogwarts fight. It is much stronger if told live-action than after-ther-fact.
All the best,
Old-Crow
Hi,
This tale is an old favorite, I enjoy it each time I come to it. If the mood ever strikes you for a chapter edit, you might add a few pages regarding the final Hogwarts fight. It is much stronger if told live-action than after-ther-fact.
All the best,
Old-Crow
11/29/2018 c34 4Scorpion.Sorcerer7
Thank you for the brilliant story! Just saw the runemaster stolen by someone and found you again. Glad to have read this :)
What a unique story!
Thank you for the brilliant story! Just saw the runemaster stolen by someone and found you again. Glad to have read this :)
What a unique story!
10/19/2018 c8 Me
Was enjoying this fic. Until Sirius turns out to be a bad guy. Hitting the red x. Thanks
Was enjoying this fic. Until Sirius turns out to be a bad guy. Hitting the red x. Thanks
9/29/2017 c6 1PenguinAgen
After writing my last review I've read a bit more and I'm disappointed. I might keep reading simply because I found the premise so gripping, but the writing is off-putting for me. The story that lies behind it seems to be good, but the writing and especially the way the characters act just don't seem... authentic. I guess. Not that it is all bad, there are definitely good moments, but enough of it isn't that I have a hard time enjoying it. Maybe a good beta would have made this story far better.
I keep wanting to read on because of the premise, because of the world you've created and because of the way the characters act because of it, so I hope it gets better later.
After writing my last review I've read a bit more and I'm disappointed. I might keep reading simply because I found the premise so gripping, but the writing is off-putting for me. The story that lies behind it seems to be good, but the writing and especially the way the characters act just don't seem... authentic. I guess. Not that it is all bad, there are definitely good moments, but enough of it isn't that I have a hard time enjoying it. Maybe a good beta would have made this story far better.
I keep wanting to read on because of the premise, because of the world you've created and because of the way the characters act because of it, so I hope it gets better later.
9/27/2017 c2 PenguinAgen
I've only read two chapters, but I don't need more than the first to say that I have never been so intrigued by a first chapter than this. I don't know what exactly drew me in (though Luna's presence always helps), but I think I can honestly say that I've never been this excited by a story after so little text as with this. Well done.
There is one problem though. Most of the writing is good, but there are a few exceptions. Things that draw me out and destroy some of the amazing atmosphere you've built. The two most notable examples are ""Yes!" cheered Harry, pumping a fist in the air." from chapter 1 and "Petunia froze. No, it couldn't be. Not them!" from chapter 2. To me they seem forced. The second one I think could be fixed simply by removing "Not them!" The first one maybe by changing "cheered" to "said". Anyway it's your story and this is my opinion. Looking forward to reading the rest.
I've only read two chapters, but I don't need more than the first to say that I have never been so intrigued by a first chapter than this. I don't know what exactly drew me in (though Luna's presence always helps), but I think I can honestly say that I've never been this excited by a story after so little text as with this. Well done.
There is one problem though. Most of the writing is good, but there are a few exceptions. Things that draw me out and destroy some of the amazing atmosphere you've built. The two most notable examples are ""Yes!" cheered Harry, pumping a fist in the air." from chapter 1 and "Petunia froze. No, it couldn't be. Not them!" from chapter 2. To me they seem forced. The second one I think could be fixed simply by removing "Not them!" The first one maybe by changing "cheered" to "said". Anyway it's your story and this is my opinion. Looking forward to reading the rest.
9/16/2017 c10 Alex
So, how did this Sirius get into Gryffindor? Or the marauders? Because he sure as heck wasn't rebelling against his family! Canonically, he would've been one of those snakes the marauders went after!
So, how did this Sirius get into Gryffindor? Or the marauders? Because he sure as heck wasn't rebelling against his family! Canonically, he would've been one of those snakes the marauders went after!
7/20/2017 c34 3Deathmvp
This was a very different but epic story you have here. Thank you for posting it as it was a great story to read.
This was a very different but epic story you have here. Thank you for posting it as it was a great story to read.
12/16/2016 c34 Alfa Wolfcub
Thankyou for writting these wonderfully stories (and the comical disclaimers) I've read two so far and can't wait to go back to your authors pages and see what else you have in store for me :)
Thankyou for writting these wonderfully stories (and the comical disclaimers) I've read two so far and can't wait to go back to your authors pages and see what else you have in store for me :)
12/10/2016 c12 Alfa Wolfcub
Absolutely love this story! So original. I'm sad about Sirius, but there are few stories i really like him in.
Absolutely love this story! So original. I'm sad about Sirius, but there are few stories i really like him in.
10/27/2016 c34 Juka
That was awesome. New original concept that was well writen. Thank you for writing such an amazing story.
That was awesome. New original concept that was well writen. Thank you for writing such an amazing story.
8/7/2016 c1 Shiaira73
I just got done reading this fic. Great Job! It's definitely on my favorites list now and I have already recommended it to friends. Thank you for taking the time to write and share such a great story.
I just got done reading this fic. Great Job! It's definitely on my favorites list now and I have already recommended it to friends. Thank you for taking the time to write and share such a great story.