for Even if3/21/2015 c1 Guest
Basically sums up Fruk perfectly. Beautiful
Basically sums up Fruk perfectly. Beautiful
3/28/2014 c1 
102Winter Leigh End
I like the repetition of this, it gives the piece a nice flow!
If I were to remark on anything in need of work, the "if even if you chose him over me," I think that first if should be taken out. It feels funny considering the if right after the even and it messes with the repetition as well.
Good job!
102Winter Leigh EndI like the repetition of this, it gives the piece a nice flow!
If I were to remark on anything in need of work, the "if even if you chose him over me," I think that first if should be taken out. It feels funny considering the if right after the even and it messes with the repetition as well.
Good job!