for Darkness Is My Ally2/7 c20 Guest
Loved this gutted it’s over
Loved this gutted it’s over
2/4 c20 HalfBlood Prince
I found this story fascinating from the start. However, You ruined it when Hadrian started showing moments of weakness, like appreciation for Lili or crying in front of, and especially not developing the Harry/Pansy relationship by deciding to sacrifice himself without even leaving any descendants...
Score:
6/10
I found this story fascinating from the start. However, You ruined it when Hadrian started showing moments of weakness, like appreciation for Lili or crying in front of, and especially not developing the Harry/Pansy relationship by deciding to sacrifice himself without even leaving any descendants...
Score:
6/10
1/30 c2 yokedjaguar
This is the 2nd chapter and it's honestly the most disappointing story I've read. I usually find stories upsetting because the grammars atrocious but this is the first time I've seen such an arrogant little shit that quite frankly needs his ass busted. Kids gots some major issues plus every character so far is so overdramatic I swear it feels like it's straight out of a drama.
This is the 2nd chapter and it's honestly the most disappointing story I've read. I usually find stories upsetting because the grammars atrocious but this is the first time I've seen such an arrogant little shit that quite frankly needs his ass busted. Kids gots some major issues plus every character so far is so overdramatic I swear it feels like it's straight out of a drama.
1/30 c2 yokedjaguar
It can't be a balck snowy owl... That kinda defeats the whole purpose of the the owl being called "snowy owl"
It can't be a balck snowy owl... That kinda defeats the whole purpose of the the owl being called "snowy owl"
1/19 c13 tajarim
"And the Muggles?" asked Lucien.
"Well here's the strange thing," Hadrian answered, looking genuinely concerned as he explained, "Barely two days after Bellatrix found me, they were committed to somewhere called St Brutus' Insane Asylum for Hopeless Cases apparently terrified of even the ticking of the clock."
"Nothing less than they deserve," scowled Narcissa, earning a nod from Hadrian as he looked back to the group.
Which is inconsistent with a previous chapter, where Dumbledumb found out "Harry" isn't with the Dursleys. "That Freak isn't here" or something to that effect.
"And the Muggles?" asked Lucien.
"Well here's the strange thing," Hadrian answered, looking genuinely concerned as he explained, "Barely two days after Bellatrix found me, they were committed to somewhere called St Brutus' Insane Asylum for Hopeless Cases apparently terrified of even the ticking of the clock."
"Nothing less than they deserve," scowled Narcissa, earning a nod from Hadrian as he looked back to the group.
Which is inconsistent with a previous chapter, where Dumbledumb found out "Harry" isn't with the Dursleys. "That Freak isn't here" or something to that effect.
1/19 c12 tajarim
Flashbacks are used to impart knowledge about past events that the reader doesn't yet have. Author instead just copied wholesale from a previous chapter, as if not trusting the reader to remember.
Flashbacks are used to impart knowledge about past events that the reader doesn't yet have. Author instead just copied wholesale from a previous chapter, as if not trusting the reader to remember.
11/20/2022 c20 The Three March Hares
Well, it was good. Real good. Until the ending. Was kinda hoping that Hadrian would take over the world in to a new dark order. I mean, even Hermione had to murder her (fake) parents and Rosier was murdered by his child. Felt like you lost your nerve and decided to end it with Harry being *good* after all. Well, thanks for giving me a decent story to look forward to until those last two chapters.
Well, it was good. Real good. Until the ending. Was kinda hoping that Hadrian would take over the world in to a new dark order. I mean, even Hermione had to murder her (fake) parents and Rosier was murdered by his child. Felt like you lost your nerve and decided to end it with Harry being *good* after all. Well, thanks for giving me a decent story to look forward to until those last two chapters.
8/29/2022 c20 Michael
Hey there!
I don't really write reviews of fics ever (this might be my 1st review, definitely within the first 3), but I just want to say that I really appreciated this fic. I remember feeling a bit of Deja Vu when you started forming the brotherhood of shadows, but when I saw the title of Chapter 20 (The Acheron Requiem), I knew: it had to be a reference to the anime that I believe is the Greatest of All Time. Thanks for this masterpiece.
Hey there!
I don't really write reviews of fics ever (this might be my 1st review, definitely within the first 3), but I just want to say that I really appreciated this fic. I remember feeling a bit of Deja Vu when you started forming the brotherhood of shadows, but when I saw the title of Chapter 20 (The Acheron Requiem), I knew: it had to be a reference to the anime that I believe is the Greatest of All Time. Thanks for this masterpiece.
8/7/2022 c20 
1CautionTreeAhead
I have to say, this story, with over 1000 downloaded to my phone, was completely pointless. I can't even say that it's underwhelming due to that it would require an expectation of something good. Even if I don't like the story in the beginning I will finish it to say I gave it an honest try. I don't know if you want feedback on this or your writing style, but if you do, PM me and I will provide it.
1CautionTreeAheadI have to say, this story, with over 1000 downloaded to my phone, was completely pointless. I can't even say that it's underwhelming due to that it would require an expectation of something good. Even if I don't like the story in the beginning I will finish it to say I gave it an honest try. I don't know if you want feedback on this or your writing style, but if you do, PM me and I will provide it.