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6/5/2014 c6 Lili
This story is amazing! Is it over? I hope it isn't...
This story is amazing! Is it over? I hope it isn't...
4/7/2014 c6 
42englishtutor
This was powerful. Thank you for ending this in such a real way. "the fiend, whose eyes had opened just a crack, grew drowsy again" Well done!
42englishtutorThis was powerful. Thank you for ending this in such a real way. "the fiend, whose eyes had opened just a crack, grew drowsy again" Well done!
3/5/2014 c6 1Love At 221b
OhmaGod! I read your story a few days ago and loved it. And now you are following my story! :3 Please carry on! I'm going to follow this for sure!
1Love At 221bOhmaGod! I read your story a few days ago and loved it. And now you are following my story! :3 Please carry on! I'm going to follow this for sure!
2/28/2014 c6 22Ennui Enigma
"drank in the pain, letting it permeate her." - great use of words! They jump to life and dance so much more dramatically with their tutus of action verbs.
"abandoning her perfectly constructed world for the immediate warmth and safety of being held." - aw! Her world wasn't so perfect after all...
"John had made Sherlock believe that there was something in him that was worth saving." - such a lovely thought. One of my favourites.
*applause* A lovely finish to your story. Hope glimmers and pokes her nose out of the page, her frail petals just beginning to unfurl. *passes out more tea and biscuits*
22Ennui Enigma"drank in the pain, letting it permeate her." - great use of words! They jump to life and dance so much more dramatically with their tutus of action verbs.
"abandoning her perfectly constructed world for the immediate warmth and safety of being held." - aw! Her world wasn't so perfect after all...
"John had made Sherlock believe that there was something in him that was worth saving." - such a lovely thought. One of my favourites.
*applause* A lovely finish to your story. Hope glimmers and pokes her nose out of the page, her frail petals just beginning to unfurl. *passes out more tea and biscuits*
2/28/2014 c6 TheGyrhan
:) Not exactly a happy ending, but a complete one as you're going to get with this sort of story. Thank you.
:) Not exactly a happy ending, but a complete one as you're going to get with this sort of story. Thank you.
2/27/2014 c5 Ennui Enigma
How are you?... the eternal question of the masses. Do they really want to know? Most don't. I have a suspicion that Rachel's mum is more observant than her daughter gives her credit.
Rather handy to have a detective as a godfather. Takes a fair amount of bravery (or stupidity) to break open a person's illusions of secrecy.
I like the dialogue in this chapter. And lovely reminder that everyone has a choice. Although some may think otherwise, humans are not limp puppets in the inevitable hands of fate.
Quite an emotional conversation. Weary indeed.
How are you?... the eternal question of the masses. Do they really want to know? Most don't. I have a suspicion that Rachel's mum is more observant than her daughter gives her credit.
Rather handy to have a detective as a godfather. Takes a fair amount of bravery (or stupidity) to break open a person's illusions of secrecy.
I like the dialogue in this chapter. And lovely reminder that everyone has a choice. Although some may think otherwise, humans are not limp puppets in the inevitable hands of fate.
Quite an emotional conversation. Weary indeed.
2/26/2014 c4 Ennui Enigma
"splinter in their relationship" - like the analogy. works.
"I don't do it to order, Sherlock objected sulkily - hardly! LOL!
"as if she was an ill-fitting clue at a crime scene." - another lovely analogy.
Chapter begins to examine past as well as present now.
"splinter in their relationship" - like the analogy. works.
"I don't do it to order, Sherlock objected sulkily - hardly! LOL!
"as if she was an ill-fitting clue at a crime scene." - another lovely analogy.
Chapter begins to examine past as well as present now.
2/26/2014 c3 Ennui Enigma
"genetically the odds were very much stacked against you being anything other than a highly-intelligent adrenaline-addict." - true :)
"Yes, incessantly. It's extremely tedious" LOL!
"unlike the rest of us, who are in complete control of ourselves" - nice irony there, Sherlock!
Perfection is an illusion. Perhaps one day they will both better understand and accept that fact.
"genetically the odds were very much stacked against you being anything other than a highly-intelligent adrenaline-addict." - true :)
"Yes, incessantly. It's extremely tedious" LOL!
"unlike the rest of us, who are in complete control of ourselves" - nice irony there, Sherlock!
Perfection is an illusion. Perhaps one day they will both better understand and accept that fact.
2/26/2014 c2 Ennui Enigma
Boredom does have its dangers.
Seems most addictions are all about the same... trying to get at the dopamine reward system in the brain through unnatural means. Sherlock could definitely understand that.
I can't help you Rachel I... I can barely manage my own impulses." And there you have the connection. The wounded healer.
Boredom does have its dangers.
Seems most addictions are all about the same... trying to get at the dopamine reward system in the brain through unnatural means. Sherlock could definitely understand that.
I can't help you Rachel I... I can barely manage my own impulses." And there you have the connection. The wounded healer.
2/26/2014 c1 Ennui Enigma
Lovely beginning to your story. Informative but not too much so.
"wondered what it would be like if Sherlock was her dad, instead of John. Sherlock was more mysterious, more interesting… less angry." - ominous. of course, most girls her age do have illusions of someone else being their father. The "less angry" part doesn't bode well for the dear doctor though.
"cementing the reality of the situation, and it was horrible." - she needs the cementing though.
Kudos to you for writing about a controversial subject. I liked Sherlock's deductions though I'd have to say I'd more likely deduce domestic violence.
Some might say Sherlock is cruel to tell Rachel the truth and admit he is not capable of helping her. I think he's being his normal blunt and honest self. He is quite correct to realise he cannot solve her issues. And, well, being is natural Aspergers continuum self... he says things without empathy. Clueless.
Lovely beginning to your story. Informative but not too much so.
"wondered what it would be like if Sherlock was her dad, instead of John. Sherlock was more mysterious, more interesting… less angry." - ominous. of course, most girls her age do have illusions of someone else being their father. The "less angry" part doesn't bode well for the dear doctor though.
"cementing the reality of the situation, and it was horrible." - she needs the cementing though.
Kudos to you for writing about a controversial subject. I liked Sherlock's deductions though I'd have to say I'd more likely deduce domestic violence.
Some might say Sherlock is cruel to tell Rachel the truth and admit he is not capable of helping her. I think he's being his normal blunt and honest self. He is quite correct to realise he cannot solve her issues. And, well, being is natural Aspergers continuum self... he says things without empathy. Clueless.
2/25/2014 c4 Alice
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